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Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 8:16 pm
Reviewer: Mahi (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great chapter. I love the Severus-Harry interaction. I like that you are making Harry realize that maybe Severus isnt so bad after all but still keeping his guard up a little. Its only expected since a lot of people have betrayed his family and him so far.
    I also like the part where he thinks about girls. It shows that he is gaining some of his self esteem to be able to even think about things like that (even though he quickly dispelled the thought). And the short thing was cute because if Harry is griping about his physical appearance then at least he wants to look good you know?
    Please update again soon. Oh it would be cute if Severus teased Harry about being short during their lessons.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  I'm glad you're liking Severus and Harry; they're fun to write, definitely. 

    Harry doesn't trust easily.  He's never had much reason to trust people, especially adults.  I think his trust would be hard to earn, but he would be very loyal once he does decide to let a person into his heart.  I think at this point that Harry would like to be able to trust Severus; the poor kid really does want a family or parental figure, I think, but he just isn't able to.  Severus has been pretty horrible to Harry for five years before this summer, and it's only been about 3 weeks or so since Harry came to live with him.  I think, given their past in particular and Harry's previous experiences with not being able to count on the adults in his life, that it's just a little too soon for Harry to be able trust Severus and everything be all right. 

    I may have Severus tease Harry about being short later in the story, but not yet.  Severus wants to repair their relationship, so he's being very careful not to do anything to cause any more damage, and for all he knows Harry could be sensitive about his height.  And, though I'm not at all sure about this and I might be wrong, but I'm thinking canon Severus may be on the short side, too.  It seems like I remember him being described as short somewhere... 

Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 2:01 pm
Reviewer: Phoenix1 (Signed) [Report This]
    Is Harry always going to be a slave? I know it creates angst but everyone needs a little hope, he's so depressing it's hard to keep reading.

    Author's Response:

    Aw, the million dollar question...to be honest, I haven't completely decided on an answer yet.  When I began the story, I intended for Harry to remain a slave, because I said he was example of how a person's life could be changed by an accident or a disease, and how they have to adjust to it, but can still live a full and rewarding life.  That's how I'm seeing Harry's case, and I thought (and still do think) that it could be life-affirming to write the story that way.

    But lately I've also been thinking that maybe I would find a way to free Harry either in this story or in the sequel, and give it that perfect happy ending. 

    As for Harry being depressed, yes, he is right now.  This is a really hard time for him...it's only been a few weeks since Sirius died and he's grieving and blaming himself. He's fallen victim to the slavery spell, which has had a profound effect on his life and the way he feels about himself, and he's facing the fact that he's the only person who can defeat Voldemort.  So yeah, poor Harry really does have a lot on his shoulders.  It's hard for me to write him like this sometimes, but I am trying to imagine how he would feel at this point in time, trying to deal with these heavy burdens that have fallen on him. 

    Things will get better for Harry.  It helps me to know all the things I have planned for him in the future, but I want "Slave Child" to be a long story so I'm trying to take my time and show all the details of his daily life with Severus and it's important to show how Severus is slowly changing and learning to care for Harry, or their future relationship won't be as believable, imo.  So even though Harry is very unhappy and depressed now, and will be for a while still, I do hope that if people hang in there til the end of this little saga, they'll be satisfied with the ending, I hope!        

Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 1:33 pm
Reviewer: iluvchocs (Signed) [Report This]
    Great chapter - Harry's clearly a bit suicidal, and I really liked the way Snape dealt with his nightmare.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Yes, Harry is looking forward to death right now.  He sees it as the only chance he has for happiness, but that will change, I promise.  And I thought Severus should respect Harry's privacy enough not to pry too much about the nightmare.  It seems to me that in Harry's case, Severus really should be extra careful about respecting Harry's rights precisely because Harry's under the slavery spell. 
Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 12:09 pm
Reviewer: dracosgoddess123 (Signed) [Report This]
    nice chapter. what was harry's nightmare about???

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Harry's dream was about Sirius' death.
Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 10:45 am
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    ahh even though snape didnt hug him he was still really sweet! fantastic to see the story updated again, it really is awesome and has totally grabbed my attention

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I have the first hug all planned out, but it won't be for a while still.  I'm really happy you're liking the story.  Thanks again!
Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 9:33 am
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    So many problems and complications coming from one little spell. Do they really know all it does or are they playing it by ear? It's good to see Snape softening up but one wonders what he would think of Harry's thoughts. Wouldn't that be a lovely complication...that if he truly wished to know his slaves thought he could hear them without legilimency.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Yes, the spell has really wreaked havoc on things, especially for Harry and Severus.  There may be some things about the spell they haven't discovered yet, but I don't plan to have the spell punish Harry for anything cause I think he's been through enough already.  Thanks again! 
Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 3:00 am
Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow, another chapter! I liked the interaction between Snape and Harry after Harry's nightmare. That seemed very natural, that Snape would want to comfort Harry. You made it clear that he is actually starting to understand Harry's despair at being a slave.

    Harry is still not willing to trust, but that is very natural.

    Good chapter.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Severus did begin to understand a little bit of what Harry is going through, and that empathy will help later on.  Harry doesn't trust Sev yet, but maybe the armor inside is beginning to crack just a tiny bit. 
Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 2:55 am
Reviewer: Nightshade (Anonymous) [Report This]
    GREAT WORK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'M REALLY REALLY REALLY LOOKING FORWARD TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!
    Thanks

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm looking forward to writing it...Severus should learn a bit more about Harry. 
Title: Chapter 15 18 Jun 2008 2:35 am
Reviewer: Alexis8907 (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww that was nice of Sev to wake him and even play chess to help take the nightmare off of Harry's mind. Another great chapter!

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Glad you liked it!
Title: Chapter 14 17 Jun 2008 8:57 pm
Reviewer: SurrealxChaos (Signed) [Report This]
    I love this story!! I'm excited to see what happens in the next chapter, as well as all the chapters that come after!

    Author's Response: Thank you!

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