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Title: Chapter 12 - A DA Meeting 29 May 2008 1:46 am
Reviewer: lilseverus (Anonymous) [Report This]
    LOL! That last scene wa hilarious! I can just imagine Snape speechless and staring at the group of "friends"! How did Harry persuade Draco to agree to come? I felt bad for Draco during the first DA meeting.... But what else was to be expected? Thank you for an update! Eagerly waiting for more!
Title: Chapter 12 - A DA Meeting 28 May 2008 11:02 pm
Reviewer: Lady Julie Snape (Anonymous) [Report This]
    ::cackles madly::

    I love it!

    Please update soon.

    Yours,
    Lady Julie Snape.
Title: Chapter 12 - A DA Meeting 28 May 2008 9:03 pm
Reviewer: Cecilia Farrell (Signed) [Report This]
    I forgot just how rich and beautiful this story is, i was rereading the first story and was wondering if Draco and Harry will become closer, and whether the distance and animosity between them is put on or real? That fire chess game was bloody brilliant, "but it was only a small fire..." lol. Will Draco come for Christmas to Snapedragon manor? that would be interesting.
    I like how you manage to capture little unexpected moments like the image of Snape's face at seeing Draco and Harry (probably slight dishevelled from their little scruff) going on a picnic, lol, it reminds me of that little scene (the best moment by far in you stories) where Snape tells Harry quite out of the blue, just before he gets on the train, that he is his son and that he loves him. Arh.
    Looking forward to more.
    Cecilia :)
Title: Chapter 12 - A DA Meeting 28 May 2008 8:15 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Hahahaa!!!!! I love it!! XD Too cute. LOL. i love dthis whole part:
    "We're going on a picnic, all of us," Harry announced recklessly.

    It was best sight ever, the look on Snape's face - that mix of shock and surprise and disbelief and everything else the stern man tried to keep under control, all there on his face.

    "Have a nice day," Harry smiled at Snape.

    LOL! The only thing is that the scene skip between when Draco roared that he would not go on a picnic, and the scene where he and Harry are ready could have been developed a little more. The skip is too brood, and makes them seem out of character. Now, if you had shown them beginning to fight, I think it would have brought to mind the other time they fought and came out okay with each other and then the scene jump wouldn't have felt like such a leap.

    I'm glad that the DA meeting went well. Great descriptions of when Malfoy took Harry's glasses. It was scary. I hope that Snape comes up with something to fix that - maybe fix his eyesight and wear the glasses with clear lenses so people THINK that his eyesight is still bad?

    Great chapter, and thanks for the update!!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks for your comments. I thought about showing that scene, but I thought it would be repetitive of all the fighting scenes that came before both in this story and its prequel.

    Also, in my writer's group, we were talking about gaps in stories where the reader's imagination must fill in the missing pieces. I was trying to do that - put some of the work on you to figure out what happened, but if it seemed too big a gap, I understand.

    Thanks - it's these observations that help me grow as a writer.

     Perry

Title: Chapter 12 - A DA Meeting 28 May 2008 7:44 pm
Reviewer: lily (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Another excellent chapter. I love the way you portray Harry. How he was worried that he was in trouble even though he did the right thing in the meeting. Him feeling emotional when Snape praised him. And of course, the cheeky bit, "Have a nice day," Lolz. That was priceless!
Title: Chapter 12 - A DA Meeting 28 May 2008 5:37 pm
Reviewer: kreacher (Signed) [Report This]
    this chapter was great, i can just picture the look on snapes face about the four going on a pic-nic, the da was very well written and they got alot done in that lesson
Title: Chapter 12 - A DA Meeting 28 May 2008 3:58 pm
Reviewer: Elphaba (Signed) [Report This]
    ROTFLMAO at that ending! Great Jo!
Title: Chapter 11 - Sore 02 May 2008 11:43 pm
Reviewer: Elphaba (Signed) [Report This]
    Cliffhanger!!!!! Great Great Story!!!
Title: Chapter 10 - Guilty 02 May 2008 11:36 pm
Reviewer: Elphaba (Signed) [Report This]
    Brilliant!
Title: Chapter 9 - Faking 02 May 2008 10:49 pm
Reviewer: Elphaba (Signed) [Report This]
    What a great Chapter!

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