I love this story. It is so very sad. Your Harry is spot on. Everyone is.
hm, first reaction: poor Harry!
now, with a few weeks having passed by... I still think poor thing, but I do not want him to jump off a bridge anymore ;)
It will be a hard and trying time for him. But he is not Harry at the moment and he might/ought to try and make friends in Slytherin and to learn about them, from them ... sort of.
Imho, since he's so close to his Owl, he needs a (new) pet. Someone he can talk to and cuddle and talk about his feelings and thoughts.
Okay, just my thoughts at this point.
*chases after her own new pet, which is playing havok with her desk right now*
| Title: Chapter 11
| 12 Aug 2008 4:16 pm
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| Reviewer: anon (Anonymous)
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"Bueller?... Bueller?... Bueller?"
(In case you're too young to recognize this quote, it basically means, "Are you out there?"...)
Oh, I just love your story and I hope that you are going to update soon. I am really anxious for Harry to find out that Snape is his father.
I like that you don`t make Snape too mushy, I really hate when then happens in stories; but I like that he is gradually beginning to be nicer to Harry without it changing his basic character.
It would be true to character for Snape not to show his emotions easily, and giving Harry breakfast and reqassuring him that Lupin is not really mad at him; in a roundabout way, are really in character.
Please don`t abandon this story; you have left me on eggshells. Good job.
| Title: Chapter 5
| 02 Jul 2008 9:01 am
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| Reviewer: CJ Masters (Anonymous)
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Just wanted to drop a line saying while I think that you have done a good job keeping Snape and Harry in character, Lupin doesn't seem to be, especially in his response to Harry's actions and obvious confusion.
Just a quick adendum. I remember that Harry WILL be sorted into Slytherin. Is that when he will slit his wrists?
~Lesley~
Well, I gritted my teeth and forced myself to get this far. And that is not an indictment of your writing--that is wonderful and you paint a very vivid picture.
It is just that my heart bleeds for Harry. He has absolutely no-one and nothing. Snape hates him, Lupin seems to hate him, all of the Weasleys except maybe Ginny hate him, and even Fang would have nothing to do with him. He can't even see hedwig.
On top of that, Ron, Fred and George seem to be plotting how to ambush him at the earliest possible time.
I ask you, what is the point? This kid will be so depressed, all he will want to do is slit his wrists and maybe then, Snape would be happy. I don't even know why they are worried about keeping Harry out of harm's way. Normally Snape would be happy to think of HArry being under Fudge's control. Harry isn't needed to save the wizarding world anymore, so why do they care? And it can't all be because Lupin would feel guilty if they deserted him.
I really will scream if Harry is sorted into Slytherin and has to become friends with Malfoy.
I have to go and take a calming draught now.
~Lesley~
I have already left a review telling you the chapter was great because I could feel Harry's emotions. I thought that I would tell you a few things that I found particularly effective. I liked it that Harry described his eyes as watering. A boy his age would not want to admit to himself that he was crying. Because the story is told from Harry's perspective, we know that Harry's feelings toward Snape are changing in that he wants to please Snape. He doesn't understand why this is happening but he knows that it is happening. He may subconscioulsy recognize that Snape is treating him better, but he does not seem to realize it at a conscious level, which is interesting. Also since the story is told from Harry's perspective, we can't know if Snape's feelings are also changing towards Harry but there are some potential signs. Snape apparantly got angry at Harry for not learning the 18 plants used in first year potions, but look at it from his perspective. He had given Harry the book that contained the answers. He gave Harry an opportunity to explain why he was not prepared. Harry did not give an explanation. (To me, the problem is that poor Harry is so depressed that he cannot concentrate on studying, but Harry is not self-aware enough to recognize this and even if he recognized it, he would not feel comfortable confiding in Snape). Nevertheless, he does not yell or belittle Harry. He just tells him to learn it. When Harry's eyes start "watering" Snape does not get all lovey dove etc . but he does tell Harry that Lupin is just acting. He also appears to understand that Harry has reason to be unhappy i.e. Snape tells Harry that he is needs to be unhappy and resentful to successful play the role that Harry has been assigned and then Snape comments that this should not be difficult for Harry to accomplish since he has no reason to be happy. At one point, Harry seems to subconsciously recognize that Snape might be acknowledging Harry's feelings i.e. "Snape left him hanging, neither adding fuel to his anger nor trying to placate him--not that Harry thought the latter was a possibility." I am sure placating Harry was not a possibility so Snape did the only thing that could be done in the situation--which was keep his mouth shut and listen. Snape made sure Harry had breakfast. From Harry's perspective, Snape rudely told Harry to mind his table manners and to wash his face. I have told my childen to mind their manners and wash their faces, but I don't think I have ever told anyone else to do. Now I am not Snape, so maybe he regularly gives these orders to just anyone, but generally that is the kind of statement that comes from a parent.
| Title: Chapter 11
| 26 Jun 2008 4:25 am
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| Reviewer: NotEvenHere (Anonymous)
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Everything seems very hopeless for Harry. I really don't know how he can stand to even go about his daily life. I am not so sure that death would not be preferable to this. He's got nothing and really, neither Snape nor Lupin show any signs that he ever will. I hope you meant to do this, cause I am seriously depressed now. LOL
poor harry!
i'm so glad you updated. this is a very original and different fic, and unlike JKR, you have drawn a finely nuanced picture of Harry's inner state. please keep it up!
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