| Title: Chapter 15 - He Lied
| 17 Aug 2008 2:19 am
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| Reviewer: pearlk9 (Anonymous)
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When I reviewed the last chapter I said I couldn’t wait for this one to be posted. Unfortunately I didn’t have much of a chance to read chapter 15 until now.
I thought the way you wrote about Harry’s soul searching was very realistic. Harry’s guilt about lying to Snape and not resolving the conflict between them made him grumpy to his friends, angry at Snape and even short tempered with himself. I think that for once Harry’s eavesdropping on the conversation between Snape and McGonagall was a good thing. I’m not sure Harry would have understood Snape’s feelings about their quarrel as well if he hadn’t heard their talk. I loved the comment when McGonagall told Snape to “Go deal with Harry or she would deal with him”. McGonagall sure pulled no punches with Snape in that talk!
Snape and Harry dealt with some very important issues that were still coming between them. I liked that Harry still stood up to Snape about mistakes made by both of them past and present while apologizing for lying and Snape admitted that they both were still learning to be father and son. The best part for me was that finally Harry told Snape –his Dad- that he loved him!
WHAT ON EARTH! THATS INTENSE! I loveeee this story! loveeee it! But I must admit to really not trusting our new potions mistress... and I still haven't forgotten the little fact that she knew everyone's first names in advance.. which made me think of Tonks. But naturally I'm not so sure about that now. Excellent story! I hope for an update when its convenient for you!
| Title: Chapter 9 - Faking
| 13 Aug 2008 4:55 am
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| Reviewer: KDuckeyD (Anonymous)
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Well thought out story line that keeps things interesting. Multiple characters who all have well defined personalities. Thanks for your hard work.
| Title: Chapter 16 - Bonded
| 10 Aug 2008 7:27 pm
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| Reviewer: Raeltsa (Anonymous)
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Wow, I can't wait for more!
I like Harry and Severus figuring out their relationship together. You're doing a nice job; thanks for your hard work.
Wonderful Chapter! I love how Harry is acting like a "normal" teenager! He so deserves that!
what? omg, he's a bit into the whole training thing, isn't he? the real harry had no training and he managed to get himself properly killed and resurrected.
| Title: Chapter 16 - Bonded
| 08 Aug 2008 2:44 pm
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| Reviewer: Mysterious Jedi (Anonymous)
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Poot Harry. Snape never gives him a break. Looking forward to more.
Well, that's one way to throw Harry in the deep end. I really liked the hug scene with Harry and Snape :D That was evil foreshadowing you put in; please don't kill off Severus. *begs*
Well, first of all, thank you for taking some time away from writing your thesis to write another chapter! It gave me a nice break from writing my own thesis! :) This is one of my favorite chapters yet. I love this story. You used a couple of literary devices here that I really liked. I liked how the chapter started out in the middle of the *action* and then went back to the beginning. And I liked the subtle use of foreshadowing throughout. Your writing was good to begin with, but I think it is getting even better with time!
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