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Reviews For Emerald Eyes
Secondly, I laughed out loud at Snape's reluctance to say Dumbledore's password out loud. Then the gargoyle made him say it even though it knew that Dumbledore was gone. Very funny. Draco is such a little bully and, yes, I would love to see a brief (or not so brief) moment of Severus dealing with him. That ruler sounds ominous. The whole thing between Draco and Harry had me talking to my computer, begging Harry not to give in to Malfoy's taunts. But, we all know how that turned out. Harry didn't do too good of a job explaining himself to Snape, but I have a feeling he would have been punished either way. Snape seems to hold Harry to a higher standard than Malfoy, which I'm sure Harry sees as completely unfair, but makes complete sense to Snape. I guess he expects better from Harry. Isn't that sweet? The picture you created through your words of Snape and Harry after the punishment was wonderful. Snape would never admit it, but his icy exterior is slowly melting to reveal a much more pleasant, warm-hearted Snape. Bit by bit he's growing to care for Harry. And Harry, in the meantime, is getting just what he needs rom Snape, someone to hold him accountable for his actions. What child, or adult for that matter, doesn't need that?!? Anyway, loved the chapter. Now I can go back to waiting somewhat impatiently for an update on your other story. Take care and keep writing..... Author's Response: Thank you! SiriuslyMental made it for me. She's amazing. Dumbledore's passwords are ridiculous. lol. Although I think Dumbledore trusts Snape, there are moments where Severus feels that is not the case--like in DH when he wouldn't tell Snape about the horocruxes. I wanted to portray that in the beginning of this chapter as well. However, I feel a lot of stories really bash Dumbledore, and although it's satisfying to read at times, this story won't really be one of those. I think I know how I'm going to handle Draco in the next chapter. I wasn't going to make it a Severus/Draco bonding scene, and I think that's what some readers are thinking is going to happen. But it won't. It won't! lol I wanted the spanking to be more about teaching Harry to control his emotions before he goes out of control. But Harry was adamant in telling Snape that it wasn't his fault--that he didn't start the fight. However, to Snape, that would be a trivial thing. He knows that he's going to lay into Malfoy for being such a horrible little slimeball. For Harry, however, Snape wants him to be the bigger person--he has to learn to step down from situations that don't require him to use his defense skills--the little that he has aquired. I'm really glad you liked this chapter. I AM going to work on SfS next. I love alternating between stories, because while this one is more challenging, Starting From Scratch is very relaxing to write. I don't know why. lol. Thanks so much for the fab review :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I think I know what I'm going to do about Snape and Malfoy. ;)
I liked how Snape questioned his use of Harry's first name. I hate it in fics where he suddenly starts using it and no one acknowledges it or thinks it's anything out of the ordinary. I think if Snape had used Harry's first name in canon, they would both notice it. You pay attention to the canon versions of the characters very well. At first I was so proud of Harry for controlling himself and deciding that cursing or fighting Malfoy would be a bad idea and that he should back off. I thought he had finally learned some sense and then...*sigh* I suppose he didn't mean to cause that, but he still wanted to hurt Malfoy. I think he got the punishment he deserved and I can see Snape's reasoning. After I first read the chapter, I really wanted a Malfoy and Snape scene, but then I thought about it and changed my mind. So many fics are about the relationships between Malfoy, Snape, and Harry, and what I really like about this one is that the main focus is on just Harry and Snape. While I do like some of the stories that include more of Malfoy, I think yours is better the way it is. But it's your decision and I think you should trust your instincts and do what you think it best. =) This is a great story and I'm really enjoying it so far. Your characterization is what really shines. Can't wait for more! Author's Response: Thanks for the great review! My original instincts were telling me not to include the scene. Perhaps I should just follow them. lol. I did want to hear readers' opinion on the matter, however. I appreciate all of the great feedback I've been getting :) The whole 'Calling Harry by his name' thing is something that I didn't want to happen until about this point--I didn't want it to be a deliberate thing. I know what you mean about the immediate use of 'Harry'. He's never called him that, and therefore it would be weird for Snape to address him as such frequently. I think there are so many times in the books where Harry tried so hard to do what's right, but still ends up allowing his emotions to control his actions (which, who can blame him?). But of course, Snape would see that as having a death wish, especially since he knows that Harry has the power to kill Voldemort. Acting irrationally would not be a good thing. And that is why the spanking was more about teaching Harry to control his anger. He didn't offer immediate comfort either. Perhaps he's starting to realize that Harry is just a boy afterall...
