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Reviews For Broken Wings
I thought we would hear a bit more from Draco. Vince was great trying to help Jace early on. Good chapter. Lesley~ Author's Response: Sev is pretty savvy when it comes to his Slytherins, and he would know immediately when something smelled fishy. That incident actually happened to me once, and I felt really bad afterwrads and the ones who set up the other student earned themselves a nice detention for two days. Draco will be back later on. And you'll see more of Vince and Jace too in a later chapter.
I know that boxing can be a great stress reliever but I hate it with a passion, and so I have to admit I skipped over your descritions of what HArry and Sev got up to in the RoR. Sorry. I loved your descriptions of HArry's wild magic...very nicely done. I wonder if you are going to bring Harry and Ginny together as you have mentioned her a couple of times. I love HArry and Ginny together. Or will your thinking be that HArry ahs enough on his plate and he doesn't need a girl messing with his head. Lesley~ Author's Response: No, Harry wouldn't end the relationship because of an argument. He will give Ron a chance to come around. I don't like the sport much at all, but I'm using it here as a stress reliever and a self- defense lesson, and I don;t really get into a lot of the sparring and stuff. The wild magic was fun to write, especially the frozen potion. I might, but not in this story. Harry has so much else to deal with that I don;t think he's ready for a relationship at this stage. He's still dealing with his own issues and forming a new relationship with Severus and if you add a girlfriend into the mix, it will just be chaos. It's better to wait until he's dealt with Voldy first. Then he can focus solely on a girl.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked that little bit, i thought it'd be a neat twist to let Tonks use her powers and Charlie too! I loved the goshawk, that's why I chose it. As for Sirius, you just need to wait and see what happens! Lucius and Bella are horrid.
Author's Response: Good, I didn't want Voldy's form to be obvious. Even if they had, he still could have come back, since he made the Horcruxes. Sirius is in for a rough time, but he'll have help soon. Thanks as always!
You have a fan in Sweden Author's Response: Aww, thaks so much! I agree, I didn't like the turn the story took after GOF, it was too dark and depressing and some of the things that went on never should have been allowed to. I'm happy you like my story, it was one that just appeared in my head one day and I really like writing it! It really means a lot to me that people appreciate it and are getting as much enjoyment out of this as I am.
Author's Response: I couldn;t resist making Severus a hawk, it just seemed to fit him. And Voldy's gila monster just went together too! Hope you enjoy the next part!
Author's Response: All right, more has been posted! Thanks for R & R ing!
Poor Sirius though! Cursed with eternal torment... just awful. And I thought Rowling was evil! lol. But in all seriousness, I hope you have Sirius pull through, otherwise Harry won’t be the only one upset here... Severus is a smart wizard though, maybe he’ll figure something out? *looks hopeful* The Animagus forms suited them all very well, I think. Voldy as a giant lizard though, sort of amuses me :D Speaking of which *cringes*; Warrior and Freedom’s attacks on both Voldemort and Lucius were brilliant, but disturbing. Curse my visual mind! I’ve always been wary of birds and their talons for that reason alone… tearing someone’s eyes out. Which of course, was only intensified by those crows from the second Pirates of the Caribbean movie. *clears throat* Anyways, the good thing is, it’ll take a while for Voldemort to re-form a body again. Still, with a mind as twisted as that guy’s, who knows what he’ll do... Author's Response: I had a really good time re-writing that battle. As it should have been fought between adults and experienced professionals, not teenagers. Yes, i know, I am evil! You'll have to wait and see about Sirius, otherwise it will ruin an upcoming chapter. Yes, while I was writing those parts, i was cringing and remembering The Birds, by Alfred Hitchcock. Now that REALLY scared me. The crows in POC were bad too, I had almost forgotten about that. Yes, it will take awhile for Voldy to come back with a new body which is good for Harry and Sev since now they have time to hunt for Horcruxes.
I know you too well, Snapegirl. ::grins evilly:: I greatly enjoyed this chapter; I love your interaction between the multiple characters and the way you describe their actions. It truly brings them to life in ways J. K. Rowling wished she could. I was extremely impressed with Warrior and Voldemort's Animagus form. Never, in all my years of reading Fan Fiction, have I ever read one where the Dark Lord is an Animagus. You have picked my interest. At last, you have answered my question. I am glad that Severus is a hawk in this novel - it's very befitting of him. I greatly enjoyed reading the interaction between himself and young Harry. While I love reading your novels, you don't seem to enjoy killing off characters. Is there a particular reason for that? In 'Where Shadows Go' Lily dies but that follows canon with your unique twists due to your own, original series. May I ask if you have ever considered killing any other major characters? Would death not add more - um - depth to the story? When you get around to writing your sequels, I will happily read them. Until then, I shall hapilly finish reading Broken Wings. I'll not make a prediction for next chapter because you could take it either way. I /will/ say that I am eagerly looking forward to reading it, along with more interaction between Warrior and Freedom. As always, Jewels. Author's Response: Aww thanks, Jewels! I thought for sure SOMEONE had done Moldy Voldy as an Animagus before, but I guess not! Wow! I had to make Sev a hawk--he loves them, it fits him, and the prophecy demanded it. No, I rarely kill off characters unless absolutely necessary, I think death should not be something the author takes lightly and just throws in because she/he needs to get rid of a character or doesn't know a way to increase a reader's interest. When I kill a character there is a definite necessity, I would never do what JKR did and kill off half of the good guys and leave a major bad guy alive unless I was planning a sequel. So when a charcater dies in my story, you really feel the impact . . .as I did with Lily and Amelia. Now you can see what happens in the next chapter! Great work on your story too! *smiles*
Snapegirl
Author's Response: Thank you! It was a little long, but a lot had to happen during it. The prophecy was one of my favorite parts to create. Harry and Sev will discuss it further next chapter. |
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