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Title: Snaring Darkness 09 May 2009 4:14 am
Reviewer: LinerRocks (Signed) [Report This]
    SIRIUS NO DIE!
    SIRIUS NO DIE!
    *glare* Harry need Sirius so Sirius no die.
    You understand me. Severus will help Harry and Sirius well help Harry too!

    Author's Response:

    Okay, I do understand!

    Severus will help Harry and maybe even Sirius as well.

Title: Snaring Darkness 09 May 2009 3:50 am
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    The battle was very well written and intense. I liked how Sev's new form showed up and saved the day--especially when he tore Lucius' face to shreds. Nasty, I know, but he had it coming. I do hope Sirius turns out okay. Normally, I'm not a big fan of Sirius, but I don't think it's fair for him to die when they just made up :(.

    Thanks for the great chapter!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    I wanted Severus to really give it to Lucius, and he obliged me nicely. 

    Yay, Sev!

    I'm not a big fan of Black either, but I agree, if he died now it would be a shame. 

    Thanks, PG and now I have to read your fic!

Title: Snaring Darkness 09 May 2009 3:46 am
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    OmG! A new prophecy, Snape a hawk too. My mind is spinning. That was a really action-packed chapter. Oh I really hope that Sirius is going to be alright. How is Harry going to cope with the guilt if Sirius dies. He's really going to need Sev now.

    Great chapter. I an't wait to see what happens net.

    Author's Response:

    It took a lot out of me to write that, it was so intense. 

    I'm glad you liked Severus' form it just seemed to be the logical thing to have him transform into.

    Harry would never forgive himself if Sirius died now.  And the next one's up, so enjoy it!

Title: Snaring Darkness 09 May 2009 3:01 am
Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) [Report This]
    Well, at least you didn't kill him out-right. So there is still hope ( I always hated that Siri died in that battle--even worse than the other deaths in the series--well except for Moony at the end). Yep, Harry is going to feel loads of guilt--Siri was protecting him from a curse ment for Harry alone. Good luck Sev.

    V.

    Author's Response: No, I never liked that either or Moony dying or Sev dying . . .I felt there was WAY too much death at the end, it was more sensationalism than anything else.  Harry will be feeling lots and lots of guilt and Sev has his work cut out for him. 
Title: Snaring Darkness 09 May 2009 2:53 am
Reviewer: missny1 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Loved you battle, can't believe Lucious escaped with 1 eye, great. I am glad Severus is a goshawk and Voldy's Animagus form, very good! Love your story can't wait for next post.

    Author's Response: Thanks! I didn't want Lucius to get arrested just yet, not since Voldy is gone, he needs to be free to cause trouble . . .and he's so good at it! Glad you liked the Animagus forms.  The next part is posted!
Title: To Outwit A Dark Lord 08 May 2009 7:07 pm
Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) [Report This]
    Go Remus! I love Lupin pointing out how much of a Black Sirius is being. The problem with Sev and Sirius was resolved rather fast, but I'm sure it won't be that simple. The Sirius POV was very good-- it really made the scene interesting and seem more realistic.
    I also like Sev as acting general of the OoP-- it's great to see some common sense injected into the battle plans. I'm a little suprized by Harry being part of the plan-- couldn't a polyjuiced person or Tonks take his place? If it's not a real prophesy, does it still need the real person to grab it? I understand that for purposes of drama we want Harry at the battle, still, it seems very risky.

    Author's Response:

    Remus really came through here for Harry and he'd be the only one who could use that particular argument successfully.  Actually Sirius too nearly two weeks to even formulate an apology, so it really wasn't that quick.  I wanted to do a scene with him thinking, because it showed how Remus's words affected him and how he had a hard time making up his mind.  Glad you liked it.

    I figured Sev would be the one to take charge, really he seems to be the only one who does strategy well, aside from Moody, but Moody seems content to let someone else call the shots.  He's more a sergeant than an officer.  Now Sev's an officer.  Harry had to be there, he;s the only one who could pcik up the prophecy, Polyjuice wouldn't work, it would know Tonks wasn't Harry, and even the false prophecy has to follow the rules.  It is a bit risky, but he'll be with a trained team of adult Aurors, not kids, and they will all watch out for him.  Plus, he needs to be at the Ministry for another reason besides the original one, you'll see what I mean next chapter.  As always, thanks for reviewing!

Title: No Excuse 08 May 2009 6:58 pm
Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) [Report This]
    I like the interactions between Crabbe and Jace-- Crabbe gets more interesting and is a nice parallel figure to Harry. The arguement between Harry and Sirius was inevitable, but it worked well. Sirius seems unreasonable and adolecent, but not crazy. Snape really handled it well. I like that Remus is part of the dynamic-- having him as the voice of reason is a good way to help Sirius change without it seeming too pat.

    Author's Response: I wanted to develop Crabbe some more in regards to his background and family and so forth and having him be a kind of "big brother" to shy Jace seemed like a good idea, to show that he's changed and is no longer Draco's shadow, bodyguard, or a bully.  Sirius is rather adolsecent, and it was kind of funny to make Harry the more mature of the two.  I like doing role reversals every once in awhile.  Severus did keep his cool, and a good thing too.  I figured Remus would be the only one Sirius would listen to.  He is, after all the last Marauder that Sirius trusts.
Title: The Toad At Bay 08 May 2009 8:47 am
Reviewer: wrappedinharry (Signed) [Report This]
    Excellent ending for the Wicked Witch of Hogwarts.

    But HArry Severus' apprentice? Wouldn't part of the criteria to be a potions apprentice be being good at potions?

    Lesley~

    Author's Response:

    I always wanted her to just die.  I really detest her, she was as bad as Voldemort in her own twisted way.  She reminded me of a Nazi prison guard. 

    Minerva figured it was the best way to force those two together and make them get along.  technically yes, but I don;t think Harry is terrible at potions, just that Sev never gave him a chance to succeed in class.  But now will be a different story and he should learn plenty from his mentor. 

    Thanks for reading!

Title: To Outwit A Dark Lord 08 May 2009 12:59 am
Reviewer: Judy (Signed) [Report This]
    Wow! What a brilliant chapter! Go Harry! Go Snape! And thank God, Sirius has started to grow up! Can't wait for the next part!

    Author's Response: Yes, that's a relief, isn;t it! Get ready for some action, though!

    Author's Response: Yes, that's a relief, isn;t it! Get ready for some action, though!
Title: To Outwit A Dark Lord 07 May 2009 11:34 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Good job--I especially liked the part where Snape is debating in his head whether or not to forgive Sirius, then looks at Harry's eyes and gives in. That whole inner battle was very amusing.

    I'm glad Sirius apologized, but am a bit worried that you might kill him off soon :(. That's no fun; I hope things go a bit differently with the new plan.

    Great job!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response:

    I liked that part too, i thought it would be interesting to show That Severus found it really hard to forgive Sirius for what he did . . .and it was very nasty. 

    Well, you can see what happens soon, i should be posting later on tonight.


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