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Reviews For Lily's Charm: The Gift
I'm amazed at how balanced you keep everything in the story. Sev and Harry are continually plagued by the memory of Voldemort, but there are happy moments there too, when Sev shares a memory of Lily or gets lost in one himself. The winter air chills them as they walk through Godric's Hollow, but the sun provides its warmth too. Comparing the empty shell of the past to the fullness of the future. The frightening image of Death Eaters arriving at the cemetary being just as vicious but less dangerous reporters. The worry Harry expresses over his father in addition to the irritation at how he's taking care of himself. Sev thanking Lily and James for their sacrifice, as does Harry for the person kneeling next to him by their graves. Sev's comparing Harry to Lily while being sure he's still his own person. Harry acting like a teenager beyond his years as well as a four year old. Like I said, lots of balance. And that's amazing. Hmm...there's a lot of foreshadowing? Oh dear, I better look through this again. Ok, so maybe this leads to some type of foreshadowing, but what was up with Voldemort's body being blackened and shriveled? I'm pretty sure that the Charm didn't do that to him, or did it? Sev's remark kinda makes it seem as though it was meant to, or was he merely referring to Voldie's death as "going as planned". Hmm...but Harry didn't seem to remember the state Voldie was in, and neither do I, for that matter. Perhaps a trip to the Headmaster's office is in order? And, now my memory is being sucked away from me by stupid professors, so I apologize, but did Harry visit with Schridgemore (sp?) yet? I assume that's coming up next then. Along with more angst and awkward silences between friends...that should be interesting! And I hope that Sev and Harry get over whatever's going on between them (I'm not sure they even know what's going on) and that they don't at the same time. Is that bad? Geez. You've officially hooked me. Thanks. More addictions to obsess over. But, this is a great 'angle' to be exploring. My question is, will either of these guys, aka Harry, ever think/believe that they were getting along so well before (and aren't now) because of their common need for Snake Face to be ousted? And now that he's gone, that they will go back to their separate lives without the other? Not saying that I want them to go this far, but it kinda seems like a plausible guilt thing that Harry would do. (Trying on my new Psychology Hat I got this weekend. It's a little tight.) Hmm...I'm also expecting Remus to pop in for a tic. That'd be fun...with news of his engagement. And for Sev to be all, "ok, what does this have to do with me?" "Well, Severus, the truth is...I'd-well, I would appreciate it very much if you were my best man. Albus is going to be the maid of honor and I was thinking too that Harry and Ginny could be the ring bearer and flower girl." Hee hee...I crack myself up. Really, I suck at finding foreshadowing the first time around. After I read something all the way through, then I can spot it...*sigh* But I loved everything that went on here, from Harry and Sev's playful banter at the beginning of the chapter to the mini-argument at the end. It was perfect. And if my befuddled mind could concentrate for on one thing for more than ten seconds, I'd write more on that. Perhaps the Yahoo board will be of some assistance this weekend. I'm glad that you overcame your illness and pumped this puppy out in two days, which is absolutely amazing. Thanks for keeping us in hysterics with your lovely spoiler too. This is so perfect and I can't wait to see what comes of everything in the next chapter! (Oh, just wanted to add how fitting the chapter title and tagline were. I found myself continually thinking back to it, saying, "Yup, that's hollow." I'm floored.) Author's Response: Okay, PK! I was totally thinking bout Princess Bride when I wrote that part! I lurve that movie. Hee hee. I think this story is all about opposites. Finding the balance, as you so nicely put it. Harry and Severus have been through so much and now it's finally time to let the past go but that is going to be much harder than it sounds, especially with everything that is waiting to plague our gentlemen. *sigh* Voldy's body was planned to end up that way but you'll have wait and see next chapter. Severus was expecting it, though not quite like that. LOL Scrimgeour (unfortunately IS coming up). I don't like that man. I must say, the pychiatrist's hat looks good on you! LOL And yes, the friction is not going to end too soon. Both of our boys are waaaay too keyed up to be normal and calm right now, Severus as much as Harry. And Harry as well is finally getting the chance to live the life of a normal teenager without Voldemort looming over him. He's going to be acting out, whether he realizes it or not. And Severus (again with the balance) is still struggling to figure out what it means to be a father to an adolescent out of nowhere. And as I said to someone else, I think Sev has a tendency to treat Harry much like he did Lily, as very fragile and he's indulgent. He rarely calls Harry on anything...even the whole Pinth episode, he only actually reprimanded Harry because Harry was waiting for it. He'd rather just shoulder all the blame for the present becasue of his guilt of the past. Whew, how is that for psychology? LOL And yes, Harry is going to worry about their relationship and what it means now that Voldy is gone. Poor boys...they need help! Remus is up next, along with Ginny and Ron and Hermione. And I am hoping to finish a remus/tonks tidbit as well. Very excited! Don't be too hard on yourself with the foreshadowing. LOL You'll get it. :o) Glad you liked the good times and the bad. More is up, I promise and though it kills me to write it, I love a tetchy Sev and a grouchy Harry. Hee hee. I just like friction. My mom says I have a sickness. :oP I am well into chapter 2. I think I'm into a whole level of obsession. YAY! I'm so glad you got the chapter title. It was a fun one. Play on the Godric's Hollow but all the feeling of being hollow. YAY! Love ya, PK! Glad you enjoyed and thanks for the awesome reveiw and where, may I ask is you next chapter. *snape glare* :o)
