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Title: The House of Fun 31 Jan 2005 10:35 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Ah, the house of fun! How oculd I forget that. This is such a sweet chapter; too bad I know about the battle with it. :( I can just hear Harry's feelings later, that he wished that they had never had come to the battle. Well anyways, fun chpater. :) I love the twins.
Title: Birthday Boy 31 Jan 2005 10:14 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Hahaha Snape mixed up Harry and Malfoy's birthdays. Ouch! But really nice touch. I loved the OWLs report card and the flock of owls coming into Harry's room. I really love your characterization of Harry, he seems more like what the core character of Harry is in the first couple of book. Well done. :) Thank you for a wonderful chapter!
Title: The Chance For Farewell 31 Jan 2005 9:48 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow. Awesome chapter. Just.. wow.

    I loved the dynamics with Snape and Harry- the fighting the Legilimens and then the potion with Sirius. You are really pulling at my heart strings. Then when Harry said Thank you and Snape said "it was my pleasure" wow you really know how to have Snape but in when he is least expeced and have a great shock factor. Nicely done chapter. Looooved it!
Title: You-Know-What-Day 31 Jan 2005 9:24 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Yay! :D

    There were so many great things in this chapter. The Dursley's having all those code names... all the nice lovely descriptions about Harry's morning, Vernon calling Snape a Denture Mender! Hahaha! Oh that was great; I half expected Harry to say "No, he's not a Demontor" image Snape's reaction to that! Although I assume that Snape knew that Vernon meant to say Dementor?

    I love Petunia's last line "much better than that horrible man" HAHAHA! That was a golden line.

    Your Snape is so in character. ("What a shame," said Snape, coldly.) That was a GREAT Snape line, you expressed his disdain, personality- so good. :)

    ("Where are we going?" he said, jogging every few moments to keep up with the professor's swift pace.) Great action line.

    ("Thankyou for pointing that out, I never normally look where I'm going or what my feet are sinking into." "I know," said Snape...) ohhh that was great.

    ("Is this your house?" he said, amazed. "Surprise," came the dry reply.) Great line Snape!

    I love the dynamics when Snape asks Harry if he wants anything to eat but Harry's like "I'll be fine with my squashed rye bread."

    ("Potter, stop jigging around like a lunatic, you're getting bread all over the floor,") hehehee.. bread on the floor. That is just a great line. I need to stop this or by the end of all my reviews I'll have written back to your a hundred great lines. I love the ending dynamics of the chapter too, you express these characters so well.

    There were some things that you can improve though, mostly in the beginning. The first couple of paragraphs need a little more work, the first one especially because they don't drag the readers in from the get go. i had to actually reread it twice before I undertood the first paragraph and I think that there were about two spots where there was a little mistake, I can't remember where exactly, sorry.

    Anyways, GREAT first chapter. I think that it is one of the best ones that I have ever read. :)
Title: The Road Ahead 30 Jan 2005 9:01 pm
Reviewer: Phoenix Sworn (Signed) [Report This]
    ok, i have read this story on Fanfic several times, but i still adore the moment when Bill gets rid of the Butterfingers hex. It just always makes me smile. And then Snape wins the game! Oh, i just love it. As always the story rocks, and i will continue to read whatever you post. -Phoenix

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