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Reviews For Slave Child
Author's Response: Thank you again! I appreciate it so much!
Again, I liked this chapter! Oo! Honeydukes! Don't mind if I do! ;) Author's Response: *Giggle* Yep, Sev does need to do that, doesn't he? And of course Harry's a trooper...he'd never make it through his life otherwise, would he, poor kid?
Even though this actually gave me a headache because of tension, I still really liked it!^^ I always like high drama stories. I find them more interesting. Again, wonderful chapter. (Hope Sev doesn't kill himself) Author's Response: Thanks! These past chapters were actually very difficult to write because I'm so softhearted. I hated to have Harry in such pain...I never can bear torture scenes and such. But I did think it was crucial to have Harry suffer because of Severus' misjudging him, and for Severus to have to accept that and not be able to deny it. It was important to shake Severus enough that he would begin to see how wrong he'd been all along.
Very good chapter! ^^ Author's Response: Yes, poor Harry indeed. Thanks again!
No, but I really liked this chapter. I liked the line "Just wait until fall. Draco Malfoy was going to wish he'd never been sorted into Slytherin." It made me smile. And the line, "But he was still a Potter, and he was still a brat." It made me laugh.^^ I'm happy I can go ahead to the next chapter!! Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you thought Severus in IC. I wasn't sure about that.
I also have issues with the way that Draco is portrayed. I understand that you put that he is being OOC, but still. I think a better way for him to have reacted would be with anger. If he's angry enough at Harry to expose his secret to the world, then he would be angry enough when he was saying that Harry took everything from him--he might even blame Harry for the death eaters lashing out at him and his mother because Harry defeated Voldemort--who knows? I would have liked to have seen anger, not tears. Perhaps held back tears, but not the sort of weak, sobbing image we're left with. I guess what I'm trying to say is that you can either make Draco angry and defiant or weepy and sympathetic, but it is very odd to attempt to do both. Good job overall! Update soon! Author's Response: Thank you! Well, I don't want to see Harry punished by the spell, I think he's been through enough...but there was an actual reason why the spell has not acted that would have been explained by the end. I don't know if it would have been a good reason, but it was a planned decision. Draco was difficult to write, and I did struggle with him. But at this point, I did see him as somewhat unpredictable and torn by conflicting emotions. He is angry, grieving, and frightened. He lashed out at Harry without thinking through the consequences, but once he was facing the music, he was pretty scared, and then just talking about the experience of being tortured and seeing his mother die was just too much for him to retain control. Thank you.
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Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked Norie and Zan.
Author's Response: Thank you again! I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'm really loving your story too. |
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