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Reviews For To Have a Father
Title: Strange 08 Aug 2008 9:13 am
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed) [Report This]
    Thanks for this most recent chapter!
Title: Storytelling 08 Aug 2008 8:29 am
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed) [Report This]
    I REALLY like the backstory you've given this Severus. It's believable, and helps shape our understanding of him. Good job!
Title: Illness 08 Aug 2008 8:28 am
Reviewer: trust severus spy (Signed) [Report This]
    Where Sev is telling Sirius “You will refrain yourself from referring to me as your lovebug, Black...,” there's a small correction needed.

    He could say one of two phrases.
    Either: "You will refrain from calling me" (WITHOUT using the word 'yourself');
    Or change the verb: "You will RESTRAIN yourself from calling me".

    "Restrain" is a reflexive verb, meaning it gets used with a "-self"word (oneself, yourself, himself, etc.).

    The verb "refrain" is not reflexive, so it does not get used with a helping "self" word.

    You're a good writer with good ideas. Not being critical here--just helping you fine-tune your skills. Forgive my impertinence; I mean it in a friendly way.

    Author's Response: Well thank you, I really appreciate that! I'll fix that error as soon as I can and again, thank you for pointing it out to me.
Title: Strange 07 Aug 2008 1:43 am
Reviewer: celestialuna (Signed) [Report This]
    Good chapter.
Title: Strange 04 Aug 2008 10:22 pm
Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) [Report This]
    Argh! How can you leave us there?!!!!

    OK, my initial auto-response to your cliffie is accomplished. Now I can review.

    I'm really enjoying this story and love the personalities of all the characters. Sirius is absolutely shameless, isn't he? At least when it comes to indulging his sweet tooth. But I think my favourite relationship i nteh story is that between Sev and Harry. I like how it's developing. And I like how realistic the adjustments that Harry is making are. Great job!
Title: Strange 04 Aug 2008 9:22 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, you left us hanging.

    I'm kind of surprised that Severus left Harry alone; I'm surprised that he didn't lose his temper and break the door down; that would have been more in character with the temper that we know he has.

    Hope you update soon; because I really want to know why Harry screamed. Oh no; don't tell me that Harry returned to his own universe.
Title: Strange 04 Aug 2008 8:53 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    AHHHH! you cliff hanger people you. I swear it is a conspiracy. Three stories that I am reading all had cliffhangers.

    Ok, Harry should have let his dad speak. Severus should have yelled through the floor "There is already a cure .... and you're grounded."
Title: Townspeople 02 Aug 2008 6:09 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    ha that was really funny. Sirius does not strike me as a gay man at all. Nope he strikes me as a kind of Don juan sort. it's nice to see that other people are concerned about Harry and not just wizards either.
Title: Return 02 Aug 2008 6:06 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    yay, Harry's staying! I had hoped he would, after all in this reality he gets the one thing he's always wanted, a home and a family!
Title: Snape's Pensieve 02 Aug 2008 6:01 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    I would like to see Lily in this story, she would add a new dimension to it. Although I'm enjoying the interaction between harry and Sirius and I really hope they can exchange the two Snapes. The scenes in the pensieve were both amusing and heartrending.

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