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Title: Slow Road to Recovery 04 Jun 2009 11:09 pm
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, I'm so happy to see another update, Pandora! And I'm happy that you worked through your writer's block...writer's block is so frustrating.

    A lovely chapter, too. I can see you laying the pieces in place as the story moves along. The beginning with Harry swimming (sort of) and Severus trying to be stern and harsh, but then surprising him with little things like warming the water and then heating the towel was so cute...but I am very happy to see that Severus is really making an effort to work with Harry this time.

    Harry and Ginny are typical teens...and Severus is a typical dad! Harry just doesn't quite realize it because he has no experience with having a father, but hopefully he'll come to see that Severus is really being very normal (and in my opinion, very wise) in wanting to see the two slow down and be careful about their relationship. They're in love, their hormones are going haywire, but they are still very young, both of them, and they need to be careful not to let things get out of hand.

    I was happy to see Harry making peace with Dumbledore. It shows a lot of maturity on his part, and I do think Dumbledore tried to do his best...but victory over Voldemort had to be his top concern, and of course too, he is human and he makes mistakes. Sometimes I think he was really wrong and I'd like to shake him, but I don't think he manipulated people out of cold-blooded cruelty. He was walking a fine line and sometimes he erred.

    The White Magic Ritual sounds intriguing and another cliffhanger! I'm so worried about Harry's dream/vision and his scar hurting. I can't wait to see what's going to happen next!

    Author's Response:

    Thank you, it was very frustrating. How are you feeling?  Better I hope. Better enough to give us an update of SC?  Hint. Hint.

     

    Thanks for the encouragement Kristeh. Severus has a really hard time letting his feelings for Harry to show  It's as though he thinks that he is being weak if he allows some warmth to shine through, but it's coming slowly.  He's not used to being a father nad he's had to be so careful for so long to put on a show, but he's making progress slowly.

     

    As far as Ginny and Harry's hormones going wild, well Severus has been there, hasn't he?  After all, he was pretty young when he impregnated Lily, and things went wrong with his bad decisions.  He wants Harry to be more careful. Harry needs to think about getting well first, and he doesn't need anymore complications.  Ginny is only sixteen, and still has another year of school left, so it would be a very bad time for accidetns to happen.  Part of his hissy fit though, is just plain old fashioned ideas of propriety and decorum.  You know with that Potions Manual stuck up his arse and all ! LOL!

     

    I wanted Dumbledore and Harry to make peace and for them both to move on.  Yes, Dumbledore has made some mistakes, but there were many reasons for him to be wary of Severus taking care of a young Harry.  Perhaps it wasn't all for the war efforts that he kept the two apart.  Can you really picture Severus dealing with a baby by himself when he's still grieving for Lily, and there was still all those doubts about whether Severus' loyalties were to Voldemort or to the light.

     

    Yeah, I like the idea of something so pure being used to help Harry.

Title: Slow Road to Recovery 04 Jun 2009 4:40 pm
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    The spells were great, and that's part of a good story, inventing new things. I love inventing new spells.

    I really like the way Severus is trying so hard to be a decent parent to Harry, even if Harry's fighting him.

    That scene in the bedroom was funny, Sev reminds me of my own Dad there! He'd have shot, hung, or done something equally maiming if I was ever caught with a guy alone in My bedroom at 17, to the guy, I mean! Because to an old fashioned Italian you just DID NOT do that. So I was laughing and thinking--it's my Dad, LOL! And he was the same way with my brother--no way did you go into a bedroom alone with your girlfriend.

    And while it might seem annoying to them, I don't think the Weasleys would be pleased if Harry got Ginny pregnant. And someday Harry will thank him for it, I know I did mine!

    I thought it was kind of sad though that Harry thought Severus was ugly. I think Sev is drop dead sexy. I'd drag him to bed all right, LOL!

    Can't wait to see what happens with Harry and his scar.

    Author's Response:

    Oh thanks. I'm not really sure, if there are real spells like that, but I didn't feel like searching around and those names just popped into my mind. I know that I probably should have gone with Latin names, but oh well...

     Yeah, Snape is trying, and once Harry is well, he'll appreciate it more.  Right now, the Dark Magic is influencing his thoughts and actions.

     

    I loved that scene in the bedroom, because I keep thinking of the scene in GOB (movie), where Severus goes up to two young lovers and docks points from them for kissing in the carriage, and he made some comment as well.  He just seems like a very reserved, and proper man. I just couldn't see the real Snape being alright with two teenagers alone in a young man's bedroom and the bed covers, very obviously in disarray. Perhaps if Harry was a little older, and Ginny wasn't still so young, he'd accept it better, but I still think that he'd be upset at the public display of impropriety, as he would see it! 

