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Reviews For Lily's Charm
This was just brilliant! I can't say anything that other reviewers have, however...but perhaps through my mindless ramblings of a review I'll get to something meaningful. I love your different take on Occlumency, it's described really well and makes sense. Or, as much sense as Harry can make of it! But, it's good to be in his mind, and I enjoyed it immensly! Hopefully, though, you let him gain further insight into the "Dementor Storm" I don't actually know if anything else could be said, but perhaps Hermione could add her two-cents worth. I think it's an interesting development! Must agree with the punch to the stomach as Severus learns that Harry told Hermione, Ron, and Ginny. *oof!* This really was an emotional rollarcoaster! And I love rollarcoasters...especially the emotional kind, and the ones that go upside-down!! Harry's fit of rage and Snape's retorts were perfectly spelled out! I wish I could argue as well as the two of them! It was really great of Severus to calm down enough to finish their lesson, especially since it took a lot for him to do so. Luckally Harry saw the importance and now knows what to expect, at least a little, and was willing to continue as well. Hopefully, they'll be able to make more progress in future lessons with their relationship. I also enjoyed Severus' reaction to Harry not liking all the attention from the wizarding world. It's always a great moment when Sev finds out that his son isn't as pompus and attention-seeking as he thought. Oh, yes, and I love how Severus was keeping tabs on all of Harry's activity through the years...does that mean that he was at least a little concerned for his safty, above wanting to keep the one hope for the wizarding world alive to kill Voldemort? Hopefully so, although I realize it's hard to not listen to people talking about Harry Bloody Potter and block them out... Alas, I've run out of time, I've go to leave this depressing establishment of a dorm room and go home!! YAY!! But, I will finish later... Enjoy your holiday and don't work too hard! Author's Response: Don't worry, I love your rambles, and they certainly aren't mindless. You always give me tons to think about. I'm so so happy you enjoyed the Occlumency. I spent almost two days trying to get that part exactly how I wanted it but as soon as I did, the rest of the chapter just sortas flew from my fingers. Kinda like, all my own thoughs had been sucked underneath Harry's storm. LOL Oh, and don't worry, Occlumency (as I'm sure you've alread seen with Snape) is a big part of this story. I just really love the idea of it. This chapter did have some violent ups and downs, yeah. It was really fun to write so much tension and release between these two, as if they were trying to unleash the past five years of hurt, anguish and anger in just one evening! Glad you liked the first 'oof' of Snape finding out Harry had told his friens, but at least he had already told them. Hee hee...that would have been a lot more unpleasant otherwise (hmmm...is that even possible?). They have lots more lessons to continue on with and some fun outside of Occlumency training as well. I do love Severus having to take a deep breath and step back to see Harry in a new light, just like with the "wizarding world" comment. He's sure got a lot of learning to do about his son. I think it was more of a case of Albus keeping Severus informed, against Sev's wishes, though I also believe that even through all Severus' anger, hatred and bitterness, deep deep down under his inpentrable wall of fire, he still had some inklings of feelings for Harry bloody Potter. :o) YAY that you get to go home. Have a great holiday. And, don't worry, I'll enjoy my holiday and I definitely don't consider writing this story work as I've already got about 1000 words done with Chapter 18 plus a sizable chunk of my What if? story (chapter 2) done as well. I just can't help myself. :oP Thanks so much for your reviews. You and the others who take time to write so much really inspire me. In that spirit, I'm off to help Severus get over some of his recurring jealousy. *hints* :o)
I completely loved that and oh so true! But of course Severus didn't listen to the important part of it. Well maybe he did file it away for later. And that last bit, where Severus makes sure Harry doesn't leave without an apology. That's progress right there, ladies and gentlemen. Thanks for the lack of cliffhangers! I hope you have a great Christmas and holiday! Author's Response: YAY! That line was one of my particular favorites. It was just so much fun. Harry really has a temper, doesn't he? But, wow can he get to the heart of matters while in those fits of rage. LOL I think maybe you're right...Severus probably saved that little tidbit for later. Or maybe, he heard him loud and clear and that's why Harry didn't leave for the fourth or fifth time in a fit of temper. :oP Yep, progress. Slow but sure. Severus is doing all right, I think. Happy Holidays to you as well and you're very welcome for the no cliff hangers. I wanted to so bad after Snape through down that box of Floo Powder but I just can't be mean only days away from Christmas! LOL
