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Reviews For Slave Child
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll try!
I love this chapter, and I feel so bad for both Harry AND Draco! Can't wait to read your Christmas story! Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so happy that a lot of readers are feeling a little sympathy for Draco...it's what I was hoping for, but I do have to say that Draco's not done causing trouble yet. He will become jealous of Harry and Severus' relationship and a jealous Draco is never a good thing! I'm going to work some more on the Christmas story tonight. I hope I can get the next chapter finished and posted! Thanks again!
Great story! Author's Response: Thank you! I'm happy you like it!
Author's Response: Thank you! Though Neville is not a main character, he will appear periodically, so there might be some bits between him and Severus.
Okay, I love this story and once again, this chapter did not disappoint. Personally, I don't think you need the end notes warning us that you know Draco is OOC and there is a reason. It was clear to me that something was going on with Draco and I trust the author to reveal it when she judges that the time is right. I didn't even think he was OOC, really. There's a range of behavior that's "in character" for each person, and assuming Draco has something on his mind, he was definitely not out of his range. I think it would be good for you to have more faith in your storytelling skills, which are very good -- you shouldn't feel you have to justify your choices -- let the story tell itself is my motto. That's not to say that I don't reply to concerns in reviews, because I think you know I do, but in the chapter itself, I find it disruptive, personally. In my view, the meeting with Draco wasn't anti-climactic, either. It was --unpredictable-- which is a very nice thing in a story. Sure, the cliché pattern would be an exchange of insults and then hexes, yadda yadda. That you didn't go that way and you clearly have something more deep/thought-out planned is wonderful and exciting! I think your story is going swimmingly well. There is one thing I'm wondering about, and it's that things have been going SO well for Harry and Snape for a while now, in terms of their getting along, that I'm kind of hungry for some conflict there. You know? It's worked fine so far -- don't get me wrong -- because Snape has been very careful around Harry, for obvious reasons. However, I wonder how long he can keep up the "perfect dad" routine. Harry's been on tenterhooks too, but sooner or later he's bound to upset the man, and Snape being Snape, he might not handle it as well as we'd like. Life is made of conflict and real people are flawed, and now that they're past the first flush of "we're going to make this work," I'm wondering how long it will be before some conflict comes along to present them with some challenges! Feel free to email me (I think you have my address) if you want to discuss anything I've touched on here -- I love this story a lot! Aspen a fan Author's Response: Hi, Aspen! Thank you so much! It means a lot to me that you are enjoying the story. Yes, you're right, that there is a great range of behavior that each person is capable of, in stories just as in real life. I suppose I put the end notes there simply because I thought the meeting between the boys would be unpredictable and maybe disappoint some people, and I thought it might be easier just to say what I wanted to say once, rather than a bunch of times. Yes, there is a reason for Draco's behavior, and I hope it will make sense once we get to that point. And yeah, no relationship is perfect so I suppose there does need to be some conflict between Severus and Harry. I tried to have a little tension between them in the last couple chapters, when Severus was upset about Harry forgetting the note and then Harry fearing that he'd ruined their relationship. I am going to try to add some more little problems, too, if I can. Again, thank you and I'm really happy that you are enjoying "Slave Child"!
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Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I did know the meeting wasn't what people were expecting, but there is a reason. I hope it will be plausible when it's revealed. I don't know if that will be in the next chapter or not, probably within the next few, though. Thanks again!
I for one do love a long story as long as its updated regularly enough (I forget whats happened so far if its not lol!) so i'll be looking forward to lots more of this one : ) Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, poor Harry...I'd be like that, too, with the threat of that painful spell hanging over my head. I'm so happy you love the Harry and Severus scenes...I love them, too. They're the reason I'm writing this, lol! And yep, I think there's going to be a good bit more, at the rate I'm going! I try to update as quickly as I can, but real life does have a way of interfering at times, unfortunately. Also, I think next week I'm going to work on a holiday story with Harry and Severus, but we'll see. Thanks again!
Author's Response: Thank you! I love protective Severus, too! |
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