     

    I think that the Weasley's would be horrified to think of Harry and Ginny alone in Harry's  bedroom together!  Ginny is still only sixteen and has another year of school, afterall.  I think that they will give in eventually, but out of the prying eyes of Father dearest!!  :)

     

     

    Oh, I don't think that Harry really thinks that Severus is ugly, but it is a force of habit for him to say things like that.  Remember, when Snape was picking on Harry, all they Gryffindors would think of horrible names for Snape, but now that Harry knows about their relationship, he's a lot more tolerant, but on occasion, he still reverts back to thinking of the past.

Title: Slow Road to Recovery 04 Jun 2009 7:05 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Ahhh! Cliffie! That was cruel, Dawn, very cruel.

    I really enjoyed the scene at the beginning though, where Snape pushes Harry into the water, only to experience a moment of panic himself when he finds out Harry cannot swim. I also enjoyed when Harry laughed, thinking Severus was joking about not letting girls in the bedroom, lol--that was a big mistake on his part.

    I'm very curious about how Voldemort could possibly be back. My only thought is that there must have been another Horcrux that no one knew about. Yikes--with Harry in his weakened state, Voldemort might be able to recruit Harry, since he's easily influenced in this state.

    I hope Harry has the sense to take Sev's advice about not being alone and goes to tell him about this. That's a big problem.

    I hope you update soon--I really like this fic!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    Aw, sorry about that. Nah, not really! Hee hee  I think that Tabitha's evilness is growing on me.

     That pool scene was fun to write, as was the scene with Ginny and Harry.  Severus is an uptight, anal old-school prude in my story.  But I  was thinking about how old-fashioned the whole Wizarding world really is.  I mean, the way they dress, that they don't use electricity etc, so I thought that allthough Snape is a half-blood like Harry, he is from a different generation, and had been living with other professors for so long, that I thought that his thinking is not exactly progressive. Also, when he was in Voldie's circle he socialized with Purebloods, so I figured that he would still have very old-fashioned values.

     

    Well, as far as the dream goes. i'll be evil again, and say you have to wait and see. (evil cackle)   It may not be what you're thinking though.  And that's all I'll say.  (evil cackle again)

     

    Thanks for reviewing, and sticking with the story.  I had been having a really hard time writing, when it finally broke and I wrote this chapter, so not sure if it's the greatest. I'm already quite a bit into the next one.  Writing is harder than it looks. :)

     

    What about you?  I 'm looking forward to reading more of Suffering, and of course anything else you might write.

Title: Raw Emotions 05 May 2009 5:47 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Just found your story and love it. I always hoped snape would survive somehow, and I am glad he and harry are starting over.... Post soon!

    Author's Response: Thank you. I wanted him to live as well, and I knew that Rowling would never bring him back (LOL) so I wanted to do it.  Harry and Snape are starting to learn about each other, and it's not always an easy road, but it'll be worth the work.
Title: Raw Emotions 03 May 2009 7:42 am
Reviewer: Kodak717 (Signed) [Report This]
    Another great chapter! Severus did a good job diffusing the situation with Harry - you wrote it very well. :)

    Author's Response:

    Oh, thank you very much. Yeah, Snape's beginning to learn what it is to be a father.

Title: Raw Emotions 29 Apr 2009 3:54 am
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, this chapter was definitely worth the wait! Yay, they hugged...I just melted at that part. What a moment there! I'm glad that Severus was able to reach Harry and talk him into calming down before he did something he would have regretted, even if Malfoy is a total jerk.

    And I laughed at poor Harry having to clean the room without magic, but maybe he will think a bit before acting next time.

    I'm curious to see how Occlumency will go this time. I'm assuming Harry will agree; he seemed to be warming up to the idea after thinking about it. And maybe it will help him to conquer the dark magic.

    And the ending was wonderful! I'm just loving how their relationship is developing and I can't wait for the next chapter!

    Author's Response:

    Oh, thank you. I was worried that it was a little too soon for them to hug, but I really thought that the situation warranted it, and Severus is begininning to care about Harry, despite all his efforts not to.  Mallfoy is a total jerk, but he's not worth going to Azkaban for, and thankfully Severus was able to reach Harry before he did something stupid.

     

    Yeah, that part with Harry having to clean without magic was fun to write!  Just like Snape to give into a momentary lapse in his emotions, only to turn around and cover it with being all stern and serious.  LOL

     I think that Occlumency in my story is a more complicated type of meditation as well as blocking unwanted penetration of the mind.  I wanted it to be something that will help Harry remain calm and in control of his rash, and imulsive temper.  I wanted it to be something that would be useful for him, despite Voldie being dead.

     Thanks, I wanted the ending to signify that Harry can rely on Snape and he'll never be alone  again; he finally has someone to depend on and protect him. He finally has a father figure in his life.  He was so cheated out of having that with Sirius, but despite his still lingering grief, he has Severus to relieve some of the pain.  No one an take Sirius' place of course, but now he has a father.