I really liked your occlumency lesson and the explanation of the shield. Harry's shield is perfect. It makes me sad to think of how different things would be if Snape had actually tried to teach Harry properly last year and Harry had actually listened. I think Dumbledore was asking way too much of both of them, though. Speaking of Dumbledore, the man is absolutely maddening, isn't he? His unshakeable calmness is infuriating. And his meddling truly annoying, to say the least. But, he definitely adds character and plot to most stories. Loved the chapter. I hope you have a very Merry and blessed Christmas. Author's Response: Yep, emotions were all over the place though Sev's were neatly tucked away in his mind. Sigh. I know...it is hard to take how things would have been if only Severus had done what he was supposed to do last year. He must have a lot of guilt about that, seeing as he did how much Harry blames himself for Sirius. Oh, the angst. The Occlumency part of the lesson was so hard to write at first but then, once I got started, it all just kind of poured out. It was fun. Glad you liked it so much. Dumbledore is quite annoying, yes. I think though, in the end you'll appreciate him. And as you see, Severus tolerates him very well considering what he suspects Dumbledore kept from him for 15 years. Hmmm....wonder why that is? :oP Happy Holidays to you as well. Thanks so much for your awesome reviews!
Yes, I did notice the abundance of cliffhangers. I told myself, "She did mention she was going out of town for the holidays so how better to torment us all than to set a record for the number of cliffhangers in one chapter and have to go for DAYS without another update." If I hadn't adored the chapter so much I would have sent you a fruitcake in punishment. So it starts out all nice and happy (well, maybe not happy because Severus doesn't do happy, but you know what I mean). But their first lesson is going okay. And then: "And then Snape’s features sharpened. “You told your friends,” he accused and instantly all of Harry’s ease vanished." Doh! I got punched in the stomach! I knew Snape would find out and not be happy about it, but naturally you lulled me into this nice beginning to the chapter and I had to stop reading and sit back for a moment before reading again, because my stomach hurt. I loved this: “He didn’t take anything!” Harry shouted right over him. “Voldemort and your mother killed my mum and I’m standing right here, Snape!” Touche, Hary! Severus deserved that retort. Well played. And Severus knowing so many of Harry's adventures that was completely unknown to Harry....BAHAHAHAHA! As a parent, I just love that. That odd remark about Draco is intriguing. And what is the memory Dumbledore gave Severus (if that is indeed what it is). Curses woman, do you really have to go away for the holidays? Of course you do....we will just have to wait (impatiently) for your return and I'll have to entertain myself with the HP/OOTP movie in HD that I'm certain I'm getting for Christmas as well as the HP/OOTP XBox 360 game I'm hoping Santa leaves me under the tree. The last scene was my favorite...I'm so glad that Severus followed Harry and tried to end their meeting on a less irritating note. Wow, this review was long even for me. If a certain writer wouldn't give me so much to work with this would be shorter, hee hee. Happy Holidays! Author's Response: Me? Driving people insane? Never. :o) Thanks very much for NOT sending me fruitcake though...yech! I have to say, I did enjoy all the ups and downs of the evening for these two. Harry starts out all comfortable and light and then things darken, then go light again. That was great fun! The pair of them are just so quick tempered though Harry, like Lily (well this Lily anyway) is quick to defuse his temper too so that will help things go a bit smoother at least. Wow, that's what I like to hear! Such a great reaction to Snape finding out that Harry had told his friends. I think you must have a little Harry in you somewhere. LOL I'm so happy that you liked that line with, "I'm standing right here, Snape!". That was one of my favorites as well. Too bad Snape didn't get what Harry was trying to say...or did her. :oP Yeah, Harry is not going to appreciate Snape's odd ability to know about what he is up to, I'll tell you that. Draco is intriguing, isn't he. Just what is that boy up to! You'll just have to wait for more clues, I guess. Severus is trying really hard. And, as one of my other reviews remarked, "Harry will follow where Severus leads." And, that my friends sums up our little Harry perfectly. I'm so happy you enjoyed the chapter so much. Enjoy your OOTP. And, I have already started in on the next chapter, so you just never know....how's that for a teaser! Have a great holiday.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! That's quite a wonderful compliment! :)
Love your Lupin and Ginny. That line about Snape being alone for so long was just so sad. What a tragedy for Snape and Harry... Keep up the great work! I really am enjoying this! Author's Response: You're welcome! Glad you liked it and yeah, Snape is in a pretty sad situation, isn't he? It's good though that Harry is finally clueing in! The whole situation is just utterly tragic, but that's the way I love it! LOL Ginny and Lupin are particularly favorites of mine. I just couldn't get enough of them in the books, though they were not in them nearly enough, IMO. Oh well. That's what fanfiction is for, I guess. :) I'm glad you felt better after I responded to your review. About the Malfoys, I mean. The Malfoys have quite a large role here and Draco especially. Maybe more will be revealed in the next chapter.....although maybe more bits of tantalizing teasers than anything useful. :oP Thanks so much for reviewing. The next chapter will hopefully be up by tomorrow night. I think you'll enjoy it. It is chock full of Severus and Harry lovliness!
