okay... i don't want you to think all i do is criticize your story, but the only time i ever think to type any comments is when i see something that could be improved. that being said... there could be a bit more of a plot to this, i believe.
pokemon cards wouldn't have been around yet... harry potter's based in the 90's... just figured i'd mention it.
hey, i just figured something out... if harry is in the weasley family, he can't have a romance with ginny, can he? that's crappy... not a bad price to pay for getting rid of the dursleys, but crappy nonetheless.
I never got the idea that peeves hated kids... he always seemed rather... pleasantly annoying? or, not necessarily, but he seemed like he was mean enough to everyone to make up for it.
hey... story lines great and all. just want to point out that thank you is two words, as i've seen that mistake more than once. :)
lol... i haven't actually started reading yet, though I'm sure it will be good... I'm actually writing in response to your notes at the beginning, and although you wrote them in 2004 so there is a distinct possibility that you are quite through with this story altogether with, I have to say for the sake of the fact that you may still look at your reviews that I think it's funny that you put in something about being an emotional teenage girl, as I've felt the same way myself on more than one occasion. Sometimes i think ppl underestimate the actual emotional range of teenagers... anyway, if you actually bother to read this.. :))
| Title: Voldemort's Teenage Servants
| 07 Feb 2008 2:33 am
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| Reviewer: Sage Jackson (Anonymous)
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Love this story! It's so much fun to read and joy of all joys; finished!
Have to say though, when Draco's arguing with Harry about Draco's father, and questioning that the only reason Harry thinks Lucius was a bad guy was because he was a DE, and being all slick about it, Harry didn't point out that Lucius tried to KILL him (after Ginny...). It made the arguement a little hard to believe. And took away from the logic (can't think of a better word) that Draco was trying to use on Harry.
Only a small complaint though! I still give this story full marks!
| Title: The Road Ahead
| 09 Aug 2007 10:13 pm
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| Reviewer: Khalaris (Anonymous)
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Oh my god, that might just be the best damned HP fanfiction I've ever read.
Just a question. I have read this story amoung many others, and i cannot remember what story I read that has harry singing rage against the machine. is this one it?
This fic made me laugh and cry and God knows what else.
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