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Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 10:00 pm
Reviewer: Gem (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great chappy!

    Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you enjoy the next one!
Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 8:57 pm
Reviewer: CrazyDragon (Signed) [Report This]
    Yay! Sev's finally found somebody who won't leave him. I hope it makes a difference in the looming explosion when he learns the truth about Freedom! Heh. That’s going to be *so* much fun to read !

    Harry has the sense of true loyalty that his mother seemed, to me, a bit short on. (I saw many signs that she simply wasn't that good of a friend to Severus. She wasn't Gryffindor enough to decisively put an end to Marauder bullying, for one--Hermione certainly would have managed it!! And Hermione *certainly* wouldn't have started dating one of the two prats most responsible for doing it, without definitive proof *from the victim* that it had stopped! Grrr.) Harry’s learned about loyalty and its value the hard way, so it stuck. Come hell, high water or even Snape’s own exploding temper, I believe Harry will now defend him to the death--and even from Ron’s bad-mouthing. Which ought to provide some entertaining verbal fireworks, and a properly stunned look on Snape’s face if he witnesses it! Especially if it’s in the Great Hall, during dinner--with the whole school watching! ::snicker:: That would certainly set Albus to twinkling at super-nova brightness!

    Hmmm...Albus is going to be rather put out to realize that Sev's familiar, who's been so...antagonistic to him, was really *Harry* all along, isn't he. I just hope he hasn't really been aware of the Dursleys' treatment of Harry. It seems like you've set him up more as the willfully blind but good at heart type, doing what he feels he has to, and desperate to not think about the "little" consequences. The eternal optimist, who can’t understand that sometimes their own family can hurt a child worse than anyone else--sometimes even physically... Personally, I tend to prefer that treatment of the character, as opposed to the evil/manipulative type of Headmaster who arranges for all the bad stuff to happen to Harry, and even Snape, in an effort to shape people as he needs. Though when done well, that can be interesting, too.

    I like learning about things in a story, too, as you’re teaching us with falconry. It’s not gratuitous, thrown-in filler; it’s necessary to explain Snape and Freedom’s process of bonding. ::hunkers down to wait eagerly for the next chapter::

    Author's Response:

     It will, believe me, as soon as Sev calms down enough to think rationally, that is.

    Harry does, and I agree, in canon, Lily dumps Severus awful quick for being his best friend, surely she should understand that he was embarrassed and said something he didn;t mean, and yet when he comes to apologize, all she does is rag on him about the "new crowd" he's hanging out with.  Well, what about the bullies she starts to hang out with? You're right about Hermione, she would have beaten up all the Marauders and stuck by her friend, so maybe Severus would see that he still had someone who cared about him and didn't need Lucius's lackeys to feel wanted. 

    Harry will defend Sev to the death, as soon as he gets over the shock of relaizing who's care he has been in and how good it was.  And there will be a scene where Harry and Ron go at it once Harry is restored to himself.  And in public too! can't wait to write that part!

    Yes, Albus has been willfully blind to what harry endured at the Dursleys, he didn't know what went on.  But there is something else dark in the Headmaster's past that will shock you, you'll see once we get up to that part.  Dumbledore made a very big mistake and it's going to come back to haunt him in more ways than one. 

    I'm glad you enjoy my little lessons on falconry, and you're right, knowing that is necessary to explain Freedom and Severus's bond. 

    The next chapter is up!

Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 6:55 pm
Reviewer: Harriverse (Anonymous) [Report This]
    You are a very good writer. Your style and sense of story is very enjoyable. The developing relationship between your characters is delightful. It almost makes me not want Harry to reveal himself, but you've already told us we have two weeks story-time before the angst is unveiled. One question...you mentioned that the potion had limits (downy feather?), yet you never mention retaking the potion or brewing more. Have they developed a bond due to the animagus angle or is it just not important enough to continue? How about Harry flying in as a hawk and changing to attack Voldy in the finale???

    Author's Response: Thanks and I know, I love Harry as Freedom too.  But unfortunately, he does have to come back and be Harry again.  There was a brief mention of Severus retaking the draft in this chapter, just a single line.  There will be more mention of the side effects in the next one as Severus repeats the dose.  No, the potion is important it enhances the bind between them, since they wouldn't be able to speak without it.  Yes, that sounds like a good idea.  Voldy getting his eyes clawed out by Freedom!
Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 6:49 pm
Reviewer: guignou (Signed) [Report This]
    awesome ! can't wait for more !
    thanks =)

    Author's Response: Thanks! And more has just been added.
Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 6:32 pm
Reviewer: Pandora (Signed) [Report This]
    Blood Pops! Ooh, poor Severus!

    Aw, I'm so glad that Freedom came back. Nice chapter, and I 'm looking forward to seeing Freedom regaining his memory. I'm glad that Freedom had a twinge of guilt at the memories of calling Severus names.

    Author's Response:

    yeah, gross, isn't it?

    Freedoms' memory will almost all return two chapters from now. 

    And yes, he will feel even more guilty once he has all his memories as Harry back as well as Freedom's.  because then he'll know that Severus's role as a spy was taken to help protect him and seeing just how badly Sev was hurt by it is going to make Harry feel awful for awhile.   

Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 5:52 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, this was my favorite chapter by far! I loved the how you made the return of Freedom so glorious and how Sev had not expected him to come back. Sev's shock and grin were delightful. I'm a bit worried though, since you're hinting that it'll be two weeks before Sev finds out who his familiar really is (or at least, his familiar finds out who he really is). After seeing Sev so happy about having a familiar that doesn't leave him, I think he'll be devastated when he finds out his companion all along was Harry Potter. I don't want your Sev to get hurt!

    Please update soon--I'm enjoying your fic!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Yes, he will be, most likely, until he realizes that Harry will still be there for him.  After all the bond works two ways, and Harry will also be remembering just who saved him and took care of him for all those weeks and that he actually knows the man behind the mask, the true Severus Snape.  I 've just updated, and wait till you see what goes on at the staff dinner.
Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 5:11 pm
Reviewer: Mervoparkite (Signed) [Report This]
    Yeah! That was fun. I almost wanted to cry when first Sev thought Freedom had left him and then when he came back.

    Wonderful!
    V

    Author's Response:

    I know, poor Sev, he always doubts whether or not things will work out, and then is shocked when they actually do. 

    Thanks and just wait till you see what happens next!

Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 4:24 pm
Reviewer: little-sun (Signed) [Report This]
    Awww, he is flying again! I liked this chapter very much! Mila

    Author's Response: Great, isn't it? I love to let him fly!
Title: Freedom's Flight 05 Apr 2009 2:55 pm
Reviewer: graynavarre (Signed) [Report This]
    I am really enjoying this. I just hope that Severus learns to love the young boy as much as he loves Freedom.

    Author's Response: Thanks and he will, once he gets over the shock of disocvering that his best friend and familiar is Harry.  It'll take a little while, but eventually Sev will come around and cherish Harry in both his forms.
Title: The Best Medicine 05 Apr 2009 12:35 am
Reviewer: La Mariane (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Hello! Just a quick review to tell you that I'm still reading your story. I enjoyed this chapter, especially Severus's password.

    Author's Response: Thanks! It took me awhile to come up with that, I wanted something special, not the usual potion ingredient or Lily's name or whatever, since this was the password to his private rooms and we all know what Snape is like about his privacy, LOL!

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