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Reviews For Lily's Charm: The Gift
*facepalms* But dang, this was a wonderful chapter. I loved how Sirius and Severus were both jealous as they watched each other interact with Harry. But again, you've highlighted the more mature side of each man and I was thrilled that each allowed the other his time. It shows how much they both love Harry. As much as Sirius doesn't like it, he realizes that Severus is Harry's father, and Harry has learned to care about him as well. Same deal with Sev. Brilliant little...I dunno what you would call it...but it was purely brilliant. :-) Severus' declaration of his love for Harry was so well done but not overly sweet, and I've always appreciated that about your tender scenes. I dunno why, but I loved how Severus kept his hand on Harry's hair while he was waking up. Finally, I'm glad you've made Harry conflicted. I can't stand it when everything is just lovely somehow and everyone skips down the hallway arm-in-arm. It's only natural that he'd feel a little strange over Sirius' return. By the way, if you ever would want to attempt it, I think you'd write your own Sirius/Harry story very masterfully. You should try it. Siriusly. LOL. Forgive me, I haven't used that expression in years. *deep sigh* I loved this chapter, but then again, I don't think there's been anything you've written that I haven't been enamored with. Can't wait for more (of either story)! Author's Response: You know, I wasn't really trying to be all emotional in this chapter. I don't really know how it happened. It just sorta ran away with me, I guess. It was a fun one though. I think it's my fave now. I did like to have Severus physcially aware of Harry's presence throughout. Like he was making sure he really was solid. You know? I can't stand too fast lovliness either! Irks me, it does. Harry is definitely in an odd place. And he doesn't know what to do with all this conflict. LOL He'll work on it though. He and Sirius are up for a nice long chater next up. It'll definitely take a few chapters to get it all ironed out. Enamored? Wow. I AM good. LOL Thanks Jade, for the review. You are the best. :o)
Looks like Severus is OK, but I think Sirius is in for a shock. Poor guy. comes back to life and finds out that the whole world has changed in just a few months. Author's Response: Thanks Mom. Knew you'd like that one. :oP Yep, Sirius is not doing so great, I'll tell ya that. Ah well. It wouldn't be LC without a bucketload of angst coming at you from all directiions, eh?
(I have a new favorite chapter. I'm sure I'm over my quota now). It was fascinating to watch the chapter start from Sirius' POV. The control he had to maintain to not just immediately jump over and show himself to Harry had to be huge. And the poor guy - it has to be quite surreal to watch Severus and Harry interact. He did get to witness Severus being so tender with Harry (and I've got more to say on that) and I hope it's the start of a change of perspective on Severus so Sirius can accept him as Harry's dad. And I got very teary-eyed when Sirius did come out of the background to show Harry he was alive. In his hug and his words, his love for Harry was so palpable. And poor Harry, so entirely conflicted about his presence there, all because of his deep love for Severus. Dancing indeed....are they waltzing or tango-ing? But hands down, the thing I loved most about this chapter was Severus and Harry conversing. Those have always been my favorite parts of all these chapters, but their dialogue from beginning to end moved me in so many ways. I'm glad Severus decided to "not go quietly" where Sirius is concerned (and we all know Harry wouldn't have let him anyway). But it wasn't just the soft, deeply heart felt words to Harry that Severus spoke that moved me, it was his actions as well. He always had to have a hand on Harry in some fashion, whether it be carding his fingers through his hair or holding his hand or his chin....it's as though through touch he could truly believe he hadn't lost Harry. But some of the words spoken to Harry were powerful: “Do you have any idea how much I love you?” his father demanded in a hoarse whisper. and... “I told you once that I would protect you until I no longer had the ability. Nothing has changed.” Get out the tissue box. I needed a couple. Man, I adore it when Sev pronounces his love like that. And they did their fair share of dancng around each other. Harry just isn't able to hear his dad tell him (and he did several times) that he wasn't to blame and that Sev wasn't angry with him. Harry's armor of guilt and shame isn't coming off anytime soon. Harry couldn't even look Remus in the eye. (And what's this cryptic tease about Remus being in for a surprise? We're paying attention to your taunting out here in LC Land...). Harry has a lot of healing left to do, and not the physical kind. Harry's indignation at Severus offering himself up to Voldemort was just downright....cute! I don't know how else to describe it. And Severus being all amused at him over it. But his comment about Sirius and Remus not allowing Harry out of their sight to go find Severus in that event seemed to make Harry very uncomfortable, as we saw when he looked over at Sirius. With that resentful statement about Sirius closing the chapter, is