| Title: Chapter 3: The Inconvenience
| 04 Feb 2009 4:04 am
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| Reviewer: wynnleaf (Signed)
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I like this. You've got a nice fresh, kind of breezy style.
Very good start. I'm enjoying your descriptions. You might watch out for slipping into present tense occasionally. Another thing is slipping into speaking directly to the reader, such as "Because ,you see" as its shifts point of view a bit and somewhat distances the reader from the action.
Otherwise, I'm quite enjoying this.
| Title: Chapter 3: The Inconvenience
| 04 Feb 2009 3:47 am
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| Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed)
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Oh, great chapter! I can't blame Harry for being upset about the Floo. Of course it would look frightening if you'd never seen it before. I love Severus here...perfectly in character. I loved when he hugged Harry, even if it was reluctantly, lol.
| Title: Chapter 3: The Inconvenience
| 04 Feb 2009 2:59 am
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| Reviewer: Natasha (Anonymous)
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I love this story keep it up! Your writing is great. Update soon!
| Title: Chapter 2: Found
| 19 Jan 2009 2:42 am
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| Reviewer: Mourning becomes Elektra (Anonymous)
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Oh, good chapter! I'm glad that Severus found Harry. Looking forward to the next chapter!
I'm glad you posted another chapter :) Things sure will heat up now that Harry's identity has been discovered. I wonder what will happen now, what will Snape do and what will Harry tell him?
Hope to read more soon :)
| Title: Chapter 2: Found
| 17 Jan 2009 12:22 am
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| Reviewer: LJD (Anonymous)
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Great story so far, can't wait to see what Snape will do with poor Harry.
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