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Title: Disillusioned 31 May 2008 1:05 am
Reviewer: Escrimer (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I just love Harry-angst. This story is amazing. I can't wait for the next chapter. Mrs. Weasley freaked me out though, I was expecting the "bad guy" who blamed Harry to be Remus or Ron maybe, not her. *steeples fingers* interesting, very interesting. I want to read this converstion between Harry and Snape!!! Update as soon as possible please!!! *Puppy dog eyes*

    Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! The conversation between Harry and Snape was a challenging one to write, but I hope it's worth it. Thanks again! - August Skyrn
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 10:42 pm
Reviewer: sunsethill (Signed) [Report This]
    This should be an intense story with some definitely unusual premises. Molly Weasley creeped me out and I'm glad that your author's note says that there is a reason for her behaviour. I'm looking forward to it. There were, however, two sentences where your construction ended up meaning the opposite of what you wanted:

    “I understand that you are probably less than uncomfortable with the proceedings tonight,” should be "less than comfortable" and "not to follow its advice in such a manner would be prudent" should be "imprudent" or "foolish". To be prudent is to do something wise--so NOT to do it would be foolish or imprudent. You also used a period after "Miss" for the first half of the chapter and removed it from the last few uses. Yippee! It was driving picky me crazy since "Miss" is not an abbreviation.

    Author's Response: Whoops! Haha, I didn't even notice those two sentences, but seeing as I changed the wording for them about 23819 times, it doesn't surprise me that I messed them up. =D I will fix that. As for the Miss/Miss. thing, I've always written 'Miss' before, until I had a beta who told me it's technically 'Miss.' as it's an abbreviation of 'Mistress.' *Shrugs* Anyway, thank you! - August Sky
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 10:22 pm
Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous) [Report This]
    My concerns with this story are: when a character begins to act wildly OOC, it's melodrama (unless it's possession). Why would Molly care that much re: Sirius? She barely knew him.
    And she burns Harry with hot tea and nobody notices?

    I'll reserve judgement--the story is technically well written, if a bit jumpy, but things that don't make sense are a problem.

    Author's Response: Molly is supposed to be way OOC. There's a reason for it. I can say she's not possessed, but magic can do a great deal of things. Thank you for your concerns, and I promise they're all already planned to be adressed in the story. Thanks! - August Sky
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 9:37 pm
Reviewer: Sasulia (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh wow, this is story is amazing already and there's only one chspter. Definately looking forward to more, I can't wait, especially since you left it where you did!

    Author's Response: Oh, thanks so much!
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 9:36 pm
Reviewer: Sasulia (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh wow, this is story is amazing already and there's only one chspter. Definately looking forward to more, I can't wait, especially since you left it where you did!

    Author's Response: Oh, thank you! If I didn't end it there, the chapter would have been nearly 10,000+ words! lol I' m glad you liked it. Thanks again. -August Sky
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 7:13 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    I am really finding this interesting.

    Although Molly is OOC, as a mother, I wouldn't be too happy with someone who nearly got two of my children injured.

    I am looking forward to more.

    Author's Response: Thank you. I don't think anyone would appreciate two of their children nearly getting injured, but there's more to Molly than meets the eye. Thanks again. -August Sky
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 6:27 pm
Reviewer: lotrluver (Signed) [Report This]
    An interesting read so far. I'll be interested to see why Mrs Weasley is as physically abusive as you portray her.
    My guess as protective and angry as Ron is about Ginny being resorted and moving up a year, that the potential is there for him to be her abuser.
    Keep up the good work. Look forward to the next update.

    Author's Response: Interesting guess about Ron... I won't say one way or another, but you're certainly the first to guess it was him! =D Thanks again. -August Sky
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 6:20 pm
Reviewer: kara (Anonymous) [Report This]
    hmmm... interesting, but I'm not sure how I feel about it yet. Your writing is good, but it's very difficult to get by the manner in which Molly Weasley is portrayed, and the idea that Ginny was abused (presumably by the Weasleys??). At any rate, it's a good start, and I'll watch for the next chapter - hopefully the characterizations will make more sense.

    Author's Response: Thank you! I understand that it's very hard to grasp Molly being abusive, but it was intentionally done that way. There's a lot more going on than it appears at the moment. Thank you for the honest criticism, things like this really help! As for Ginny, I think that's a little more understandable, or that may just be because I know the background going on behind what I have planned. I hope the next chapter brings you in a little more! Thank again. -August Sky
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 5:56 pm
Reviewer: JolisGSD (Signed) [Report This]
    Novel idea to have students resorted. It does bring up a lot of possibilities!

    I've got to confess that I find your depiction of Molly Weasley causing great physical harm to Harry to be very difficult to handle. I could better understand if she just blamed Harry for Sirius' death. That alone would have devastated Harry -- the physical abuse was just too OOC for me.

    But you're the author and your story is intersting, so I will continue to read.

    Please keep updating.

    Author's Response: While the story will focus on Harry's resorting especially, the other three are important as well, but they won't really be explained more for a little while. The abuse by Molly is intentionally OOC. It's supposed to be hard to grasp, and it's done for a reason. With magic, not everything is not always as it seems, right? It'll be explained in the future. Thanks again. -August

    Author's Response: While the story will focus on Harry's resorting especially, the other three are important as well, but they won't really be explained more for a little while. The abuse by Molly is intentionally OOC. It's supposed to be hard to grasp, and it's done for a reason. With magic, not everything is not always as it seems, right? It'll be explained in the future. Thanks again. -August Sky
Title: Disillusioned 30 May 2008 4:12 pm
Reviewer: Azalea (Signed) [Report This]
    nice story! I like it so far! I cant wait to read the conversation between snape and harry.

    Author's Response: Thank you! -August Sky

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