Great chapter. I like the way you have the Trio agree to a Fidelius Charm regarding Snape's secrets and am glad that you had Snape insist on this. Somehow, if left up to Dumbledore, it doubt it would have happened that way. I don't actually think it's right that Harry assumes it's *his* call about what he can tell Ron and Hermione, when it is Snape's life at risk. I don't care for the way in Deathly Hallows that Dumbledore keeps vital information from Snape because he's concerned that Voldemort could possibly get it, yet allows Harry to pass the same info along to Ron and Hermione. Either Ron or Hermione, in DH, could easily have ended up captured and forced to give up those secrets, having none of the abilities at secret keeping that Snape had.
Loved the chapter. And I love your dry, witty Snape. Keep up the awesome work. I'm a total fan.
I like how you portrayed the relationship of the Trio and their support of Harry. I'm glad they thought of a way to appease Snape's very reasonable concerns. I'm looking forward to how this will change the rest of what happens in Year 5, and really interested to see how Snape and Harry's relationship changes.
Very intense chapter. I understand that Dumbledore needed to orchestrate many things to win the war, but his method of manipulating Snape in canon really bothered me, and you have captured the feel of that well in this chapter.
Yikes! Umbridge's sudden appearance really made my stomach queasy (good job on the writing!). Wasn't expecting that!
Loved the conversation between Snape and Harry (getting their stories straight) and it shows what they've been through that they can communicate in this way.
I also loved the talk with Ron and Hermione and how quickly they agreed to take the Fidelius Charm. They've always been terrific as a trio! You kept it completely in character for me.
Eagerly waiting for the next chapter!
| Title: Chapter 14
| 04 Nov 2007 8:51 am
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| Reviewer: Sage (Anonymous)
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That's was great. I sat for like 10 minutes after saying to myself why did I have to read it when you'd only written up to chapter 14! What a cliffhanger! AHH! Can't wait to read what happens next.
| Title: Chapter 14
| 18 Oct 2007 4:49 pm
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| Reviewer: Smelly Cat (Anonymous)
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"Where is the memorie Potter?" Snape asked with an eyebrow raised slightly.
"Um..I..I ate it?." Lol
You made me cry in this chapter so much emotion! I love this story I have recomended it in my Yahoo group and many other groups I have coe across. I have tried to post a review for other chapters but I couldn't read the sercurity code, lol. I need new glasss. :)
Please update soon! I think you play Harry and Snape beautifully!
I hope Harry doesn't do something he will regret in later chapters.
Like kill Dumbledore, lol :)
I can not beleave this is your first fanfic!!
I am giving this chapter a ten just like I give every one of your chapters.
I am so sad that I read this chapter, now I don't have anything to read!
boohoo! :(
Please update soon!
| Title: Chapter 14
| 18 Oct 2007 6:02 am
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| Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous)
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What an exciting almost conclusion!!
| Title: Chapter 14
| 14 Oct 2007 8:20 am
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| Reviewer: lilyseverus (Anonymous)
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AHHHHH! A cliffhanger....noooooo....
please, please update I want to find out what Severus will say to Dumbledore!!!
You did a very realistic job with the interaction between Harry and Severus. They know that things have changed, but haven't been able to completely integrate that into their lives yet. I loved that Snape gave Harry a good memory, but chuckled at the "Sickening, wasn't it?"
I know you're playing with the tense of your writing, and the story is still great, but I think I prefered the previous style better. This tense is really hard to get right. It's powerful when you do it perfectly, but can be clunky and detract from the story otherwise. This is just my two-cents worth.
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