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Title: Chapter 3: Lost at Sea 03 Aug 2008 11:36 pm
Reviewer: kella (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Thanks for putting that age explaination in, I think you chose well
    I feel soo bad for Harry though, he finally gets to see his mum and Lily's just soo upset about loosing her Harry

    Author's Response:

    I'm glad you found that helpful.  I don't do as many author notes now, and was wondering if I should keep the ones I have.  But I did like sharing my thoughts in that note, so it's good to know it was useful. 

    Thanks for reviewing! 

Title: Chapter 2: The Long Night 03 Aug 2008 11:28 pm
Reviewer: Kella (Anonymous) [Report This]
    So which one is OUR harry?

    Author's Response:

    Hopefully this becomes clearer later...

Title: Chapter 19: The Promises of Slytherins 27 Jul 2008 10:11 pm
Reviewer: Cicci Green (Signed) [Report This]
    I didn't fully understand the whole thing with the Salvus, but that's probably more stupidity on my part than anything else ;)
    It's wonderful, as always, and I liked the action.

    Author's Response:

    Sorry the Salvus thing was confusing.  :(   It was something Snape created to keep Harry safe-it just had some undesirable side effects.  That's all you really need to know.  :)

    Thank you for the review!

Title: Chapter 19: The Promises of Slytherins 20 Jul 2008 10:06 am
Reviewer: snarky Beth (Signed) [Report This]
    Sorry this review is so late, but life's been very busy for me lately, so I've not had time to visit the site. I jumped right to this story, however, soon as I realized it was updated.

    Talk about an exciting chapter! There was so much action, it was loads of fun to read. You are so good at writing scenes, I pictured it all perfectly. I loved the humor! Malfoy sure deserved that embarrassment, lol! The following Lily and Severus reaction was great too :).

    Poor Harry, just when it seems like he's out of danger, more comes! Severus sure felt horrible, but it seems he has a plan. I love reading this story and will keep my eyes open for your next update! Hopefully, I'll be able to read and review it right away too.

    Author's Response: That's okay—sorry my response is so late!  Thank you for taking the time to review, no matter how long it takes you.  :)  I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.  Chapter 20 should be up soon. 
Title: Chapter 19: The Promises of Slytherins 12 Jul 2008 7:26 am
Reviewer: waterleaves (Signed) [Report This]
    OH WOW! Intense! But.. it will also be rather sad when they get sent back. At least for this Harry! I'm sure this is going to get interesting! Good stuff!

    Author's Response:

    Thanks!  Speculating on what will happen next, eh?  I'm afraid I can't comment on that—but I'm glad you've enjoyed everything so far!  :)

Title: Chapter 19: The Promises of Slytherins 11 Jul 2008 8:58 pm
Reviewer: dancingkatz (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, what a place to end this! I know I should have reviewed each chapter but I couldn't stop hitting the Next button! Excellent story from the characterizations, the descriptions, the plot, the conversations. Bravo!

    Author's Response:

    I know—the dreaded cliffie.  :)   Since you were so involved in the story, I guess I'll let you off the hook on individual chapter reviews.  ;)   Thanks for commenting!

Title: Chapter 19: The Promises of Slytherins 09 Jul 2008 5:35 am
Reviewer: Jade_Sullivan (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow... I was left competely speechless. This chapter was beyond brilliant! I can't begin to describe the rollercoaster of emotions I just experienced while reading this... Harry and his unique, fourteen-year-old humor; Snape and his subtle, fathery ways; the action; the devistation... Malora, you are an unbelievably talented writer. And now, I feel like I've been punched in the gut now that I've reached the end of the chapter.

    Please, please update soon!

    (By the way, how could anyone rate this chapter ANYTHING but 10??)

    Author's Response:

    Aw, thanks!  To be honest, I wasn't completely happy with this chapter, so I wouldn't have rated it a ten myself.   On the other hand, I'm a perfectionist.  :)  I'm glad you enjoyed it so much!  I loved writing the humor in the conversations between Harry & Snape.

    I know the cliffhanger is evil, but I just had to end there.  Sorry!

     

     

Title: Chapter 13: The Other Side of Night 08 Jul 2008 4:56 am
Reviewer: Attackfish (Signed) [Report This]
    I um. sort of noticed something in this chapter that is probably mentioned elsewhere, but Harry doesn't learn the term Death Eater in the cannon universe until the Quidditch World Cup in book four, so he wouldn't know it yet.

    Author's Response: This came up in chapter 5 (on ff.net, I think).  I edited so that Harry is aware of rumors about Snape's allegiances, and after the events of chapter 5, he clearly knows that Snape was a servant of Voldemort's.  I figured once Harry learned that, it wouldn't take long before someone mentioned the term 'Death Eater,' so he'd be familiar with it by this chapter.  I'll have to look at the chapter again and see if I need to slide in a quick comment about that.
Title: Chapter 19: The Promises of Slytherins 04 Jul 2008 8:16 pm
Reviewer: Carina (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I was not expecting such an action packed chapter. It was excellent, you write action as well as you do the drama and dialogs. This chapter reminded me off Mummy2, with the light mood in between and parents with a son. I love that movie and so this chapter too, but I reviewed for some constructive criticism. One of the biggest strengths of this fic is the good and IC characterization (your Snapes are marvelous), but Harry is getting more and more bratty. This is not canon Harry, he has never been so outspoken, bold and blunt, not even in the 5th book in this way, he might look more IC with a bit of toning down. Secondly Lily is a mother and she was not acting like one. I'm not asking for her hysterics but she behaved like an impassive auror all through this chapter. Even Snape showed more emotions through it. Lily looked only disappointed when Harry was abducted, he' s her son I mean and she's only disappointed, not very right imo. Apart from this I think the story is excellent. Certainly one of the best going on. Keep up the good work. :)

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  I've worked hard on improving my action scenes. 

    I've had a few people tell me that Harry is bratty, and I have to agree he isn't as outspoken in the books...but to be honest, he rarely has an emotional reaction in the books (except for OotP, which you mentioned), and that bothered me.  So I took a little license there, since a truly canon Harry would just observe the events around him without having an emotional connection to them.  I think Rowling did that so that anyone and everyone could identify with Harry--he was a pair of eyes so that we could watch the mystery unfold.  But I wanted a more specific individual with emotional conflict, and someone who was willing to express those feelings. 

     I tried to show Lily being angry with herself rather than crying or something else that was a too predicable (and stereotypically female) reaction.  Severus and James both loved her because she *wasn't* like all the other girls, so I couldn't see her reacting in a traditionally female way.  But in any case, I'm planning on taking another stab at this chapter when I can find some time, so I'll take a look at the things you mentioned.  Thank you for your input! 

Title: Chapter 19: The Promises of Slytherins 04 Jul 2008 6:39 pm
Reviewer: MinervaM (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Stylish Writing + Good Charcterization + an Engaging Story Line = One Happy Reader (well, you have more than one happy reader... but you know what I mean!)... All joking aside, this is one of my favorite fics. The only thing that threw me a bit was th lightheartedness in the middle of the battle scene. Otherwise, it was great chapter. Please keep up the wonderful work, and if you other offer for Beta services falls through, I would be happy to help out.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Yeah, I think I'll go back at some point and re-write a few sections.  Weird how I didn't notice the awkward mood shift myself.  Maybe I need to re-read my own fic so I can remember the emotional tone of the previous chapters.  Anyway, thank you for the review and the offer!  :D

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