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Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 7:13 am
Reviewer: cathyrf (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, can my heart break any more for Severus? From almost not being able to perform the healing spell to his sorrow at never apologizing to Harry for his behavior, I'm just feeling so bad for the guy. *sniff*

    I do have a feeling Harry's going to say something along the lines of he'd wished he died, and if that conversation happens I hope Severus can say the right words to prove to Harry somebody does care about him. I have a feeling I'd better be hanging onto the tissue box on the next chapter. I sure needed it this one.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!  I felt sorry for Severus, too, but at least in regards to his remorse about Harry, I thought he kind of has that coming.  In the past, he was much too harsh with Harry and never gave him a chance.  Apologising doesn't come easily to Severus, so I thought it would take something big...like almost losing Harry...to make Severus just go ahead and do it. 

    Harry isn't really going to say much about dying, but he just might act on those suicidal tendencies before long.  Severus will have to try very hard to convince him that it's better to live, but I think if he can convince Harry that he really does love and want him, it will help.  Thank you!  

Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 6:28 am
Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow. Thanks for such fast updates! This was a good chapter. I particularly liked the part where Snape was possessive of Harry and GLAD that Harry had to live with him because of the slavery spell. That reaction actually seems rather Snapeish; or at least it is how I would imagine Snape loving someone but not yet getting the part that real love is more unselfish than that. He wants Harry to be with him but is not thinking about what Harry would like. I'm expecting, though, that you're going to move his emotional progression on as the story continues. I'm also wondering if Severus is going to hear from Harry that he wishes Severus would have let him die -- what a kicker that will be to Severus!

    Author's Response: Thank you!  That's how I'm seeing Severus right now, too.  'My' Severus is a good man at heart, but he's certainly not perfect.  He is tending to be too possessive and selfish right now, though a lot of that is because he's so inexperienced about personal relationships.  He's had very few people that he was close to, and he's insecure because he loves Harry, but he's unsure about how Harry feels about him.  He knows that he was awful to Harry, and that Harry doesn't really trust him, and he imagines that Harry would leave him now if he could (and Severus is probably right about that), so that's a big cause of Severus being jealous and possessive...the fear of losing Harry.  Not that it's right for him to be that way, and he does need to grow and learn to be more generous with his love.  And yes, it will be very hard for Severus when he realises that Harry just wants to die.  But we'll see what happens!  Thanks again!
Title: Chapter 5 12 Jul 2008 5:06 am
Reviewer: writeurlife (Signed) [Report This]
    This is really good. You said this is an eventual Snape adopts Harry fic.. Does that mean that Harry's eventually going to get free?
Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 3:54 am
Reviewer: Keats (Signed) [Report This]
    So happy Harry is OK...regardless of how Harry came to him Sev now sees the boy as his son, I think Sev would now rather have died than have Harry leave and go to live with someone else even if it is the Weasleys (who love him). Sev is going to tell Harry how he feels I hope nothing comes in between them to stop him from talking and I hope Harry actually hears him

    Author's Response: Thank you, and that is exactly how Severus is feeling right now.  We'll see how well Severus can explain, but I have a feeling that complete understanding between the two may not happen just yet.
Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 2:55 am
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely chapter. Lots of great insight into Severus' feelings. Now I must admit that I'm looking forward to seeing how the slavery spell actually affects Harry.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm looking forward to the next few chapters, but I'm also a bit nervous about them, because it's the part that is really key to their whole relationship, and I've been looking forward to writing them for so long.
Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 2:48 am
Reviewer: ReginaCaeli (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Whew! What a chapter! I like how Severus froze and almost could'nt heal Harry,I've been there and you wrote it very realisticaly,I also enjoyed his posessivenes and am looking forward to when Harry wakes up.

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I thought it might be harder for Severus to maintain his composure if it's someone he really cares for who's in danger.  I think it's even more heart-wrenching to see those cool, calm, collected types panic, because they so rarely do that you know how upset they must be.  And Sev does strike me as being a bit possessive...a character flaw he might need to work on.
Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 2:31 am
Reviewer: Morgansnape87 (Signed) [Report This]
    whooT Keep it up

    Author's Response:

    Thank you!

Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 1:37 am
Reviewer: little-sun (Signed) [Report This]
    Drama! A battle! Voldemort's demise. Everything one may want. Mila

    Author's Response: Thank you!
Title: Chapter 21 12 Jul 2008 1:17 am
Reviewer: xoAngelicDemise (Signed) [Report This]
    Gah! I'm gonna cry! That was so sweet I think I got a cavity! Another great chapter! Can't wait for more! How many more exclamation points do you think I can use?! Write more!

    Author's Response: Thank you!  I'm enjoying your story, too.
Title: Chapter 20 12 Jul 2008 1:16 am
Reviewer: tabbycat (Signed) [Report This]
    Ooh! Your cliffes are so terrible! Especially when I've restricted myself to one chapter a night (yes, I know, pity me) to get my work done.
    Anyway, I thought it was really good, I could see the scene really well - the barrels, the cobbles, the panic...
    I'm trying to remember if Snape had to give up being a spy after taking Harry in...
    So, does Harry no longer feel like suicide? Did he defeat Voldy by loveing Snape protectively enough? Or something along those lines? I'll find out tomorrow. (:
    Oh, and I thought the killing of Voldemort was well done, similar to the book (as was George's ear btw - well done on that) I thought for an instant it would be the gold stream again, but something must have changed.

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