Can't wait for the next chapter, keep 'em coming pal.
Aw, I really like the way you write SP. I can imagine being in the conversation with them; I can feel the emotion.
I'm really glad that you've updated again.
Thank you for sharing your bus musings. I very much liked the comfortable father/son relationship between Sev and Harry. It was a wonderfully normal family scene and I can hardly wait to hear Sev's story to Harry.
Excellent start here. Just the right amount of sternness and softness from Severus and defiance from Harry. I'd like to learn more about his siblings too.
Author's Response: Thanks Snapegirl. I sort of based Sev and Harry off my roommate and his 11 year old son. We'll see the siblings later not sure when. Then again, I'm not sure what's going to happen in the next chapter.
this is great
Author's Response: Thanks
Oooh this sounds like fun. It's very catchy, well done
Author's Response: Thanks.
This is very nice. I really like the way that you handled Harry and Snape's conversation. It was so cute that Harry tried to get out of his punishment. Too cute! ;)
I'm looking forward to your next update! ;)
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I sort of based Harry and Sev off my roommate and his 11 old son. I know when I was 10 I tried to get out of trouble, though it wasn't for not turning in homework, that was both my sister and my "fake little brother" (the roommates son). I wish I could promise a speedy update, but real life is going to be far to crazy for that. I have final exams coming up in only a few short weeks. Sadly that means fanfiction whether it be reading or writing will be placed on the back burner.
This is a really good start. Grammar is not too bad, punctuation needs work. If you would like some help with that, I am more than willing to help you. Just let me know.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. Yeah, when I said grammar I really meant punctuation. My English prof was on my case about my lack of knowledge of how to use a comma the entire time I had him. That was his only problem he really ever had with my writing.
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