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Reviews For Slave Child
Author's Response: Thank you! Severus is really trying, but it will take a while to undo all the damage he's done. Is it really any wonder that Harry is afraid after all that Sev has said and done to him? But they'll get there. And I do actually plan for Harry to be good about the cloak. He just may need it later on, but not for mischief. I may be wrong, but I think Harry has mainly used the cloak when he was trying to solve problems and/or help people, not so much that he just deliberately sets out to sneak around and cause trouble with it. Thanks again!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really so eager to get ahead to the mushy scenes and let Harry and Severus become all close and loving...you'll never know how hard it is for me to make myself hold back and go slow...but I do think it would take a little time so I'm trying. Thanks again!
Author's Response: Thank you! You'd better not let Sev hear you call him 'sweet' though...he'd chop you up for potions ingredients! *grins*
Other than that this was a nice little chapter, can't wait for the action though. Although there's not much action going on physically in this chapter, there's quite a bit emotionally, i like how your building up the relationship between the two. The 'talk' was interesting, who would of thought it, Poppy with her reprimands has made Snape into something closer resembling a father than an evil git of a potions master or a slave master. With those little touches: giving him an allowance, checking up on him getting to know him better aren't really the things that a master would do, but yet there probably not so obviously fatherly that Snape would notice what he's doing is fatherly. (I know that the above is blindingly obvious, but i liked the subtle deliverly of your writing). Thanks. Cecilia Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I think in the next chapter Harry will begin to wonder about Severus and how he's changed. I admit, I've never thought writing action scenes was my strong point. It is a weakness in my writing. I much prefer angsty and mushy scenes. I've always said that I could be perfectly happy with a story with no real plot just as long as there was lots of cuddly interaction with my favorite characters. I do have some action scenes planned, though, but I'm really quite nervous about them, so we'll just have to see how they go. Yes, I'm so glad you think Severus is acting 'fatherly' though it's not so obvious as to scare him off. He sees it as just trying to do the right thing. I do want Harry and Severus to develop a father/son relationship...that is one way that Sev is going to try to help Harry accept the slavery spell in the future, by emphasising that he sees Harry as his son, not as a slave. Thanks again!
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, that's exactly what's happening!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I do think they've reached a turning point, but it will still take a while for Harry to feel comfortable around Severus and be able to see him as someone he can go to for comfort and help. There are some fairly big turning points, (one was when Severus had to realise that he'd misjudged Harry about the journal and that opened his eyes to the possibility that he'd misjudged Harry in other ways, too), but mostly their relationship is moving along in small steps. I thought that might seem more real. Oh, are you going to write a sequel for "Reading the Signs"? I thought you said you were, and I loved that story!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm so happy you like it! Harry will eventually confide in Severus, and they will be very close, but not yet. It's really hard for me to hold back, but there are some other things that have to happen first, and I want it to all seem believable and not too rushed.
Harry is definitely cowed, but it is beieveable that he would be in this situation. Good job with this story. Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, Severus has accepted that he was wrong about Harry and he really does want to get to know him better. He really is reaching out to Harry as best he knows how. Glad you think Harry is believable here. I know he is a bit meek, but so much has happened to him lately, and he really is severely depressed, so I hoped it would make sense. Thanks again!
Author's Response: Thank you! Severus is trying, for sure. Returning the cloak was important, both to help their relationship, and I'm thinking Harry may need it at a future point in the story, too. I'll try to update again soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! Yes, things are beginning to change between Harry and Sev, though Harry isn't ready to trust Severus yet, but he is starting to wonder what's going on. And I was really proud of Severus for giving back the Firebolt and cloak, too. It was a big step for him. |
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