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Title: Chapter 11 25 Jun 2008 12:19 am
Reviewer: any (Anonymous) [Report This]
    is lupin really mad at Harry?

    Gosh poor harry thats gotta kill

    is Harry going to be in slytherin? Cause I've read ur other stories and I can't really see Draco being nice or protective.
    I don't know I just hope Harry doesn't get a bad view of the Weasleys and lines up with Malfoy in any case.
Title: Chapter 11 24 Jun 2008 10:56 pm
Reviewer: Lio Saoirse (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Really good! Lio
Title: Chapter 11 23 Jun 2008 4:22 am
Reviewer: veritas427 (Signed) [Report This]
    This is a great story. I love your plot idea, and although you claim it to be another severitus, there seems to be a lot of originality to it. Thank you for updating, and hopefully you will be writing more soon. I can't wait to find out more about what will be happening.
Title: Chapter 11 23 Jun 2008 1:54 am
Reviewer: Kodak717 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I was so glad to see that you updated! Truthfully, I was starting to think you lost interest (which I HOPE never happens). This is a very well crafted story, and it invariably leaves me wanting just one more chapter. If I were in Harry's shoes, I'm afraid I wouldn't be dealing with things nearly as well as he is. Keep up the good work and PLEASE don't leave us hanging for very long.

    Author's Response:

    No, I haven't lost interest. It has been just as frustrating for me to not be able to find time (without taking time away from real life obligations or needs... like sleep LOL) to update the darn thing. Now that it's summer I have more time, although I did somewhat overestimate how much more time I would have. I'm already well into writing chapter 12, so the next update is definitely not going to take as long as this last one did.

    I'm really glad you're ejoying it.

    If I were Harry, I wouldn't stand for a lot of what's going on, but canon Harry tends to keep his head down and wait it out, until something causes him to explode (like the Aunt Marge episode). For now he sees the importance of not screwing up the 'plan', and that's preventing him from exploding in a major way.

Title: Chapter 11 23 Jun 2008 12:13 am
Reviewer: J (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Well, there is emotional abuse to think about here, truthfully. What you've done to Harry is uproot him, turn someone he looked up to and trusted against him, throw him in with someone who hates him and will look for ways to punish him, turn his other friends against him, force him to adopt a persona that will keep everyone alienated from him...

    Yes, it's "for his own good." However, a mentally broken, emotionally abused kid is no better than one who doesn't exist at all.

    You're doing an excellent job writing this.. However, I fear your desire to keep Snape from becoming "mother of the year" and Harry from becoming a puddle of goo has caused you to make Snape even worse and Harry's life even harder.

    Harry's starting to care about what Snape thinks because Snape is the one in charge of him. He's already an abused kid, so he's going to crave approval from any guardian he has, even if there is mutual loathing between him and the guardian. Seeking Snape's approval while Snape is a bastard is NOT a good thing for Harry's mental state. At all. He won't learn any important lessons that way.. Rather, he'll learn how to morph himself into what Snape wants. He's picking up what he has to do to please others, not what will help him settle down emotionally.

    Visits with Ron are actually a bad idea. He can't tell Ron everything, so any visit is going to be superficial and frustrating. To have that occur on a regular basis might sound appealing right now, but it won't stay that way. It will only enhance this double role Harry is playing, and cause him to have to weave an even larger web of lies. That is also a bad idea for him emotionally.
Title: Chapter 11 22 Jun 2008 10:49 pm
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I agree with wynnleaf; Snape, for him, is making an effort. But he doesn't quite twig to the fact that Harry's guardians didn't care about his school performance, and thus he has established no study habits at all. What he needs is a lot of structure, and no 'you-decide-what-you need-to-do' stuff. And on some level, Harry wants that structure, and is beginning to want Snape to take charge of it, and give him both direction and approval. I'm not sure that Snape, as conceived here, can do that, which obviously going to lead to all types of trouble.

    I didn't think Harry's comment was rude, but I guess it was delivery.

    And good for Ginny.
Title: Chapter 11 22 Jun 2008 2:50 pm
Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed) [Report This]
    Actually Snape is rather better in this chapter, it's just that he's pretty aloof to Harry and not acting what would be "caring" for most people. But he isn't angry at Harry for any altercation with Lupin. He tries to get him to finish breakfast. He, albeit impatiently, gives Harry a calming draught when Harry's getting too upset, and he does try to explain and remind Harry about the fact that they are playing roles and they have to stick to them.

    What I particularly like about this story is Snape and Lupin being in such difficult circumstances themselves (risking their lives/freedom and such for Harry), playing roles, Snape dealing with this new situation with his son, etc., because all of this stress for Snape and Lupin makes the ability to support or help Harry far more problematic.

    One thing that I don't think either Snape or Lupin see is that, to whatever extent, they do have each other for some emotional support through this highly stressful situation, whereas Harry doesn't really have either one, what with Snape still disliking him and Lupin having to play a role of not really knowing Harry, and also having so many of his own concerns.

    I'm curious as to what will change Snape's opinion of Harry, by the way. Harry needs some sort of father figure so badly, that he may gradually want that from Snape (his approval, etc), even without Snape changing, and I think you're already hinting at that. But what will change Snape's viewpoint?
Title: Chapter 11 22 Jun 2008 7:35 am
Reviewer: kelly (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Poor baby

    unfortuantely this wasn't one of your better chapters: 8

    please update soon!

    Author's Response:

    Unless you explain what made this chapter "not one of my better," an "8" has no meaning at all by itself. I'm open to constructive criticism and suggestions for improvements, so it would be helpful if reviewers would state what was the weak (or strong) point in a particular chapter.

    I'm glad you're enjoying the story. :-) 

Title: Chapter 11 21 Jun 2008 8:45 pm
Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) [Report This]
    You are writing this story extremely well.

    I absolutely detest Lupin -- he seems so weak! I also detest Snape because he is just so Snapeish and feel horribly sorry for Harry who is left with absolutely nothing and no one.

    This is a Severitus, so I'm guessing that Snape already knows that he is Harry's father and that's why he has guardianship. He doesn't seem to have any understanding of Harry's previous life or really, any understanding of Harry either. I'm hoping, though, that there is some caring there for Harry that has made him and Lupin concoct this whole plan rather than let Harry be made a ward of Fudge or the ministry.

    Author's Response:

    Snape's never liked Harry, and he hasn't been given any reason for his feelings to change. When you don't like someone, you aren't very motivated to understand them. He's got blinders on, for sure, but he might turn out to have good reason for it.

Title: Chapter 11 21 Jun 2008 8:35 pm
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, poor Harry, what a mess! Not liking Snape, but caring whether or not he is pleased with him... that must be tough! What tension and misery in this chapter. i think maybe Ginny should befrind him. :) He needs a friend, and she seems to be able to at least talk to him.

    Good chapter, thanks for updating!

    Author's Response:

    Ah, but think about what a friendship with Ginny would mean. The rest of the Weasley gang are already not very kind to Hadrian. Does he need more on his plate?  :0)


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