You managed to hold my attention throughout this whole chapter, and it was as if I'd sunk into the word of LC and could never get out again. ;) People kept bugging me while I was reading, and I continued to snap at them and brush them away, because it was torture being torn away from the screen. I have a ton of favorite moments, it seems, but my very favorite, and I've mentioned this to you, but I absolutely adored the protectiveness of Severus and Harry for each other. The scene where Harry puts on his cap without question is just perfect and speaks volumes about how far he's come. I love that Harry is sixteen and still listens to his dad about doing such simple things as keeping warm. He probably didn't even realize he'd obeyed so quickly... The description of the two of them kneeling in the snow together was beautiful and vivid. I could definitely feel the cold in this chapter, but of course I felt the warmth in the midst of it...lol. Of course! I mean these two are pretty much adorable...which doesn't really seem to fit for Severus Snape, but I don't know how else to describe it. ;) The scene with Rita Skeeter just made me want to rip her head off, and I loved the image of her 'lipsticked' teeth...I could just imagine her squirming out of the crowd and lunging for the discarded newspaper like her life depended on it. And Severus' protection of Harry during that scene just made me melt...the way he shoved Harry behind him and shielded him from whatever was coming. Kind of reminded me of the unconscious 'soccer mom arm' in the car sort of thing that my older sister seems to do to everyone in the passenger seat when she makes a sudden stop. *shrugs* lol. Oh, oh, oh...the last line of this chapter made me shiver a little. How could Severus say something so softly, yet still be so intimidating? I love that they are quarreling like a father and son, and maybe I'm awful for saying this, but I can't wait for some more... I appreciate that Severus treats Harry like a mature teenager, but he still doesn't tolerate his son's disrespect, even if it's filled with concern for his sleep-deprived father. Can we have a small lecture-type scene in the next chapter? Pretty please? I love me a strict Sev. *clicks heels* Good lord above, I can't wait until you write the next chapter. I love this just as much as I loved LC, and now that I'm sensing some calming, everyday, father/son interaction, I could just squeal with joy...lol. Brilliant job, Tabitha. *applauds* Author's Response: LOL That DID sound disgusting. :oP And you know I was pretty amazed as well. It took me a whole week to recover from being sicke but then really only 2 days to write the chapter. My muses were just ready, I guess. *shrug* LOL I'm glad I got you all dragged into my little LC world again. It's fun. And this chapter particularly so. Not really sure why except I really like cranky Harry. Hee hee. And I hate it when people interrupt me! Harry and Severus are very protective of each other which manifests itself in humorous and touching ways as Harry tries to keep the vultures from attacking his dad and then not so fluffy as it comes out that Severus didn't sleep. Harry's already cranky and it doesn't help that he's worried about his dad not taking care of himself. And Sev's not used to anyone caring about him, so it's bound to create tension, but we all know I love tension. :oP It's funny that you noticed Harry putting on his cap when Severus told him to. Some of those things between them are just automatic now and I think Harry too is used to just doing as he's told where Severus Snape is concerned. Hee hee. Oh and I think this Severus is pretty adorable. He's like dad of the year or something. And it's not even OOC for this one because of his background in this world. Just finding who he was when he was with Lily. He treats Harry sorta the same way he treated Lily. As something fragile. And he's very indulgent with Harry as well. It would have been much easier to really lay into Harry at then end there and even in the middle when Harry was being a grouch, but he doesn't. He hold it together. We'll see how long that will last. LOL ( I love the imagery of the soccer mom arm--i do that too and sometime, there's only my purse in the front seat!) Severus is rather intimidating, isn't he? I love it. They are beginning to settle into familiarity with each other and coming off all that has happened to them, there are bound to be promblems between them. Don't worry, we will have a lecture. And likely not only one throughout this story. Sev's in for a ride. ;o) I love me a strict Sev as well. YAY Squeal away, Jade. You are awesome and thanks for the lovely review and again for going over the chapter for me. :o) *bows in acceptance of your applause*
could you please resize the banner so it is smaller? on my computer, the big banner forces the page to be so wide that the text goes off the edges,so i have to scroll to read every line - very annoying :( Author's Response: Is the banner better now? I'm glad you liked the first chapter. Thanks so much for reviewing and hope you continue to enjoy. :o)
Rita needs to be smashed like a bug - oh, yeah. As for your new story - Mischief Managed Author's Response: Thanks! Harry is concerned and Severus is concerned. And both of them have quick tempers. Not a good combination. Poppy will be up next chapter. LoL Skeeter does need some comeuppance, doesn't she? hee hee Thanks for reviewing!
Wow, I think there was some serious foreshadowing in this opening chapter. I can tell we're in for more perilous times for Severus and Harry, in for more evil cliffhangers, and lots more angst in one way or another. Another great story begins . . . Author's Response: Well, you know. I thought there was going to be peace too. Unfortunately Harry had other plans. :oP There was foreshadowing galore. And wasn't it fun? Thanks for reviewing and glad you liked it.
Author's Response: Oh good! And you get to be the first review too! :oP I'm so glad you're enjoying it already. Thanks so much for the review. :oD |
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