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Title: Chapter 22: Harry's First Holiday 25 Sep 2008 6:24 am
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Sorry it's taken so long to review! But it's another great chapter! Interesting choice, to have them return to Severus' childhood home, but it's a great opportunity for them to learn more about one another and to discuss some of the issues that still need to be worked out.

    Loved the discussion about how hard it is for Severus to punish Harry and even to let him apologize. It's an interesting dilemma (yes, I'm overusing the word 'interesting', lol). I can really understand how Severus feels, and it is very hard for him to move beyond his guilt and remorse because he does have good reason to feel badly...he did badly mistreat Harry in the past, punish him unfairly, and in a way, he's partly to blame for Harry having to live with the Dursleys all those years, too. Any loving parent has a difficult time when they've hurt their child or realise they've treated them unfairly, and most of us haven't to nearly the degree that Severus did.

    On the other hand, Harry needs him to try to not let the past interfere...or maybe they need to really have it out about the past before they can begin to move beyond it.

    Well, I can't wait to see what's coming next!
Title: Chapter 22: Harry's First Holiday 16 Sep 2008 7:02 am
Reviewer: Blackthorne (Signed) [Report This]
    Wasn't it dangerous for young Harry's parents to take him somewhere public like the beach, especially without doing anything to disguise the true family relationships involved?

    Does Harry understand the nature of Eileen's current incapacitation? He seems a bit suspicious about the timing, although I don't remember Severus ever explaining it to him. Also, what happened to Eileen's house elf? If he is still there, why doesn't he appear when Severus and Harry arrive, and if he is gone, who is taking such good care of the house?

    Severus' start to the broom race with Harry was perfect, as was his justification later as to why this did not constitute cheating. Good choice to have them go to Snape Manor. This was sure to dredge up unpleasant memories for Severus, and difficult conversation for both, but it needed to be done. Severus probably still needs to come to terms with his childhood and its influence on his life, and Harry needs to understand this as best he can.

    It does seem uncharacteristic, though, both of Harry and Severus, to give up so readily on the conversation about apologies, punishments, and Severus' inability to forgive himself. Clearly this will need to be revisited, but in the past when difficult, unresolved topics were set aside, there was usually an expressed intent to come back to it later. (Severus' whole list of holiday discussion topics evolved out of this.) Severus' customary logic seems to desert him here. It seems he would want to get to the bottom of this, if only because he knows Harry finds it troubling. On some level, he must also realize the consequences of failing to set and enforce limits for a teenager, especially one as impulsive and stubborn as Harry can be. Such a failure can have almost as dire consequences as erring in the other direction, as Tobias did. If Severus cannot adjust the skewed perspective he voices in this conversation, he will effectively become a pushover, or worse -- a doormat, something Harry seems to sense and resist. This would be quite out of character.

    Finally, you seem to like ice imagery to represent attack and forcing apart, and use it to good effect:

    "'Nothing.' The word was an icicle plunged between them, dividing them. Harry’s mouth snapped shut"

    And from LC (original):

    "'He does not love you, Harry.' The ice worked its way closer, worming its way into the confusion." [Hmmm -- Voldemort and Sirius both tried to convince Harry that Severus did not truly love him.]

    "And his father’s flames were digging with all its heat beside the hand, trying to dislodge the ice that didn’t belong here."
Title: Chapter 22: Harry's First Holiday 16 Sep 2008 2:55 am
Reviewer: Monica (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Best. Ending. Ever.
Title: Chapter 22: Harry's First Holiday 15 Sep 2008 7:33 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Ok, so you have extemely bad timing!

    I opened up the computer when I got to work, and my boss wasn't in yet. I saw that you had updated "Gift", and my heart leapt with joy. Then my boss came in, and I had to suffer through hours until lunch hour, when I could finally read this story. IT WAS TORTURE HAVING TO WAIT!!!!!

    But of course, it was well worth the wait!!

    What can I say? Brilliant, brilliant and by the way it is brilliant!!!

    Well, poor Harry hasn't managed to convince Sev to punish him so he can relieve some of HIS guilt. Maybe if he explained to his dad, that he needed to be punished so he could feel a sense of release; then just maybe Sev would understand.

    It's like anything in life, we must atone for our sins, or we carry them with us without relief.

