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Reviews For Never Say Remember
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad to know you've enjoyed it. :)
Author's Response: Hmm, sort of an alternate universe for the alternate universe? That could be interesting...and confusing. :) I'm happy to hear that you're still interested in the story, though. I'll have to think about this whole "deleted scenes" idea.
Author's Response: Thanks! I've gotten a bit behind in my updates, but I'm still working on the next chapter. I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it!
Author's Response: I have been considering that, but I changed a major plot point in an earlier chapter. It's one of the reasons editing has been taking longer, since it's essentially become re-writing to fit the new plot direction. And after re-writing comes more editing...really, the main problem is that I'm a perfectionist. However, these little nudges in the reviews have reviewed my motivation, and I've made more progress in the past few days than I have in a while. Thanks for the gentle approach, by the way. When I saw the e-mail notification, I was worried someone popped in to throw things in my general direction.
-K Author's Response: Aw, thanks for the offer. Yes, I've been a naughty fanfic author. I'm definitely getting coal in my stocking if I don't update soon. I think I've finally (finally!) figured out what was bothering me about this next chapter. I spent quite a bit of time staring at it in consternation. Then I read a new writing book and had a light bulb moment. I'm honestly not sure whether I should be with or without a beta at this point. I think most betas would want to strangle me for my productivity issues. What I really need is someone to chain me to the chair and then stand behind me with a whip. Got any ideas on how to owl Argus Filch?
Love and a Peace, Kates Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! Sorry for the late reply; I'm catching up on my reviews...and updates. I hope you're still interested in the next chapter when I post it. :)
I keep wanting to shout, "You're not being fair to (canon) Harry!" But that's a reflexive response, because it seems like all the circumstances are piled against him; I don't mean it as a slight against your story. Quite the contrary - the fact that I'm so affected is, of course, a significant feat. I just feel so bad for the boy, because in a way his entrance into this Snape's world mirrors their original meeting: Snape is judging him for things out of Harry's control, without actually taking the opportunity to learn about who he is as a person first. Granted that Harry wasn't being the most mature about it, but Severus never actually bothered to try to understand the reasons for that. He looked at Harry as though Harry had personally stolen his son from him, and disregarded just how emotional a moment it was for Harry to see his mum alive and (as far as he knew) well, making snap judgments about the actions of a boy who is overwhelmed by confusion, joy and grief all at once. I almost literally reeled back in my chair when he actually thought Harry might act violently toward Lily! Which isn't to say this Snape is loathsome, or that you're not writing him well; his own reactions are perfectly understandable, as well, and I certainly have sympathy for him. Judging by what we've learned about him tangentially, either from the other Harry or in potions class, and of course in his interactions with Lily when Harry's not about to disrupt the mood, he seems like a pretty cool guy, and a believable take on the character based on the different choices and their ramifications. I'm just dearly hoping that at some point, the two of them can create a dialogue to forge some understanding, and particularly so Harry can go, "Look, you don't understand why I've been acting this way." Perhaps that's already begun in the chapters I have yet to reach. Actually, ironically, I had to scroll down to type this just after the first real 'breach' of understanding between them, when Severus reached out to grasp Harry's shoulder. But the scene that precipitated it.. this Severus really can have no comprehension of just how deathly important that cloak is to Harry, and though Harry's by no means being a paragon of virtue - his upsettingly unflappable belief that Snape is somehow abusing and/or manipulating Lily, for one - that really struck a chord with me, and I fully understand why he so constantly rails against everything, as Severus said. I'll finish getting caught up after I've slept, and hopefully have more cohesive and encompassing feedback - I know, I haven't even touched on the other storyline, which is just as good in its own ways. I simply had such a visceral and intense reaction to this aspect of their relationship that I couldn't stay silent. In any case, I think you're doing an excellent job, and I will certainly be following along. Author's Response: Thank you for the interesting thoughts! I love long reviews where the reviewer analyzes every side of a story--I'm a bit of an analyzer myself. ;) I've had several reviewers intelligently and passionately argue about who was right or wrong in the Snape/Harry conflict, but I'm with you--they each have their reasons for acting the way they do. I hope you had a chance to read the rest of the story!
Author's Response: Thanks! That was a fun line to write. And once a year...that's a pretty good record when you're up against Snape. :)
The only 'negative' of this chapter wash that is seemed a little disjointed, I think with the varying time frames covered it needed to be a bit longer consequently with more detail to smooth the way from one scene to the next. Otherwise I really enjoyed learning more pieces of the puzzle. Author's Response: Originally this chapter only had the scene in the present day. That felt too short, so I included more backstory, as I felt it related to what was happening in the present. But it's been a while since I've read it--I may look at it now and see where more of a transition could have been used. Thank you for the review!
Author's Response: Yeah, I think it fits his character. It doesn't make him a bad person, just one who's already made his mind up about certain people. |
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