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Title: Chapter 14 16 Jun 2008 7:01 pm
Reviewer: Mahi (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love this chapter. I really like the way that you are showing Severus' like and care for Harry growing like the mild teasing and the soft whisper of him saying that he would like Harry to be at the dinner as well.
    Harry's distrust and over submissiveness catching his eye is also great. I felt horribly sorry for Harry when he said that maybe Remus didnt want to talk to him since he was responsible for Sirius' death. Poor kid.
    I love love love the part about him not waking Harry but instead lifting him and dressing him in pajamas and tucking him in.
    Please update soon!

    Author's Response: Thank you!  Yes, Severus is really starting to care for Harry and is trying to find ways to show it, without being too blatant.  Harry may begin to trust him a little bit soon, or at least become willing to give Severus an opportunity to build trust, and Harry and Remus do have matters to clear up too, though that won't happen for a while.  Glad you liked Severus tucking Harry in...I enjoyed writing it, too.  I'm about halfway through chapter 15, and I'm going to try to finish it tonight.  We'll see how it goes... 
Title: Chapter 14 15 Jun 2008 8:12 am
Reviewer: le skrewt (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Another good chapter. I am so happy whenever I see that you've posted! I like snape's slow steps - now he's tucking Harry in and petting him - although it seems it will be a long time before Harry can take a first step toward trusting Snape. seems like it would take a major shock to get Harry to trust Snape at this point.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I enjoyed writing Severus putting Harry to bed, too.  I don't think he'd let himself be that open if Harry were awake, but he's really starting to care.  I'm going to work on Harry maybe beginning to take some baby steps towards Severus, too, soon...maybe in the next chapter.  I think a part of Harry really would like to begin to trust Severus, or at least to see if they could work through the past, but he's still so unsure that Severus won't take advantage and use any 'softness' against him later.  Severus' actions are showing his changing attitude, and Harry is noticing, but I think you're right that Harry needs something more concrete...he needs more than just little vague hints that Severus is changing.  He needs Severus to really open up to him before he can really open up to Severus...so it'll take a little more time.
Title: Chapter 14 14 Jun 2008 1:03 pm
Reviewer: ankita (Anonymous) [Report This]
    i simply love the story...and have been addicted to it quite literally.... i mean even in the middle of my xams i check it regularly....u r awesome....gr8 work....snd its good to see that u can now update it more regularly

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm glad you're enjoying the story!  I'm going to work on the next chapter this weekend!
Title: Chapter 14 14 Jun 2008 3:12 am
Reviewer: fanficaholic (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I really like this story! Keep up the good work! Can't wait for the next chapter!

    Author's Response: Thank you!
Title: Chapter 14 14 Jun 2008 12:21 am
Reviewer: Cecilia Farrell (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Another chapter yay! good job that was fantastic, hungry for more now though lol. I liked the way that you cleverly elicited Snape's reaction to the days events at the end and the way his actions spoke louder than any words he could possible have spoken at this moment in time. Its interesting that Dumble's could be so blind to whats going on with him, misinterpreting his demeanor at dinner and afterwards as his melacholy at being a slave. Only Snape seems to be on the right lines, although you did put some spoilers in the last chapters end notes so i guess is the answer is that he finds out to late what the matter with Harry is, but on a brighter note perhaps from the ashes of the past come bright beginings and as Harry's with Snape for the long haul it will be a very long future indeed. May they be Merry, (or as merry as Snape can possibly be lol).
    Oh well, please update soon. ;oD
    Cecilia

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  Yes, I think Severus can speak better with his actions right now than with words, and even more so when Harry is asleep.  He really is beginning to care, though, perhaps more than even he realises yet.

    Well, the adults do know that Harry is going through a hard time, but they just don't understand how bad it is.  Harry is very depressed about being a slave, but yes, there is more to it than that also.  Grief and guilt over Sirius' death is also a big factor, plus feeling so responsible for defeating Voldemort...all of it combined has added up to a huge burden for Harry.  But the adults, especially Severus, will do their best for Harry once they do understand better how depressed he is.  Thanks again! 

