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Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 11:26 pm
Reviewer: kayt (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Your chapters never disappoint.I can't quite see how Dumbledore's idea will do Harry any favours, or how it would work with his slavery spell, but I have enough faith in your storytelling ability to believe that you have something plausible and creative planned out.And I'm sure you wouldn't, but please...don't turn Draco into Mr Nice Guy in the blink of an eye.

    Author's Response: Thank you.  I admit that DD's idea was a weak spot, but it was a plot device.  
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 11:09 pm
Reviewer: Ella (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I am beyond excited that you are sticking to your own vision of the story. You have clearly thought of this for over a year and you know your characters better than us, so to change your vision because of some bad reviews would have been the dissapointing thing.

    I feel for Draco at this point. He was expecting Snape's help after such a traumatic even and he was turned away harshly. And Harry's reaction shows just how noble he is; he is willing to help even somebody who has made his life miserable.

    Author's Response: Thank you.  Yes, it was hard for Draco when he was counting on Severus' help, and Harry is a very noble person.
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 8:05 pm
Reviewer: rosa (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Very disappointing chapter.

    Harry's response to Draco is simply not credible given the shame and humiliation Draco has inflicted upon him. And as others have already pointed out, you're violating the story parameters that you yourself set up.

    You're a very gifted writer; you can do better than this(and if your readers didn't think so, they wouldn't bother wasting their time giving you critical feedback).

    Author's Response:

    Which parameters would I have been violating?  Draco was not going to be under an actual spell.  It would have been his choice whether to go to work at Prince Hall for Harry and Severus, or to face a trial.  I do not believe that would have violated any terms.  Do you mean that it is not credible that Harry would have had sympathy for Draco upon learning of the other boy's experiences?  I disagree.  I believe that Harry is an extremely compassionate person.

    I'm sorry if you were disappointed, but as I've said, all I can do is my best. 

     

Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 7:24 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, and Kristeh, forgot to ask when the next chapter is coming. Because I hope that you will follow your heart and keep on writing this brilliant story, or you are going to have some very disappointed readers!!

    Author's Response: Hi, there.  I'm afraid I don't know.
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 4:34 pm
Reviewer: studiohq (Signed) [Report This]
    Plot twist!

    Author's Response: Yes, I suppose it was.
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 11:48 am
Reviewer: mithrilandtj (Signed) [Report This]
    Don't they have mind-healers in the Wiz World?
    Along with healing the physical, they've got to have healers for those in shock or grief and such. Just because they don't have a "place" for troubled kids, doesn't infer a lack of Professional help.
    And Draco needs *lots* of help

    Author's Response: I do not recall any mention of mind-Healers or therapists in the books, though it is entirely possible that I've only forgotten.  In the SC world I had decided not to have them, to have the wizarding world be considerably behind the Muggle one in this regard.  
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 10:53 am
Reviewer: crazychick84 (Signed) [Report This]
    Oooh a slave eh? interesting...I wonder how Draco is going to take that news lol, I wonder if he will be happy as long as he is with Severus... :)

    Author's Response: Draco would not have been very happy, no.
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 6:57 am
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Well now you've gone and confused things. Previously stated the slavery spell does not allow Harry to own anything so how is he to own Draco? It would in fact have to be Severus that owns him or the spell would according to your previous works cause Harry harm. If this was the case Draco will learn nothing as this is what he wants--Severus' help. As well Harry does not seem mentally sable enough to do this and yet Dumbledore is forcing this by insisting on sending Draco to prison knowing Harry won't let him go--manipulating him yet again--and Severus is letting him!

    Very disappointed in this turn.

    Author's Response: Well, Draco was not going to be under a spell.  He was not actually going to be a slave.  He would have reluctantly agreed to serve at Prince Hall for a time to avoid a trial and prison.  I thought of it as a little bit similar to a 'community-service' type sentence.  Dumbledore has done other ethically questionable actions, but yes, it was a plot device.   
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 6:54 am
Reviewer: le skrewt (Anonymous) [Report This]
    oh please NOOOOO... I *love* this story, PLEEEASE don't drag Draco into their family!!! Why do so many of the really really good Severus/Harry-bonding stories have to add Draco? I don't particularly like the character (or any of his "fanon" personalities) and he is also a complete scene hog. And the usual course is that once Draco's living with Severus and Harry, eventually he becomes part of the family. As Severus' godson, and given Harry's squishy-soft heart, it's almost a given. Please, I'm begging you, don't do this.... :( :( :(

    Author's Response: Well, I did not plan for Draco to live permanently with Severus and Harry, nor for him to become part of the family.  
Title: Chapter 48 30 Jul 2009 6:51 am
Reviewer: Sisyphus (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm glad you're going with your own vision for the story - this is your story, no one else's! :) When you write the story that wants to come out, it will be much better than if you tried to write what would please other people.

    I'm very much enjoying this story and looking forward to where it will lead. Keep up the good work! :D

    Author's Response: Thank you.  I have always believed that too. 

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