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Reviews For The Poor of God
I loved the chapter. Leave it to Harry to come out of this mess quicker than normal. He is just so unpredictable in everything, isn't he? And Snape admitting that he is fond of Luna was priceless. I'm sure he is drawn to her somewhat for the fact that she is such an outcast among her peers. That he recognizes how unique she is despite (or because of) her strangeness is amazing. I think most people would truly write her off as just being loony. So, I found myself feeling like I was watching some scary movie when I was reading the last parts of this chapter. You know, the kind where the stupid woman, with a mass murderer chasing her, goes upstairs to get away from him. And all you can say is "Hey! Stupid woman! Don't go upstairs, you idiot! That's how I felt when Harry was writing the note to Snape. "No, Harry, don't go to the Hospital Wing!" I could almost hear the evil, scary music playing in my head. Anyway, poor Harry! One of his last sanctuaries from Vernon is no more. How nightmarish for him to come across his uncle at Hogwarts. Thank God Snape found the note (I'm assuming) so quickly. Can't wait to see what happens to Vernon now. BTW, I'm extremely impressed that Snape controlled himself so well. I thought for sure that Vernon was a goner. The last bit was very touching, with Harry trying to control his emotions and Snape actually allowing Harry to see some of his emotions. Another step in the right direction, I'd say. Well, thanks for the update. Waiting patiently for the next....Take care. Author's Response: I actually do most of the writing in this story by hand, in a notebook in a spot at the bottom of my garden, and then bring it back inside and type it up and edit it. Still, I have been working on it fairly nonstop for the last week or so---but when reviews like yours are my reward, how could I resist? :-) Tell me about the evil scary music---the theme to Halloween, perhaps? :-) Poor Harry, he's a sucker for narrative inevitability. Anyway, don't feel too bad for Harry---Snape's actions would have proven to him that even if Hogwarts isn't always safe for him, there is always help to be found there. :)
Firstly: Snapey, you crazy, crazy mofo. Think you can just go off and convince yourself in your office while Harry is sitting there all sad and alone? Nuh-uh! I bet you were sitting there for like, ten minutes, finally discovered that, shoved somewhere back in your mind you DO have a conscience, went back to the room, discovered Harry's note (with a few nice interrrupted beats of your heart, because that would not only prove it exists but also that you do like Harry, but only to yourself, because the rest of this story's fan collection has known since day one XD) and then began to catch up with Harry because you know he's in pain and you probably want to ingrain it in his thick head that asking you for something is a good thing, and that you don't intend to deny him anything. Secondly: I love love LOVE how you made Dumbledore. I will explain. ATM I am reading this very nice Harry/Snape gen fanfiction, which is very well written, etc etc. I would have no problem with it except for the fact that it's all like DUMBLEDORE IS EVUL which I don't like because personally I think he's just an old man with too much power (and therfore responsibility), who knows that he's the only one with the answers because no one else wants to step up to the plate. Therefore your whole Dumbledore-Snape convo was really nice because the answers Dumbledore gives are the answers that JKR's Dumbledore would give. So like fifteen million bajillion two-thumbs-up. Thirdly: I really love how you still give loads of detail into other characters even when they're not speaking or when the focus is on something else. Like this: ""I did not," Snape tells him. "It was Miss Lovegood's doing. No, I do not know how she managed it either. I left them alone for a time, and when I returned—" Snape spreads his hands and shrugs." I can just imagine Dumbledore opening his mouth up in the middle of the sentence, or some expression of surprise/confusion crossing his face while Snape is saying that. Yeah. Fourthly: OMG SNAPE/HARRY LUFF. Try to hide it all you want Snapey ... XDD Fifthly: VERNON! I like cracked up into insane laughter at Vernon's "punishment" both at the hands of Dumbledore and Snape. Well, not that the reason that Snape was attempting to kill Vernon was funny, except that it was because I was all like I KNEW IT BIATCH. I luff Snape who is all like (to steal the phrase) I KEEL YOU!!!11 Yeah. Also, like seriously, Dumbledore was totally directing the conversation with Vernon - he totally wanted Vernon