Seeruk Author's Response: Thanks for reading and sharing your opinion on the matter! :) I'm glad you're enjoying the story!
Malfoy's such a brat. He goes around looking to create trouble - at least Harry only stumbles upon and doesn't try to stir it up like that sneaky little blond boy. Can't wait for more. Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for leaving me some feedback :) I've actually never seen Die Hard. Maybe I should? I did mean for this chapter to have a bit of the 'sweet' factor, but hopefully it wasn't too mushy. I get a bit worried about that. lol. There will be a discussion in the next chapter for little distraught Harry. I shake my fist at Malfoy. I used to like his character, but the more I write Snape/Harry fanfiction, the more difficult it is to find a soft place in my heart for Draco. Unfortunately. But you're right about the differences in seeking out trouble. I'm so glad to hear you're still enjoying the story! By the way, I'm dying for a new chapter of 'House'. Can't wait to see how Harry reacts to being stuck in knee-pants... lol
Just a thought that I forgot to mention. As I just said: excellent story and I have no doubt that whatever you come up with will be wonderful. :) Author's Response: Hi again! Thanks for the suggestion ;)
In regaurds to a scene between Severus and Malfoy: I have mixed feelings. On one hand I'd love the scene and you would do a marvolous job writing it. On the other hand, I can't imagine it fitting into your story. Your story is very much about Severus and Harry. Even the scenes that don't have both Harry and Severus somehow concern the other character, even if it's just Harry thinking about Snape or Snape making a comment about Harry. I honestly can't see a scene between Severus and Malfoy fitting in flawlessly. It would seem out of place. However, if you really want to do the scene (and that is the most important thing anyway) I'm sure you will find a way to make the scene work. :) Anyway, I love the story and this chapter. And short of killing off every character and ending the story tomorrow I'll continue reading regaurdless. Please update soon. :) Author's Response: Thanks so much for your feedback! I think you're right about the Malfoy/Snape scene, and the more I sit here and think about it, the more certain I'm becoming about how I'm going to handle it. But even if I wrote a scene between Malfoy and Snape, it wouldn't be a bonding scene. I don't think I made that clear. Harry would definitely fit into the mix. I felt quite sorry for Harry as I was writing the scene after his punishment. I figured he'd be mortified. Poor little Harry is just a bundle of emotions and hates showing them.
I enjoyed reading Snape's part too. Him trying to work out how to deal with an overly distraught Harry. He tried a few different angles before finding the right one. Now, will he figure out why it worked? Thanks very much for the update. I know I'll enjoy any continuation of this story with or without a Draco scene. Author's Response: Yes, you're definitely spot-on about the 'dueling' scene. I think Draco is the kind of person who taunts just to make people angry--especially Harry. He's such a little jerk. I know people would like to see Draco brought to justice. I'll try to create a subtle reference without making the story feel like it's missing something or ruining the whole vibe. And Snape did try out different ways of getting Harry's attention before finally finding one that worked. You picked that up ;) Thanks so much for taking the time out to review!
As to the scene between Severus and Draco, I wouldn't mind seeing one - it would be rather interesting - but I wonder how it would fit into the next chapter without seeming awkward. I can't think of how to word that better, but please know that I didn't mean it as an insult to your skills as a writer. I really envy your talent! I cannot wait until the next chapter comes out. It's always the highlight of my day when I get to read a new bit. Bravo to you! :] Author's Response: No, I didn't take that as an insult at all! ;) I think it makes perfect sense, and that's why I asked readers' opinions. I wasn't going to write one, but I didn't want to make it seem as if there was a giant plot-hole or anything. I think inferring what went on would be better. We'll see if I can pull it off, I guess...lol Thank you so much for your interest in my story! This was one of those chapters where I was unsure of how people would react to it. But I'm really happy you liked it! I just finished reading 'A Place for Warriors' by owlsaway, and I just had to shake my head at my Snape--thinking he was straying way out of character; however, I suppose in a mentoring story such as this one, Snape would have to soften a bit--just in his own Snape-like way. Again, I really appreciate your kind encouragement. I'll work hard to post the new chapter soon!
Author's Response: I know it--and that's mainly the reason that I have asked for everyone's opinion. I've had mixed feedback about it, but I think I'll write it in a way that satisfies both sides of the coin--hopefully ;) Thanks very much for leaving a review! It's always good to know that people are still enjoying. |
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