Author's Response: Thanks! You're so funny. :)
Letting Harry come to Severus' private quarters was amazingly placed. I also love how Harry was so surprised that he choked on floo powder, I love it!! It was also great for Harry to see a little more of who 'Severus' really is. As well as gaining the knowledge that he never stopped loving Lily...that means that somewhere deeply hidden from view, Ol' Sev never stopped loving Harry either, right?, right? Well, that scene was beautifully done and I still adore how differently Severus is approaching Occlumency Lessons this time around. Ok, I think I'm done now...till next chapter! Happy Tuesday! Author's Response: Don't apologize. I absolutely thrive on these reviews....it makes me want to jump right into the next chapter. The Floo choking was fun. It just seemed so "Harry", you know? LOL And, yeah this is a very important moment for Severus to have let Harry in. The scene with Remus was pivotal. Even Snape can't deny now that he cares about Harry, after trying to choke Remus to death for what he thought Remus was up to! And yes, it was very important for Harry to see the physical evidence of Snape's love for his mum. And here's where it gets tricky....Snape very much, just like with Lily, never stopped loving his little boy. What he has to realize (and he slowly slowly is) is that Harry, this Harry is the same little boy. He keeps getting glimpses and trying to tell himself that but he really needs to just GET IT. It was as if that little son died with Lily that night, he grieved for him as though he had. Harry Potter, 10 years later when he showed up for the sorting, was not the same boy Sev had lost, in Snape's mind. Now, he is rediscovering his son. *snif*.
And Remus, he's just adorable. I want to give them all big hugs!! Author's Response: Well, Snape didn't actually say he wasn't tortured, just that the Cruciatus Curse wasn't used on him. :oP Remus is adorable. I love him.
Another favorite part: "Harry’s mouth fell open, unable to stop himself staring at the bluish-haired woman." LOVED IT!! As well as the conclusion that Severus came to, and I thought you handled it all very well. It was brilliantly played out! Oh, Remus, he's always getting beat up by Snape. I feel sorry for the guy, but at least he's still able to be around Harry and comfort him when it's needed. You're just so great at characterization it's mind-boggling! Ginny, she's amazing. I'm so glad that she and Harry are having a real relationship here and that we get to see so much of them interacting. And, she's perfect as the one to give advise to Harry, or to explain what Severus' motives are, what he's feeling. She's also really intuned to Harry's feelings and expectations...they're just perfect together! YAY!! More Ginny!! Umm...this was a really excellent chapter, and as I've said, I can't wait to see what happens with Harry's first (new) Occlumency lesson! Also, hopefully you're able to tie more of those pesky subplots in too. Happy week, and good luck writing! Author's Response: Yay that you liked the last line. That was fun to leave you all sort of hanging, but in a good way this time! :) Remus and Tonks are the best and I would have loved more of them in the books, so I get to treat myself here. LOL Thanks for being so complimentary. The characterizations, I think are the most fun. Don't worry...there'll be lots and lots of Ginny. Occlumency is up next.
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