Title: Raw Emotions 28 Apr 2009 3:57 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww! I loved the bonding moment and how Sev hugged Harry and THEN he made him clean up the room without magic and talked to him. This was a long time coming and just what both of them needed. It's funny how Harry goes all rebellious whenever Sev disciplines him . . .such a typical teenager reaction. But maybe one day he'll understand that such a thing is necessary and it happens to all teenagers with parents, LOL!

    Great job and I've updated too, even though the date doesn't register.

    Author's Response:

    I think that part of the reason that Harry rebels when Snape disciplines him, is because now Snape is acting like a parent, not like a teacher would under the circumstances, and Harry has never had a parent correct him.  As a matter of fact, he's been allowed quite a bit of leeway during the years by Dumbledore and even McGonagall, and even when Snape had tried to discipline him as a teacher, many times either he either abused his power by being extremely cruel, or Dumbledore completely undermined his authority and ran interferene. So it's normal that now, Harry resents Snape in the role of a parent.  It's going to take time for Harry to fully accept Snape as his father, in all capacities; even though, they've come a long way. 

     

    I do think that although Harry puts on a resentful front, he does realise that deep down, the man is only doing what he thinks best for him.  Also, Harry is seventeen, and has been taking care of himself for a long time, and whle he has to accept Snape's authority as a teacher and as Deputy Headmaster, accepting Snape's authority as a father is not so easy.  After all, the man wasn't there for Harry all these years, so it's natural that Harry would think, where does the man get off coming into my life and tellling me what to do after all these years.  There is going to be some resentment over this, but another part of Harry would like nothing more than to turn back time and have Snape as a real father.

     

    I'll go check out your update too.  I'm really anxious to see where Snape and Harry will go from here; and as Snape's apprentice, it should be really interesting.

Title: Raw Emotions 27 Apr 2009 9:22 pm
Reviewer: Keina (Signed) [Report This]
    ow, I love the fluffy scenes! *cuddles*

    Author's Response: Oh thanks!  It's not too often that happens with Snape, is it?
Title: Raw Emotions 27 Apr 2009 4:22 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Good chapter! I particularly liked the action part at the beginning, where Harry is going through Severus' room and home, searching desperately for his wand. The confrontation with Draco was great too--your Severus did a very good job talking Harry out of something absolutely terrible. Let's hope Harry's punishment sank in and that he'll try harder to think about the consequences of his actions the next time he feels that way.

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    Thank you. Harry was getting quite frustrated looking for the wand, but come on, Severus is not going to leave that baby hanging around because he know's how impulsive Harry is already, and with this Dark Magic controlling him, well that would just be asking for trouble!

     I certainly hope that Harry will think about the consequences of his actions in the future, but this is Harry we're talking about! At least now, he has Severus' level head to rely on.  Let's face it, Harry has to realise that he's going to be held responsible as an adult now.  He's not going to be given a mere detention if he harms Malfoy, or anyone else.

Title: One Step Forward...Two Backwards 08 Apr 2009 2:56 am
Reviewer: Snapegirl (Signed) [Report This]
    Forgot to mention this in my other review. I like how you stress the importance of self-control in regards to magic and Severus.

    That's a key principle in learning martial arts as well, and in most Eastern philosophy. The need for self-dscipline is important, because without it, you're out of control and can really hurt someone. Which is how Harry is behaving while under the influence of the Dark magic.

    he's allowing his dark emotions--anger, fear, uncertainty to hold sway and thus he is very dangerous to others and to himself. If he lost it and accidentally harmed or killed someone (even Draco) he would be devastated.

    That's why I think Sev needs to sit him down and explain just how important it is to get control of himself, and really work on it, like Yoda says--hate and fear those lead to the Dark Side.

    Maybe Sev should teach Harry how to meditate or something to help him clear his head?

    Author's Response:

    Oh thank you.  I don't really know much about Martial Arts, but I do believe that self-discipline something that Harry really needs to learn in this story, and who better to teah him than the master. Severus has had to be hightly disciplined to be able to survive in the Dark Lord's Circle.  I like that suggestion of teaching Harrry to meditate.  Very good suggestion.  Occlumency was supposed to help Harry in this, but we all know how THAT went!!

     

    I appreciate you giving me your observations an I am happy that the principle that I was trying to impress was coming through in Severus' reaction.  It's my first story, so I'm not always certain that I'm able to convey what I want to, and I appreciate someone with more experiene than I, telling me when the message that I'm trying to send is actually coming through.

     

    I'm enjoying Broken Wings by the way, and I'm looking forward to your next update.  Are you planning on writing a sequel to your other fics?  Heir?  I want to see what happens to Draco and Harry when they go back to Hogwarts.


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