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Reviews For Lily's Charm
It's funny to think that even back then that Severus wasa little jealous of Remus. But I love the fact that Harry loves his Remus so. Don't we all? In fact, I think in canon he is my second favorite character, after Harry, of course. I love Remus' line "He deserves better from you." Isn't that so true? But, then again, I would say that Severus deserved so much better from his own mother, too. Wow! And then, Remus' line of "And you do not go far enough." That was awesome. That man sure does have a way with words. I just got home from work (I work night shift/12 hour shifts so I'm a bit tired), so I'm going to post this review right now, even though I've only read about half of this chapter. I'll read the rest later and post another review for the rest of the chapter. I'm loving it so far. Thanks... Author's Response: I loved writing that little ditty with Sev and Harry. I love little Harry! Remus is one of my favs too. I'm glad you liked Remus' lines. Those were fun. I love a direct and brutally honest Remus. Get some rest and hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Thanks for being a regular reviewer too! :)
I really enjoyed this chapter, particularly assertive Remus. He's usually the gentle mediator but I love how he just gave it to Severus straight in this chapter. I wanted to clap for him. And the last scene was nice. Looking forward to the next one! Hope the inspiration keeps flowing. Author's Response: Severus and Harry are the best! Remus was really fun to write this chapter. I love him direct and brutally honest...somehow it suits him. :) Next one should be coming in a few day, I hope. It will be full of lots of stuff and a new character too (well, not really new, but new to the story....) LOL
Ok, I loved the 1981 scene. I just love the exchange that went on there! Poor Severus...who was perfectly in character here! I especially loved his reaction to how he reacted in the Hospital Wing. I love seeing his logic and how he assesed the situation, it was brilliant. His reaction to Harry's scar from Umbridge was also spot-on. And I love how Harry reacted...is he making a joke?! Remus was also awesome here, I just love him! He's the perfect influence for both Severus and Harry and I hope that he gets to stay in the picture once the two of them become closer. His light hearted tone after DADA when talking to Harry was excellent, I've always imagined him as more level headed than Harry and Severus put togeter. Keep him awesome!! Harry, Harry, Harry. That poor kid, but at least he understands a little bit more about Severus now, and can react accordingly. I do agree with you, though. I think he would try everything he's able to in order to have a family...even if said family is the Greasy Git of the Dungeons. I was also excited to see a bit of the trio in this chapter too...with Ginny!! Ahh, Ginny! So, IS it a date?, huh, huh? Don't know if you'll address it, either, but does Malfoy recieve a zero on his potion? Do we get to find out more about him in later chapters?! I'm just so excited for the next chapter!! YAY!! I really want to see what Severus is thinking about all this. You really do a good job at characterization and the positioning of details within the story, it is truly a pleasure to read! Until next chapter!! (Who needs to study for finals, anyway?) Author's Response: Oh, I'm so glad you got a bit of a break with the chapter. Finals are no fun. I love the 1981 scenes too. I just can't resist Sev, Lily and James and then throw little Harry into the mix and wow, how fun! I'm glad too that you like Severus' ponderings in the dungeon after his tantrum in the Infirmary. It was fun to write, because he's moody, but logical at the same time and pretty dense too. Severus is very complicated! :) The scene at the end was really fun too. Snape cracking a joke, totally deadpan was awesome. I love Harry and him interacting more now, though of course it's not going to be smooth sailing at all. Yay! Remus is great, isn't he? I really think you're right. He's the perfect balance for those two quick-tempered guys. Don't worry, there will be lots more Remus, and angst to go with it as Harry and Severus grow slowly closer. Harry has got to be totally confused but he can think logically a bit too, just like dad! :) I just really got the feeling after OOTP that Harry would accept Severus if only give half a chance. It doesn't take much for Harry to let you in his heart. I love that about him, especially that it makes him so heart breakingly vulnerable. Ginny is the best. I guess you'll have to see if it's a date, won't you? LOL Dont worry, don't worry, Malfoy has a big role to play in this fic still. I love Malfoy and he'll be around a ton. This story is nowhere near even a midway point, so we've got lots to do still. Malfoy doesn't receive a zero, even though Severus was rather annoyed at him for insinuating that Harry was stupid during Potions class. :) He's got to keep ihis mask on, so to speak, you know and of course, he is fond of the mean little blond Slytherin, but more about that later. :) I love that you are so excited about the story. It really boosts me to get my butt writing! Next chapter should be up in a few days, as usual. (and yep, HP fanfics are way more important than finals).