Harry harboring some fear that Sirius might try and take Harry from Severus? I know Sirius is probably going to deserve whatever Harry dishes out verbally next chapter, but I still can't help but feel sorry for him a bit in advance. I also don't think Severus or Poppy is going to let out Harry out of bed for the next month (exaggerating, of course) or that Severus is going to leave Harry's side for one frickin' minute. He will have to sleep at some point, so I don't know how Sev is going to manage this feat. For all the "dancing" I must say that this chapter (especially the Sev and Harry moments) left me with the warm fuzzies so deeply I'm sweating here. Hug, hug....who gets the hug? Harry got two hugs in this chapter already. Maybe this one's for Sev for all he did to get his son back home. He deserves it big time. Author's Response: Well, I have to say that lots of this chapter angst is all because of you. You inspired a lot of the last bit. And so I'm glad you liked it. It definitely was an angsty chapter. Love them that way though. Yes, I do think that Harry is a mite worried that Sirius will try to get Harry away from Severus. I think Sirius' hatred of Sev is much more palpable, even though Severus really has the same amount of hate. Sev just hides it better. Mostly cause he knows it will make Harry unhappy. Severus too has accepted the idea of Sirius. He knows how much Harry loves Sirius. Whearas Sirius can't understand how much he loves Sev. So yep, Sirius ends up looking like the bad guy here. Not his fault really, but there you go. As for Harry's anger, it is justifiable because it's on Sev's behalf. And no matter that it was when he was a kid, Sirius has some explaining to do. LOL No, Sev is not too game to let Harry out of his sight. I am so glad, by the way that you liked Sev's hand always on Harry. It was a little detail, but I'm glad you 'got' it. He's really trying to convince himself that Harry's whole. Yep. So sweet... Those two lines are my favorites as well. YAY :o)
Wow, I am glad that Sirius is back but I think that, although he will be happy that he is a free man, he isn't going to like the changes in Harry's life (or Remus' either) Author's Response: Barbara, I think you're the first person who's commented on Remus. You are so right that his life has changed big time and I think you're right. Sirius is not going to like either of those changes. Severus and Remus are friends now, and that alone is a shock to Sirius. Oi. Poor Sirius. And yep, self-esteem help was very appreciated. LOL
Loved how Remus stopped Sirius from walking away by saying, "Harry would want you to try." I'd almost say there's some Slytherin in that boy, except it was just the plain old honest truth. And Sirius will do anything for Harry. I was just jumping all over the place feeling sorry for my boys. Sirius and his anger and sadness for the absence of trust with the truth and for a future that he suddenly sees that is empty without Harry. For Remus being caught in the middle (I felt for him on that line when he wished Severus would stop calling him "Lupin") and pleading with Sirius to come with him, and having to (maybe deservedly, maybe not) take the brunt of Sirius' anger at Remus not trusting him with that truth. And Severus, for feeling all the old deep self-doubts that his Harry would naturally go with Sirius when they are reunited. I loved Severus' surprise at Harry's wisp staying with him. Maybe that one little thing (not so little in meaning) can give him some hope that Harry will love him as much as ever. Our St. Ginny is always the voice of reason. Boy, she handled those guys beautifully. How is she SO wise at 15? She told Sirius exactly the way it was, and it was *her* he listened to when he wasn't ready to listen to Remus. And I cannot blame Sirius for his anger at all at Severus and finding it so incredulous to believe Sev and Harry had this relationship they were describing to him. OE, if I hadn't come along for this amazing ride and I was thrown into this story just at this moment in time like Sirius, heck, I wouldn't believe it either! But as always, I commend you for your mastery story telling. I really got teary when Sev had his little breakdown at Harry's bedside. He'd have to crack eventually especially being SO convinced that Harry is lost to him. But I think his flame getting so hot is what caused Harry to wake up. And who's watching in the wings? It has to be Sirius. Our poor men (and one teenager) are so broken. That's the best word I can find to describe them. I can't think that Harry's going to wake up and be okay after this...his storm has been too fearful and mistrusting. I'm wondering what he will be like right now. While all four need each other to get through this, does any of them have the mental resources left that isn't so compromised by their emotional baggage that they can start the healing process? Are they going to need some outside help with this? Ginny's awesome, but she's too young to help on this magnitude. Just how DO they start the healing process from here? As one of your faithful readers, I cannot wait to find out. Who gets the hug? Geesh, everybody needs one. Multiples of them. A plethora of hugs for all. Oh, and chocolate cupcakes for everybody. Those make me feel better. Here, OE....I put extra sprinkles on yours.