    You totally fooled us too; never thought that they would go to Severus' childhood home!

    Ok, I'll shut up now, and tell you again how much I have enjoyed yet another excellent chapter.

    You do realize of course, that we are still left wanting more.....so get started on chapter 23 girl! C'mon, get those fingers tapping!! :)
Title: Chapter 22: Harry's First Holiday 15 Sep 2008 5:57 pm
Reviewer: fluff (Signed) [Report This]
    Loved the broom trip, the baby Harry sand castles image with sand in Sev's face. Sad about the study and punishments, obviously over harsh and Severus is being perhaps over lenient because he does not want to be like his father and hurt Harry. Parenthood is a hard balancing act which we all try to perfect! Nice chapter looking forward to more about their holiday
Title: Chapter 22: Harry's First Holiday 15 Sep 2008 4:55 pm
Reviewer: waterleaves (Signed) [Report This]
    HAHAHA! The ending was an absolute riot! I love the way you touched on so many of their issues! this vacation will definitely be jam-packed with emotional revelations I hope. I liked Harry trying to describe the urge to follow Sirius, and the beginning section from the past was so beautiful and gut-wrenching! I really enjoyed baby Harry! Another great piece dear!
Title: Chapter 20: Either, Or 10 Sep 2008 12:24 am
Reviewer: Elphaba (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent chapter! I love the emotions and how the manipulation of Harry was handled!

    Author's Response:

    Thank!  Glad you enjoyed it!

Title: Chapter 20: Either, Or 08 Sep 2008 2:49 pm
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Brilliant! Loved it!

    Tobias Snape was as much a monster as his foul wife. How did Severus Snape rise from the combined bile of these two heinous people...I know, with the love of Lily evans to help him.

    But this terrible childhood abuse, combined with his later treatment of his own son are the reason's why Severus is unable to be harsh with HArry any longer. He was the shadow of his own father for a while in his treatment of James Potter's son, but he got a second chance and he cannot blow it, for his own sanity.

    I loved the way Sev, Remus and Sirius all worked together to protect HArry, and how severus and Sirius both exclaimed so vehemently in the negative about Harry putting in a good word for Narcissa.

    Tonks is one cheesed off Auror, I can't wait to see some kind of resolution there. And Scrimgeour must have felt like he had swallowed acid when forced into the corner about Remus.

    I loved that HArry recognised the advocates sleezy moves towards Sev, but I am not sure that the moves were entirely because she was crawling to Harry Snape's father. We've SEEN Sev without his shirt. Hmm hmm!

    God, I so hate that Scuzball Lucius might walk free because of one good deed he did (or maybe two) when he has spent the majority of his life murdering, raping and pilaging. It's sickening.

    And Bellatrix...has she bought about her own end?

    I am not sure exactly why all of the Weasleys, DD, Hermione, et all are there for the trial, especially as it seems to be a given that Malfoy will walk free.

    And HArry's fear for Ginny was such a cliffhanger. Will he be more than a little peeved with his dad, or what.

    Hey, I can find out PDQ! I have another chapter to read.

    Thanks Tab for a wonderful ride.

    Les

    Author's Response:

    LOL  That's true about Sev without his shirt.  Yummy.

    Tonks and Remus are definitely having issues at the moment.  Don't be excited for a resolution any time soon though!  LOL 

    Everyone was simply there to support Harry.  They've been his pseudo-family for years now.  And they didn't know Malfoy would get off scot free.

    And yep, Severus cannot be harsh with Harry.  He is much too afraid of becoming his father, and that combined with his terrible guilt of the past, he will never be able to do it.   You're right, Severus cannot blow this with Harry.  He wants, much like he did with Lily to make his son happy.  To both of their detriments, sometimes but they figure it out eventually.

     

Title: Chapter 21: Red 07 Sep 2008 9:12 am
Reviewer: b_e_skrewt (Signed) [Report This]
    good chapter! and i can't begin to guess. australia? :D
Title: Chapter 19: Impact 06 Sep 2008 9:00 pm
Reviewer: Agneta (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hi, me again. 9 lines - 9 - and you had me in hysterics. "I am not distraught - I do not require a hug."
    !!!! That whole scene was inspired and totally awesome!
    You are very, very good!
    Thank You for a wonderful laugh!
    Agneta (a Swedish fan)

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