It was nice to see the beginnings of a better relationship between Harry and Severus, though of course, it's got a very long way to go still. And loved Severus' reaction to seeing Umbridge's scar on Harry's hand. I too agree with your Author's Notes, though I think I prefer Snape as guardian or mentor, or adoption fics to him being Harry's blood father. But I enjoy any well-written Harry and Snape story, and yours is very well-written! Author's Response: Hmmm...I don't know which type I prefer. I have read some really awesome adoption and mentor ficts. But, I also love the idea of Snape and Lily together because it was just so sad that Snape had to endure all those years of being in love with her and it was never returned. I was sucked in and fell in love with Snape. That's really why I chose to write this story. I don't usually enjoy the Severitus stories as much where Snape just sort of happened to be Harry's father, without any Lily feelings involved, although I have read a couple that are good. Anyways, enough of my inane ramblings.... :) I'm glad you liked the scar scene...totally inspired from watching OOTP the other night. Remus is the best, isn't he? I think I've got myself a love triangle with Remus and Snape. LOL Yep, these two still have a long way to go. YAY. Thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Thanks! And, YAY, that you agree with me. Severitus/Sevitus is so believable to me (well, mostly anyways), just knowing Harry. Glad you're still enjoying the story too! Thanks for reviewing!
Then I see the chapter title ("Nudges from Remus") and I start giggling and actually say out loud, "Oh, THIS is going to be fun!" (And realize I'm talking out loud to my computer and wondering what that says about me. Hmmm...) I've forgotten to put a new box of tissues on my computer desk, but that's okay since I didn't need them for this chapter. Not that this wasn't incredibly fun to read because I LOVE, love, love Severus and Remus conversations. I just adore that werewolf and how he never rises to Severus' level in the temper department, but dang! That man can deliver a verbal 1-2-3 punch in the calmest manner. I've always wished I could do that. And boy, he delivered quite a few great lines. My two favorites: “He deserves better from you.” and.... “And you do not go far enough,” Ouch! After that section of this chapter I have visions of the old "Pinky and the Brain" cartoons where Pinky tells Brain, "Brain, you've got a spot of fire on your head." [And if you've never seen those cartoons you'll have no idea what I'm talking about, but if you have....you'll get it. ;-) ] And Remus wasn't going to back away from his relationship with Harry no matter what Severus says. I sure wish the books had done more with Remus this way. And one itsy, bitsy, tiny baby step was taken today in reaching across the football size chasm of that wonder we call a "relationship" today at the end of class. Snape's anger at Umbridge's torture was perfect. And letting Harry rebrew that potion? Wow!! A baby step indeed. I agree that Harry would do anything (even give Snape a chance) to have a family. And how the heck do you even have time to write these wonderful chapters at the holidays? I bow in amazement, oh wonderful writer! Can't wait for more! Author's Response: Okay, well, I'm pretty sure your review was much more hilarious than my chapter. I am still chuckling. LOL I too love that title. Because, oh Remus is just the most fun to write. I love him! I enjoyed his nasty comments to Severus that were really below the belt but it was totally calculated on Remus' part. Love it. And, yes my husband and I are big Pinky and the Brain fans so now I'm ROFL hysterically. My husband actualy had a teacher in high school named Mrs. Brain, so his friends and he would always say, "Narf!" to her and "What we gonna do today, Brain?" Okay, they were dorks, but it still makes me giggle. I'm glad you liked the chapter even without it being a tear-jerker. It was more an anger fest from Severus and a time of pondering for Harry. Baby steps indeed. And, Severus is up next to continue on with Harry staying after to brew the potion, so that should be fun and we'll get to see why Severus did take the little step. Well, I think we already know [whisper, whisper...check the title again]. :) I already finished all my shopping so I am not too stressed, although this chapter did take a bit longer than has been usual because i've been making preparation for our church Christmas party tomorrow. I'm on the activities commitee so I have been sort of swamped of late, but I'm also so obsessed with this story that I'm gonna make time for it, even if instead of dinner tomorrow night, they all get copies of my story! Hee Hee. Thanks for reviewing again! You rock!
Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad you liked it, even without loving Severitus. I love them myself and that's actually how I got hooked on fanfiction. The next chapter should be up in a few days!
