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Reviews For O Mine Enemy
Author's Response: I'm liking these long chapters, too! They generate fun reviews! :) Thank you!
Anyway, the dialogue was really great in this chapter! I love how you write Harry. All of the "ums" seem to be perfectly placed, and his voice is just so...so...accurate, for lack of a better word. *is tired* I also loved how Harry kept trying to get into a fight with Snape, but he wouldn't allow Harry to make him angry. Although, for a minute there, I thought that crap was going to hit the fan. But, yay Snape! Way to hold it in! The anger, that is. This line was definitely my favorite and made me laugh outloud: “She sang to me,” Snape answered, surprising Harry by not kicking him out of the lab. "Oh." Yeah, definitely not going to ask Snape to do that. Just the thought would have been enough to cause Harry to shudder if he weren’t already shaking. **Loved it. LOVED IT!!! Oh, but Snape, I can sense you softening! A tad, anyway. He may not actually tuck Harry in, but I'll be he WANTS TO!! *points accusingly* Yes, Snape, you do. I just loved this chapter so much. I love your Harry. I love your Snape even more. I just....*sobs with joy* Thanks for the update :) You're the best! Author's Response: Haha! Snape humming a tune on his way down the corridors to Potions class...now that would probably cause more than a little shock to Hogwarts, yes? :) Thank you for the review! It made me smile so much to hear what you liked!
It is great fun watching Harry come to trust Snape even if he doesn't realize that is what he is doing. Poor Mrs. Figg. But she was a good choice to fill this role in the story. And I do believe that methinks Snape protests too much in this line: "“Prepare for bed, Potter. We will convene in your room in fifteen minutes. And I will not,” Snape repeated, lifting his chin, “be tucking you in, singing you to sleep, or otherwise acting in any way parental toward your wretched teenaged self.”" Author's Response: hehe, I'm glad I'm not the only one who liked that line! It doesn't mean so much to like it if I'm the one who wrote it... ;) Yes, poor Mrs. Figg. I had a hard time choosing her, since I like her & she really doesn't deserve it. But she made the most sense for my purposes. :( Protest too much, indeed... :)
Author's Response: Like fine wine! Yay! I must say, I have had an overwhelming request this round of reviews to either hear or not hear Snape sing. Haha! Thanks for the review!
I like how you balance everything in the story - the humor with the drama and tragic events (which thankfully never stray into melodrama), the tension in Snape and Harry's relationship, how they grudgingly yield to each other about certain things but remain at a stubborn "impasse" about others. I enjoyed Harry's attempts to study Snape... it's like a wildlife show with Harry tracking the Rare and Elusive Snape. And even though the story is from Harry's POV, I still felt for Snape when Harry railed at him to imagine what a life of deprivation is like; I didn't need to know his thoughts - I saw it in how you wrote his closed-off face and restrained anger (and just the fact that he kept the rage restrained for Harry's benefit says a lot). Now I can't wait to see what Snape has up his sleeve. If he's not going to sing to Harry (what a pity...), then what is he planning to do? And I love how he's so adamant about not being parental towards Harry - if he really did hate Harry completely, then being unparental would just go without saying. But the fact that Snape has to insist that he won't be parental shows that he thinks he's in danger of coddling the boy too much (it was lovely though to see him comfort Harry, in his own way, after Figg's death...) And I think you really hit upon something, in Harry appreciating Snape's straightforward way of answering his questions about Mrs. Figg's fate... Harry wants to be respected and treated like an adult, and the fact that Snape can be forthright with him must be very refreshing; he's not like anyone else in Harry's life - he doesn't sugarcoat things in the least, and Harry could come to see that as an important asset in a teacher who needs to train him in various war-related things. It could also be easier for Harry to talk about his feelings to someone whom he's come to trust, but doesn't get horrified by the abuse the way someone like Mrs. Weasley would (with all the attendant pitying and coddling). Author's Response: I have an image in my head of Harry the camera-laden photographer studying black-panther-like Snape, calculating & ready to pounce. It's not a pretty image, actually, but it made me laugh. Thanks for making me laugh! ;) When I made the decision to write this story from Harry's POV, I hoped I would be able to communicate Snape's emotions while still portraying him as incommunicative - difficult proposition, let me tell you, especially when you add in Harry's propensity to overlook the obvious sometimes! So I'm glad you were able to see something of his thoughts in that scene. It makes me happy. :) I loved the thought you put into Snape's assets for a potential teacher to Harry. Well thought out!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Author's Response: Sev is blushing. I shouldn't have told him I added that last line... Oops. ;) Glad you enjoyed it!
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Love that. Thrilled to see a new chapter. Your slow progression of the changes in Harry and Snape's relationship is believable and stays nicely in character. Well done. Author's Response: Thank you! I had the whole chapter written, then added that last line on a whim. :) I'm glad you liked it!
AWESOME. Although I admit that they don't trust each other, I think that maybe Snape is in the best position out of all the adults Harry knows because firstly, Harry knows (or thinks XD) that Snape doesn't give a damn about him, and is probably a little bit more open around him than anyone else. Purely because there aren't really any consequences to telling someone who hates you that you have bad dreams, or whatever, and also because that person is less inclined to act anything other than professional (or, you know, a step down from professional, whatever you call that) towards you, so there isn't any weird emotional baggage. Um, yeah. The point of that was that I luff XD Seriously. ALSO I really like how Harry is like this perfect mix of bad communication, stubborness, dry humour and general teenage-ness. "And there had better not be any singing." Le sigh. So perfect XD I love it when Harry still comes across as funny and like a normal teenager. I can't tell you how many stories I've read where it's been like, My name is Harry Potter. I live on the planet ANGST, in the town of ANGSTville, and I go to ANGSTwarts school of ANGSTardry and ANGSTcraft. Oh yeah. I'm totally ANGSTY and not fun :C Also your Snapey ... so perfect. I luff XD If I didn't think he'd totally hex me into next week I'd give him a big fat hug. You get a million points, Snapey, because Kirby Lane has written you awesomely. And you are totally made of something more awesome than awesome (actually, that applies to both of you - Snapey and Kirby Lane XD) XD Author's Response: I agree with your analysis of Snape's ability to be what Harry needs. Well thought out! I laughed when I read your ANGSTastic summary of those ANGST-overload stories! ;) (Not to bash them - I admire every writer who takes the time to put their stories into words. It's the only way one can learn to grow as a writer, after all.) I do try to put some lightness into my story, because not only does it make it fun to write, but I don't want to ever delve so far into angst, despair, what have you, that humor can never be found again. After all, the world may not be easy all the time, but it certainly doesn't have to always be taken drastically serious, either. :) And thank you for the awesome awesomeness radiating from you! |
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