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Reviews For The Poor of God
The main thing I would work on for the time being is your descriptions. While your character descriptions are very well done, the setting descriptions are rather lacking. It would make the story more vivid and allow reader to have a clearer picture in their mind. Overall, the story is extremely well written and I look forward to reading each chapter. I would also like to take this time to compliment you on your ingenious method of procuring reviews. Professor Snape may choose whichever attitude he would like for this review. I highly doubt that we would be able to stop him in any case. Author's Response: Madam: I confess myself astonished upon receipt of your missive. I say nothing regarding your effrontery in advancing an opinion where you have little reason to suspect it is wanted; I am all too aware the young are set on this earth for no other purpose than to flaunt their astonishing ignorance. Rather, I find myself wonder how, in consideration of the fact that you never once gave evidence of having mastered basic verb conjugation in five years of Potions essays, you came by the sheer bloody nerve to set yourself up as a critic of anyone's grammer. Before you go twitting at the specks in other peoples' eyes, do see to the sawhorse in your own. Sincerely, S. Snape
--- Siofra: You make a good point actually--I get so caught up in working with the characters that I do frequently forget that they are inhabiting a physical space in the story, and that no one not actually in my brain can see it. I will keep this in mind for the future. Thank you for reviewing! Regards, Branwyn
After everything the Marauders put him through, it isn't so much of a stretch to believe that he would do something about bullying when he comes across it -- you know, in his own snarly not-nice way. Favouriting. I can't wait to see what you do with this. Off to read the other chapters. ^^
Author's Response: Madam: While I confess that I cannot see how you are in any position to pass judgment on so intensely personal a matter as my culpability with regards to my recent exchange with Mr Potter, I am endeavoring to see your interference in the light of a concerned interest for the boy. As I am all too aware that such interest has been lacking in his life, I will say nothing against it. You may rest assured that I will do as much for him as any competent adult with a modicum of human feeling who has been entrusted with his care may be inclined to do. Regards, Severus Snape --- Kim: What can I say. Polite Snape and snarky Snape just aren't that far apart, are they? :-) I am pleased to find your jaw hanging, I take it as a good sign. Toodles!, Branwyn
Seriously, I just discovered your stories a week ago and I'm completely hooked - I can't wait for the next chapter.
You are evil. ! ! ! ! ! Totally evil. But I nonetheless find myself succumbing to the urge to review. (Plus, I tend to like cliffies in my own writing, so I can hardly fault you. Doesn't mean you aren't evil, understand...) Part I liked: The glimpse of astonishment & pleasure in Snape's eyes at Harry's well-done potion. :) Aw! He's like a proud papa! (well, almost) Part that made me sniffle: Harry shielding himself from a blow from Snape...I'm sure Snape felt properly awful in that moment. Please tell me that he did, anyway. Now...dance. Author's Response: I so warned you.
I accept my evil status with all humility.
I'M SO GLAD someone else liked that Snape was proud of Harry for his potion.
And yes. Snape feels like a right heel. As you will see in chapter four. :-)
You know, I'm liking how your two stories are different in the telling, POV, and direction, but they work well as a series. Please continue with the letters. They are quite entertaining, and they tell a lot about the burgeoning relationship. Can I use your "boat of my soul afloat" line in my own quest for reviews? ;) hehe Author's Response: *laughs*
yes, you can. it's free for the taking.
don't let me off the hook for cliffhangers too soon. you've still got the next chapter coming up, and it's a doozie...
Main comment I have is that I like seeing both Snape's and Harry's POVs in this chapter. Don't get me wrong, I loved how you did the first story...but it's always fun to see both sides. :) And Snape...again, I say - the big softie! You do a great job with Luna, too. After reading this chapter, I kinda wish I had a friend like her...sea salt and all... ;) Author's Response: Your retroactive request for a sequel is noted. :-)
The dual Snape and Harry POVs will continue through the rest of the story. I'm possibly considering even a Luna POV. Not positive, yet.
Snape is like an emotional cadaver with a soft candy center.
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