I love the fact that Snape is feeling a bit jealous of Remus, as well he should. Remus is really the only adult that seems to care for Harry because he's Harry, not James Potter's son, Lily Potter's son or 'The Boy Who Lived.' He seems to have an unconditional love for Harry. The sad thing is that I'm sure Snape had that same unconditional love for Harry at one point, too, but he threw it all away in bitterness. So, so sad. I bought the OoTP DVD today, but I haven't had a chance to watch it yet. My son had a basketball game out of town, so I got home to late to watch it. Plus, my kids would have been mad if I had watched it without them. I work the next two nights, so I guess I'll have to wait until Friday night to watch it. Dang it! Thanks so mch for the chapter. Take care... Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you like my 'floundering' Snape. He's fun, isn't he? Remus is awesome. I always loved him in in the books and wished JKR had done more with the character. He does care so much for Harry and I think that is one of the things that will help Snape to start to feel something for Harry again. Jealousy is powerful and not always in a bad way, I think. The movie was awesome! I had so much fun, but I actually had to stop it a few times to jot down some ideas for the story as it inspired me so much. LOL And, now I want to write a Sirius/Harry story. They had me in tears. The next chapter should be up up tonight or tomorrow. Enjoy.
I must say that I agree with cathyrf, Severus did need a few good smacks to the head. But I agree that he's trying with Harry. I did like seeing him come to the realization that Harry's the same person as the baby he held all those years ago. That at least stopped me from throwing my laptop at the wall! I can't wait to see them actually talk about their relation, though. But it's good that it's all agnsty-it's the best!! You kept them both really in character here too, Severus being all snarky and sarcastic; Harry needing to dredge up some Gryffindor courage to ask about Snape staying in the infirmary all night. It was great to hear Harry talk to Ginny too...who of course knows what's going on without him telling her the whole truth. It's great that they're close, I feel that she's going to be Harry's major pillar of support. Hermione and Ron...well, that quidditch match was certainly interesting, as well as Hermoine's cushioning charm...a little too enthusiastic! I love it!! Remus...he's turned out to be a great character. I do love how he's sticking up and watching out for Harry. He's so protective, it's adorable! I just hope that he and Severus can come to an understanding (maybe not actually be friends, because while I believe that Harry and Snape can overcome their past, I don't really think that Snape and Lupin will all of a sudden be best mates) that they're both trying to protect the same person. But, that's for later. I'm also expecting more light to be brought to the issue of Dumbledore...hehe. What else...I'm really looking forward to seeing Severus beat himself up after his little confrontaition with Harry. And he was doing soo good in the dungeons, albeit alone, with his feelings!! But, it wouldn't make sense for Harry to suddenly feel comfortable around Severus, and for Severus to suddenly proclaim his love for Harry. You've got them in character perfectly and it's brilliant. Until next chapter! (Don't watch too much OotP, set some time aside to write too!) Author's Response: Okay, okay...I finally turned off the TV (after watching the whole movie and then all the extras too...I was really annoyed BTW that they didn't include the scene with Ron and Harry at the end...it was rather sweet...have you seen it?) and now I've written two more pages, just for all of you. I was so incredibly inspired by the movie. I guess I already knew it before but it really stroke me with some of the lines how much Harry would do for a chance for a family. I was kind of in awe and it really gave me some great ideas for the story. So, it wasn't totally wasted time, right? lol I had to laugh at the image of you throwing your laptop.... I know Sev is an idiot, but he is trying, you're right. And, he'll figure all of this out soon enough...or at least enough to not leave Harry in a puddle on the floor next time. Glad you like the "enthusiastic" charm of Hermione's. I love that girl! I love Remus too and he's back in the next chapter, adorably protective. :) Remus and Snape do need to get to some kind of understanding since I'm sure Harry will want both of them in his life eventually. Wonder if Snape will realize that? Dumbledore...he's got a lot to get done before he can come back and perhaps explain himself....hee hee. Severus will keep working on his feelings. I think this Sev does understand things very well about feelings (much different from the Canon stories because our Sev was once very deeply loved and I think that changed him profoundly, even with all that happened). THanks so much for your compliments. Well, back to Severus and Harry...
oh, and great job with the updates! You're like lightning... Author's Response: Like lightening....LOL! I love it. Thanks so much for your review and I'm so glad you like it so much. It is really hard NOT to make them just come together already but it's not very realistic that way I guess and I can't resist the angst! Next chapter should be up tomorrow or the next day. I just finished OOTP on DVD so I'm afraid I wasted this night away! But, I was incredibly inspired by it, so we'll all win, I guess! :o) |
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