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Title: Chapter 26: A Serpent's Clothing 27 Oct 2008 7:00 am
Reviewer: Blackthorne (Signed) [Report This]
    This chapter reminded me of your ability to write many different types of scenes well: internal thoughts, angst-ridden dialogues, ethereal mindscapes, fast-paced action, friendly banter. Some authors do some of these well, but not others; or overuse the types of scenes they are comfortable with. You write the scene as it needs to be written, which keeps things interesting and consistent.

    I've lost track of time in the story. Is it during term? Hermione mentions having homework to do near the end, but this would mean both Harry and Severus are missing classes. If August was in the mainly-muggle village described earlier, is he a muggle-born? (Would be unusual for Slytherin.)

    The dialogue between August, Harry, and Ginny after the game didn't quite seem to follow, but perhaps I'm just a poor judge of such conversations. August's comment “You’ve got yourself a lovely girl, Harry” accompanied by a "rueful smile" would seem conciliatory to me, though Harry apparently expects something more. He does indulge his feelings quite a bit.

    Finally, a minor point: is it Chudley Canons, or Cannons???

    Author's Response:

    Thanks Blackthorne.  I appreciate the compliment about my ability to write different types of scenes.  I don't really think about what needs to be; I just do it.  :o)  Is it is almost Christmas hols. And yes, both Severus and Harry are missing classes, but at this point with all that has gone on, even Severus doesn't care much about that.  Harry was in desperate need of some time alone with his father.  Yes, August is a Muggle born, and yes it is very unusual for a Slytherin.  But he was put there mainly because of Severus.  And as Severus explains in LC, there are all types in Slytherin. 

    August was trying to be conciliatory.  He was admitting his mistake but trying to keep face as well.  Harry was just still feeling annoyed at him for trying to interest Ginny in the first place.  I thought he was actually pretty nice to August.  Harry, generous though he is, still would have liked to just smack him one.  He doesn't of course, but no I don't think he would have wanted anything more except maybe an all-out, unprompted apology.  LOL

    I checked the HP wiki site and it said Canons.  So I went with that.  Thanks for the review. :o)

Title: Chapter 26: A Serpent's Clothing 26 Oct 2008 4:05 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    I'm so mad that I went to bed too early last night, and you probably posted this story about an hour after I retired! I could have had pleasant dreams of Sev!

    What can I say--briliant as usual. Wow Harry is really getting hot and heavey with Ginny, is he? I just loved Sev's reaction!

    Ooh, and Harry got Auggie good, didn't he?

    Author's Response: Thanks, Pandora.  Glad you enjoyed the chapter.  Yep, Harry and Ginny are getting pretty serious, but Harry at least, has taken Severus' words to heart where their physical relationship is concerned.  He's grown up quite  bit.  :o)
Title: Chapter 26: A Serpent's Clothing 26 Oct 2008 1:59 pm
Reviewer: Nakago (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow. I must admit I've been suprised. When Auggie said that he owned Severus' much I've tought he was a Death Eaters' child and Severus gave him a way out. But he wasn't. He was a child from that village from chapter 4, wasn't he? From that Muggle village. Or any other village. Yeah, chapter 4, named "Hero"... who was this "hero", Harry really? Or maybe Severus? Or both? I'm bewitched.

    But of course, I like all this chapter. Although Mr. August and his story - and Severus' place in it - have made the biggest impression on me. I'll be thinking about it for months, I suppose.

    God, how I love this fanfiction. I'm delighted, really. And I'm waiting to more, of course ;-).

