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Reviews For The Poor of God
I literally felt Snape's pain in the last few paragraphs. I think Harry has a right to be confused, but you could tell he regretted those words the second they left his mouth. However, a slight hitch in their growing relationship is only realistic. It's not like they're going to suddenly become best buds. Somehow, the way you describe Harry's actions--like when he stared at the book without reading--seems to just say so much about the hurricane of emotions going on inside of him. It's brilliant. And it makes my heart ache for the both of them. Another beyond-amazing chapter. I might just be able to get through the rest of my day after reading that ;) Author's Response: I really wanted to write that scene from Snape's POV for my own benefit---you experience it more fully from his perspective, because Harry is so overwhelmed and so inclined to mistrust it, that he's not going to notice it in much detail---whereas everything Snape does is very...deliberate.
Ok, as if that wasn't enough to make me go all *sniff* and *gasp, choked up* - I didn't even see the end of this chapter coming! Aw, Snape, you big cuddly avenger you! Seriously, Branwyn, I am enjoying this story so very much. I feel like crying with Harry, and it doesn't even have to do with the fact that I'm stuck at work for another entire day. Thank you for the awesome reading!
I liked that she didn't miss a beat with Harry and playing along with his dreams. And the magic cupboard was sweet. :)
Author's Response: Actually, that's exactly what I hope to do for a living, so...thanks :)
I like how he's protective of her, and thinks that if she would only turn her mind to defending herself, she could do a spectacular job of it. She could, too. But that isn't how Luna's mind works. She might step up to defend someone else, but she will just accept poor treatment for herself. And it was touching, to me at least, when Snape also recognized that trait in Harry, and connected Luna (a child that he can admit he's fond of and wants to protect) and Harry (whom he's learning to be fond of, even if he isn't quite ready to see that yet). Loved the reference to "The Secret Garden". It's one of my favorite books, although I like "A Little Princess" better even if Sara is a tad bit too perfect. The conversation between Dumbledore and Snape was great. I'd have loved to have seen more of their relationship in canon. Theirs is such an intense, private connection, and we see so little of it. You write them wonderfully well! And Harry's awake and better! I was so glad that that horrible potion has worn off. But I wanted to shake Snape for leaving him so soon afterwards. Of course it's understandable, predictable even, that Snape would leave because he's so unsettled in his feelings about Harry just then. I just wanted to hug Harry when he broke the potion bottle and wanted to cry. That poor kid has been through so much already, and he's so brave and strong about it all. I guess that's why he's a Gryffindor and I never would be. Of course he would rather take off to the infirmary than face Snape and admit to weakness (in Harry's eyes). He's got to be very unsettled around Snape too. After all that Snape has done to him, it's not easy to accept that things are changing. Of course I knew Harry would run into Vernon Dursley, but I was surprised and delighted that Snape was so close on Harry's heels. I loved, loved, loved how Snape jumped in to protect Harry, and then went to comfort him! What an incredible moment! Please write more soon!!! Please!
Whenever anyone drinks tea they have it with Cream. I have just seen Luna at breakfast reaching for the cream jug. In UK I don't think I've ever encountered anyone who drinks tea with cream. We might have a 'Cream Tea', but that is a Pot of Tea plus a Scone with jam and cream eaten in the afternoon. The usual thing 'in' tea is Milk. Real tea fans often drink it black and some have lemon (a slisce of that is not juice). I think Snapey might be a tea-with-lemon person (I think I may come to regret that remark) or maybe a Jean Luc Picard type 'Tea, Earl Grey, Hot.' It is a very minor niggle I know but I just thought I'd post it. A withering response from Snape will be acceptable if that is my fate. One question as well. Why do you use the present tense? This is more from the better half than from me. I think it makes us feel more 'in' the story but what is your 'take' on it? Please keep writing. Author's Response: I didn't realize there was a cream vs milk tea use distinction in the UK. That's very interesting, and I thank you for pointing it out. Dedicated, inveterate tea drinkers such as myself as more a rarity than not in the US, so I don't have a cultural milieu to draw from---I used to drink my tea black, but then I found a wonderful chai that goes beautifully hot with half and half (I don't know if that's used in the UK, but it's half whole cream, half milk, and people usually use it in coffee). Considering that the milk in my refrigerator tends to be thin and watery, I don't use it in anything, much less ruin my tea with it. :-) Why present tense: good question. But if you look back over my other stories posted at my website and livejournal, you'll see I use it far more often than not. I think, honestly, that I tried it for an experiment once, and found that it shook me loose of my preconceptions of what a story "had" to be---I was no longer bound to make my prose sound like any of my literary forbears because my brain was convinced I was doing something entirely different. It freed me up. And now I'm comfortable with it, because there's less safety in the present tense---nothing has already happened, and therefore anything can happen. Whenever I start trying to write past tense now I find myself slipping into present automatically. :) I hope that makes sense to the---two? of you. Rest assured I will continue to write.
Thanks for the Long Chapter, it's a godsend for a slow day at work lol. I am really enjoying your reluctant Snape, and following his progress in learning how to care for another individual. Your Luna is still my favorite, and I'm hoping she's the one you'll pair Harry with. Harry is so mature for his age, and pairing him with Ginny has always felt wrong as she's only as mature as a (pre)teen can be. I don't think she has the courage and fortitude to handle the dangers in Harry's life. (and yes, I was hearing echoes of Captain Jack while typing that) |
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