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Reviews For Lily's Charm: The Gift
So when the painful truth hit him in standing in front of that fireplace, it felt like it almost hit me equally as hard. I guess I wanted Sirius to come back just as badly as Harry. *sobs* Poor Harry...you saw the threads unravel slightly at the mention of the funeral and his inability to stay at the Weasley's long. You really can't blame Hermione for writing to Severus rather than to Harry. Is Harry going to be able to begin healing emotionally now that he's begun to accept Sirius' death? Or is there still more angst around the corner? Albus and his "fussing" over Severus' emotional status. How can you not love the old geezer? That was a powerful, gut-wrenching, truly believable chapter. Marvelous work, OE and Jade.
beside that, awesome!
I think you're getting a bit trickier and more unpredictable with your plot, as I am uncertain as of now if you plan to bring Sirius back or if Harry's going to have to face the cold hard reality of this death. A little part of me wants to see both outcomes, though I think I'm in favor of Harry being brought to a harsh reality. Hopefully, he won't go trying to jump in the veil though or something equally stupid to try and get Sirius back. In his current state of mind, I wouldn't be surprised if he did something incredibly dumb like that. My favorite part of this was when Harry was holding Sev's hand at the end. Are you still trying to make this less emotional? I was wondering that during this chapter up until the hand-holding part, which I thought was just right. It was almost like Harry subconsciously wanted comfort, but only realized it as he drifted off to sleep. Very good. Poor Remus, I felt so bad for him here, especially when Harry didn't really give him what he needed. They needed two different things though (at least, that's what Harry thinks), but I don't like seeing Remus so messed up. Bring on the angst! I can't wait for more! -P.G.
Severus is so good for him though. I was re-reading some of LC the other day, and while I knew I loved it, I'd forgotten just how good some of those early scenes were with them, when Severus and Harry were just getting to know one another and growing close. They've come such a long way since then! I'm eager for the next chapter, as always!
I'm worried, though, about Harry's state of mind. He's definitely planning something crazy -- hope Severus can figure it out before it's too late. Now is the time to do a little mental probing!!
He`s really going to give Severus grey hair though! Amazing chapter once again, and please hurry with the next one. I just can`t wait to see what mischief Harry`s going to get into again! I love it. I think the thing I love most about your writing Tàbitha, is your ability to describe the simplist little things in such realistic detail. Like the rustling of robes, or the throbbing sensation of Sev`s hand after having pulled on Remus`robes. All these little details just make your story so unique. You really do have a gift.
He is also in shock. Severe shock. He is grateful that Sev is there and he seems to be functioning, but he is hinging everything on Sirius being able to come back a second time. But it is a bit sinister that Harry stepped through the veil in his dream. Does he think that if he goes through it again he will be able to bring Sirius back a second time. He obviously does not want to leave Sev, so yeah, I think that he thinks he just has to guide Sirius back a second time. God, keep an eye on him Sev. Do you know what he is thinking? The poor kid is not in his right mind. No nearly 17 year old kid could see all the horrors that HArry has seen and be unaffected. I think this was the strw that broke the camel's back. And Remus...poor Remus. He has lost his brother again. Or has he lost more than that? Are you infering romantic love here, Tab? A dream that never came true? Tonks is second best, and only because she pushed so hard. And speaking of Tonks...can there be a little metamorphmagus in the oven, I wonder? Brilliant chapter. Sev's worry and Remus' worry and devastation came through beautifully. Well done you. Lesley~
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