Author's Response: Thanks! I will. :o)
Please (even pretty please) update soon!! Author's Response: Sorry! But we have lots to work out next chapter so I had to leave something, didn't I? LOL Thanks for the review and I will do my best to update quickly. :o)
And Severus, for crying out loud, your son loves you. The man needs to get a few courses in self esteem. Yep, just like in the first story, Severus feels that those he loves will abandon him for someone "better" and that is all he deserves because Harry (and Lily) are such loving people that they simply couldn't love him. He is so willing to give up the people he loves to people that he feels are better for them and better people that I want to smack him one. He forgave Lily for her "betrayal" with James because James was better than him. Now he is willing for Harry to choose Sirius because Sirius is "better and more lovable" than him. Calling Dr. Freud, emergency case at Hogwarts, calling Dr. Freud. Author's Response: ROFL You crack me up! And you are so right. Severus seriously needs some intervention. And he better get it quick, before this cycle keeps repeating itself over and over and over again. Get a grip man! I love your analogies between the two relationships (Lily/Sev and Harry/Sev). You are brilliant. I even mentioned this review over at the group in response to something someone said, so thanks! And I'll get to work on Severus. :oP
I loved this chapter sooo much. Sev, And Sirius were both hreatbreaking, REmus was just so sad and Ginny was absolutely brilliant. One parallel I think, is that in LC, Harry had his head down on Sev's chest and was nearly eaten up by despair that his father would never come back. Here, Sev is despairing that he will never have his son back because he thinks he will lose him to Sirius. It's wonderful that Sirius feels just as strongly towards HArry now that he knws he is Sev's child and not JAmes. Though I defy anyone who loves Harry to be able to turn their back on him for any reason. I feel sorry for Remus though. It is all about Sev and Sirius and their battle for Harry's love. And yet, Remus explained things calmly, knowing that he would now be further down the list of those who are important to Harry, and knowing that he has to face his terrible real life problems now. As for the Gift...well it might be that Sev is willing to 'gift' Harry to Sirius if it will make Harry happy. Or it could also mean that Sirius is a gift for Harry. (Are those two the same thing?) Anyway, another wonderful chapter...my fave, I think. You wouldn't be able to tell by this effort that you are having trouble with The Gift. If that's trouble, kep it coming, I say! ~Lesley~ Author's Response: Thanks, Les! Wow, your favorite chappy? Cool. I am pretty pleased with the return of Sirius. We are going to have lots of fun. The banner was a give-away? *innocent smile* LOL You nailed the parralel, Lesley but then you are so brilliant, I'm not really surprised. :oD The head down on the chest thing was just what I was going for. The despair was the same for both of them. And yep, Sirius is not about to give up on Harry. No matter whose son he is, though I think back in that void, it hadn't really sunk in. Everything's about to get a lot stickier, though I do agree, that is is very hard not to love Harry. Remus...you'll have to wait to see about him. He's going to be in for a ride, let me tell you. :o) Well, one of the meanings of Gift does have to do with Sirius, but it's more that he was given the gift of a second chance at life. The life he was denied because of Voldemort. Thanks so much, Lesley. I'm glad you're still enjoying it so much. And thanks for the review. :o) |
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