| Title: The Art of Being a Shadow
| 16 Jul 2010 6:16 pm
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| Reviewer: tobydog (Anonymous)
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I have been enjoying your story very much. I must admit, however, that I skipped most of the beginning of this chapter, just skimming through. While I admire the details you've created, sometimes too much detail is just that -- too much. Anything you spend that much time on should be essential to moving the story forward, and I can't see here how that is the case.
Author's Response: The beginning of this chapter is meant to show more bonding between Severus and his sons and also show how they can use martial arts as well as magic to defend themselves. This will be important later on in this book, when they need to fight enemies, and it is detailed to show how difficult it is to master and present Severus as something other than a mere Potions Master, and teach the boys necessary discipline and combat techniques that they'll need later on. Simply saying that they praciced so and so does not give readers a sense of how much dedication and practice is needed to master kin-sa-dor, and how much time it took Severus to become a master. It needs to be shown. Many readers had questions for me about this martial arts thing I invented, so this chapter was designed to answer them and provide some more backstory on Severus and his teacher, as well as privide a safe outlet for the boys to spar against each other without killing each other.
| Title: Farewell to Prince Manor
| 23 Jun 2010 12:40 am
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| Reviewer: Violet (Anonymous)
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Best Snarry EVER!!! I loved it and i can't wait to read the sequel.
Author's Response: Thanks very much! Hope you enjoy the sequel.
Huzzah! Nicely done - I loved it, from start to finish. Well writ, indeed.
I loved Hedwig and Stormrider best. Good, protective, parenting: what every creature needs.
That was great, absolutely great. I take back what I said last chapter!
The food fight was hilarious, and I'm surprised Severus wasn't at least a little happy over their bonding but even if he was it wasn't like he'd show it. As for Hedwig, I figured that would eventually happen, I even looked up Snowy owls in preparation.
I liked Draco's concern and help. He was truly acting the brother role without even knowing. And the talk of little brother? That was good too.
I need to add you to my favorite authors because I love your stuff and I'd like to meet Sarai, but as you've finished the fic, my opinion is kinda mute, isn't it?
Aww, did it crawl off the cushion to sleep on Harry's chest or had Harry put the cushion on his chest?
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