    Author's Response: Yep, August was a  child from that village, which yes was mostly a Muggle village.  I'm glad you liked that part; it was nice to be able to reveal a little more about Severus' time spent pretending to be in Voldemort's service.  I'm delighted you made the connection.  :o)  The hero referred to in chapter 4 was a twist on words, really.  It was referring to Harry at the moment being a hero to the wizarding world, but really to Severus for being a real hero when he tried his best to do what he could under very terrible circumstances.  I'm glad this will stick with you; that's what I love to hear!  Thanks so much for the lovely review.  I will work on the next chapter and try to get it out as soon as possible. 
Title: Chapter 26: A Serpent's Clothing 26 Oct 2008 11:00 am
Reviewer: fluff (Signed) [Report This]
    Very enjoyable chapter, especially Ginny putting 'Auggie' in his place! Everything seems to be going lovely and smoothly at the mo, what spanners are you about to throw in the mix?

    Author's Response: Oh lots of things to twist our happiness up.  You know me.  I love the drama.  :oP
Title: Chapter 24: Pride and Prejudices 25 Oct 2008 11:12 am
Reviewer: Nakago (Signed) [Report This]
    Fantastic! Recipes of non working potions, eseys about pureblood foolishness, hawk post... And the best:
    Bigamy? For Twins? Oh My God!
    LOL

    Thanks a lot, it's really wonderful.

    Author's Response: Thank so much.  I enjoyed writing this chapter a lot.  I'm glad you liked it.  :o)
Title: Chapter 23: Crash 25 Oct 2008 10:23 am
Reviewer: Nakago (Signed) [Report This]
    Great! Funny at the begining than serious talk which I was waiting for and another child play. Really great.

    I love this fanfiction and the previous one. Severus is here so... caring. And so unsure. So is Harry. It's really fantastic.

    Author's Response: Thanks!  And thanks for reviewing.  :o)
Title: Chapter 25: A Few of My Favorite Things 20 Oct 2008 11:07 am
Reviewer: fluff (Signed) [Report This]
    A lovely rich chapter as always, love the toe curlingly embaressing contraception practise!
    And loved Harry's jealousy about Ginny and Auggie, as if Ginny would want any one other than Harry especially the new improved version!

    Author's Response: LOL  Nah, Auggie's too old for her anyway.  :oP  Poor Harry though, until he realizes it.  I'm glad you liked the Contraceptive Charm.  I've been waiting forever to write it. :o)  Thanks for the review.  I'm happy you enjoyed. 
Title: Chapter 25: A Few of My Favorite Things 20 Oct 2008 7:14 am
Reviewer: Stump_Pan (Signed) [Report This]
    Please update again soon! This series has been one of my favorite ways to avoiding doing my homework since last Christmas and has kept me sane during my exams.
    I loved this chapter. Harry's embarrassment was just so funny and so real. So great job. Hope to see more soon.

    Author's Response: Thanks so much!  I'm so glad you liked it.  I'll try not to be such a slowpoke.  I've begun the next chapter.  So keep nudging!  Makes me smile to know you've enjoyed it for so long.  I'll try not to keep you in suspense to long.  Glad you liked the Contraceptive Charm part. Cause Harry sure didn't!  LOL :oP
Title: Chapter 25: A Few of My Favorite Things 20 Oct 2008 5:48 am
Reviewer: jolisgsd (Anonymous) [Report This]
    What a riot that first part was!! Absolutely brilliant.

    Poor Harry, struck with jealousy. Loved that last sentence! It perfectly captures his mood.

    Author's Response: Thanks, Mom! And yep, Harry is jealous.  All part of growing up, and now that old Voldy is gone, he gets to do just that!  :oD
Title: Chapter 25: A Few of My Favorite Things 20 Oct 2008 3:43 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh my God!

    MY cheeks are flaming red, and I'M and adult! Poor poor Harry, and evil evil Sev!
    I would so die of embarrassment!

    I love it though! I just knew that they were going to a Quidditch match, I could feel it in my bones.

    Please update soon, you have really got my curiousity peaked about your picture of the full-moon. I know that it has to involve Remus, but in what regards?

    Author's Response: Thanks!  LOL  Glad you were embarrassed.  Must be doing something right.  I'll update soon.  Keep bugging me!

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