great chapter i really enjoyed reading it, i hope severus can keep harry safe from sirius and i loved the way sirius interacted with the dursleys and glad the spell severus cast is still working well.
thanks for the lemonade and cookies, abit of bribary does help reviewers review
Excellent view of how Sirius might react in such a situation. Some other reviewer commented that your "unhinged" and somewhat "immature" Sirius was better than JKR's Sirius, but I think it *is* JKR's Sirius - quite in-character, in other words.
Can't wait to see what happens.
Seems like your Sirius has gone a bit mad. In a very interesting way. Cheers for that.
Update! Yeah!
Eagerly anticipating the next chapter.
(^_^)/
BEM
| Title: Chapter 19
| 25 Jun 2008 7:14 am
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| Reviewer: le skrewt (Anonymous)
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uh oh! i'm worried for snape now...
your portrayal of a slightly unhinged, immature Sirius is great, really much better than JKR's. he's obviously a little unhinged & completely unaware of that fact; he's not quite tracking ie. unable to come out with "4" every time he adds 2+2; and his irrational reaction to snape is perfectly done.
Great chapter! I like how this chapter was from Sirius' POV. Hope you can update again soon! :)
| Title: Chapter 19
| 25 Jun 2008 5:44 am
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| Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous)
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Sirius' POV was brilliant, most notably the Dursleys and the 'vely-tision'
Thank you for the pink lemonade and chocolate fudge brownie. They went along very well with the chapter. I'm on tenterhooks to see what happens next, though. Sirius is really---um, I think the word is obsessive---about Severus isn't he? And of course, is seeing everything that happens through a very biased point of view. Excellent characterization and descriptions. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I think you did a wonderful job on portraying Sirius here! I do feel sorry for him, even though I know he's so mistaken and I hope he isn't able to kidnap Harry away from Sev...he would just be so terrified.
But, you've managed to portray Sirius sympathetically, to me anyway. It is obvious that he really loves Harry and wants to protect him. He's just so very wrong about Severus.
It is too bad that he didn't pay more attention to the Weasley boys' conversation...he seems to have either missed or totally discounted how Bill said that it was obvious how much Severus loved Harry. While he's observing Harry, he really should pay more attention to Harry's demeanor and not just what he's doing...maybe he could have seen that Harry wasn't frightened of Severus.
But unfortunately, Sirius' and Severus' opinions and beliefs about one another were set long ago and neither of them is going to be very open to realising that he was wrong, I'm afraid.
It looks more trouble is on the way. I'm looking forward to the next chapter here, and on your other storied. I hope you'll feel well and feel like writing! Happy summer!
Great chapter - I love the way you show how Sirius feels, and it's pretty easy to understand where he's coming from. Thanks for the update XD
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