Title: Chapter 14 13 Jun 2008 3:22 pm
Reviewer: tabbycat (Signed) [Report This]
    This is brilliant! I love your descriptions of Prince Hall. It all sounds so delightful.
    Also, I like the way Snape and Harry still have a lot of distance, (although I'm guessing probably a lot of that will be covered in the next chapter)! This makes it much more interesting as a story, and it's not hanging on the emotions as much. Also the loss of apetite works perfectly for Harry.
    I particularly love Zan and Norri, especially their glares at Snape! (;
    The Snidgen was an innovative idea. Please keep writing! I'm looking forward to the update.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  Glad you like Prince Hall; it's based on an actual English manor house in north Yorkshire.  I only wish I had a 'Prince Hall' to live in...but I really wanted Harry to have a beautiful home.  He deserves it after having to live at Privet Drive for so long.

    Severus and Harry have come a long way, and they still have a long way to go, too, but yep, they should cover a little more distance in the next chapter. 

    I can't take credit for the snidget/Snitch though.  It's all in the HP Lexicon, but I'm glad you liked it.  Thanks again! 

Title: Chapter 14 13 Jun 2008 8:26 am
Reviewer: dracosgoddess123 (Signed) [Report This]
    congrats on becoming a featured story. this was a great chapter and i cant wait til the next ones up. plz update soon

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm just so thrilled about SC being a Featured Story; it's quite an honor!  I'm going to try to work on the next chapter this weekend.
Title: Chapter 14 13 Jun 2008 5:06 am
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    The way the adults act it is almost as if none of them had heard of mental illness, depression, or the seven stages of grief. Could it be that the wizarding world is still in the pre-Victorian times they like to pretend the whole world is in? Do they really have no clue what has piled up on Harry's shoulders over the years? Is Severus finally waking up?

    Great chapter; the characters are very much in character but I can help but think they are all blind.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  Yes, I do agree that the adults have a big gaping blind spot where Harry is concerned, but then, I often felt that way in canon, too.  Harry had way too much to deal with in the books...of course, it made fantastic stories and I love them, but in reality the adults should be ashamed of the way they let Harry (and friends) bear such heavy burdens alone.

    But I guess I'm guilty of using the same plot device here, too.  I'm not sure how modern a view the wizarding world has of mental illnesses, and if they do know how to cope with a young person who has suffered the burdens and losses that Harry has.  Possibly they are more adept at dealing with it than I've portrayed, but it wouldn't work as well for my story.  So I'm just saying that they do realise Harry is going through a difficult time, but they don't understand how bad it is (even though they really should) and they don't know exactly how to help him.  Thanks again! 

Title: Chapter 14 13 Jun 2008 2:13 am
Reviewer: Nightshade (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Have i mentioned how much i love this story? Well, i am now. I LOVE THIS STORY!!!!!!!!!!
    I'm sorry i wasn't very clear on my earlier question, now that i look back on it i'd get confused too. So sorry. My question was weather harry would imeadiately (sorry for spelling errors. Spellings not my strong suit.) or slowly get up to it?
    Again GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!! AND PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE AGAIN SOON, THIS STORY IS JUST TOOOO GOOD!!!! This chapter seemed to really touch me though. I'm looking forward to the end of this story VERY MUCH. I'll be sad when its done.
    Thanks!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  I'm glad you're liking the story!  I don't know how well I can answer, not because I'm trying to be difficult, but I don't want to put blatant detailed spoilers out where everyone can read them, cause I know some people really don't like to know much about what's going to happen.

    The best I can say is that Harry is determined to live to beat Voldemort, but he does want to be reunited with Sirius and his parents as soon as possible, too.  It's what he's living for right now.

    As for the end of the story, there's still a ways to go, and then I do think there will probably be a sequel.  Thanks again!

        

     

Title: Chapter 14 12 Jun 2008 10:31 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    Harry needed to have been awake for Dumbledore and Severus' conversation. What were you doing, woman, having him be asleep? ;-) I know that Severus is having to walk on eggshells with Harry at this time, but I hope you can find a way to sneak in a little more snark. Harry needs to get used to not hyperventilating when Severus is snarky! And I liked the use of canon in having Dumbledore remove the trace from Harry's wand. I also noticed that his hand is not dead and would like to have an explanation for why this has deviated from canon. It also looks like Narcissa is going to be a different kind of person in your story. I really enjoyed this update.

    Author's Response: Well, I've got to save something for later, don't I?  I'll try to work in a bit of snark before too long, okay?  You're right that Dumbledore's hand is healing, just because I decided I wanted him to live and be well, I suppose.  And yes, Narcissa is not going to win any 'Mother of the Year' awards here.  Thank you!  I'm glad you enjoyed it. 

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