to not get things so he could be all like, srsly, it was the last resort, I HAD to. (liar) And on a side note: Every time I review I do try to make it serious, but then it all just gets away from me ... I think it must be the excitement of having the next installment of this story in my grubby paws. I do not think there is a way for me to be serious over something I love so much XD Also, sorry how this entire review is like one huge run-on sentence. Snape: I love you. Seriously XD Author's Response: The scene you describe that led to Snape intercepting Vernon's attack on Harry is...rather close to what did happen, actually. :) But you will discover the details in full another time. I know exactly what you mean about evil!Dumbledore---for some reason he is a staple in Snape/Harry gen. Dumbledore, Luna, Snape, and Harry are all four equally my favorite characters. I am passionate in my defense of Dumbledore. I actually just wrote a long essay about him in my LiveJournal. The conversation he had with Snape is sort of like my answer to all the spurious charges that fandom likes to lay at his feet. He is desperately flawed, but also a deeply loving and compassionate person and Harry is the apple of his eye. Dumbledore would certainly like to give vent to his feelings and punish Vernon for what he's done to Harry---but he's lived so long and seen so much that he knows revenge ultimately isn't very satisfying. The real triumph is changing a person's mind, not breaking their face. And so he continues attempting to reason with Vernon---even if his patience gives way now and again. Please do not apologize for anything about your reviews. You are among the handful of readers whose reviews I look forward to more than anyone else's. Your enthusiasm is absolutely buoyant, and the main reason I'm moved to work so steadily on the story. And now a word from Professor Snape: Madam: The offer of your affection, however sincerely tendered, must be declined, as the nature of my work prevents me forming attachments of that kind. If, however, you would care to step up and see my etchings, perhaps we could come to some sort of temporary arrangement. Sincerely, Severus Snape
Now, go get some sleep! ;-) Author's Response: Yes, get some sleep and update your stories. :-) Ah, sleep deprived writing, nothing like it...
Author's Response: It is a very great relief to know you think this is the best chapter because it's the only one I've posted while too tired to really adequately focus on the editing---I felt like every sentence I wrote was an enormous clunker. But I did put a lot of effort into Snape's thoughts on Luna, and the conversation with Dumbledore, and of course Snape saving Harry was very important to me. I have trouble with action especially, so I'm glad to hear it was all comprehensible, at least. :-)
Author's Response: Don't throw roses, throw me the next chapter of your story! :-) And thank you.
Poor Harry - having to put up with Vernon's abuse again - maybe Snape can Hex his hands to fall off if he touches Harry again!! The conversation between Severus and Dumbledore was fantastic - it really conveyed the regret Albus had when he realized what his decisions had let Harry in for, even though his reasons for not taking Harry in himself make only too much sense given what occurred in 'Deathly Hallows'! I guess I'm glad that Snape didn't kill Vernon - it's be hard to hide that whale's body after all (Hee!), and I love that his first instinct was to go comfort Harry, and leave off torturing Vernon until Harry's not around to see it (*crosses fingers*)! And Snape's got a soft spot for Luna - YES!! I'm so glad that someone's looking out for her, since it seems like Flitwick can't be arsed to do it! I do hope that Harry's not feeling to awkward around Luna like he's currently feeling around Snape, although I suppose Harry would find it difficult to be seen as being so weak in front of him, even given their new détante. As for your response, just hearing from you yourself would be fine, as I'm afraid that Snape would give me detention for not going back and putting Professor in front of his name every time I typed it!! LOL!! Really terrific chapter, and as always I look forward to more! Scarlett Author's Response: Snape has something rather more inventive in mind for Vernon Dursley. :-) And, yes, Harry feels much differently about being vulnerable in front of Luna than he does about being vulnerable in front of Snape. Like chalk and cheese, really. I am glad you enjoyed the dialogue between Snape and Dumbledore, because it's very important to me to get across that Dumbledore is not a villain, and that he loves Harry very much.
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