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Reviews For Alea Iacta Est
Author's Response: I like challenges, too. ;) Fluffy, Flurry, very close to the same name. I have described her as being fluffy so that's why you probably read it that way. Thanks!
On the note of being your Continuity Fairy, I'd like to apply for the position, if it's still available when you read this. I'll send you an email with more info. Well, here's one more review for P&S! Great chapter! Can't wait for the next update!! Author's Response: Thanks again! I totally must've used Legilimens on you. ;) I'm happy to hear you heard Snape's affection in his voice like you were meant to. Doctors can use IV lines to administer chemo, but it's bad on the veins and they eventually collapse is what I understand. Plus, it's a great way not to need a gazillion needle stabs. I'm fortunate enough to not have experience with cancer, but I tend to be a research junky when I need to be.
I really like the way you've written Sev and Harry. The change from mutual hatred to caring and trust happens quickly, but it's well done and believable. The cancer diagnosis took me completely by surprise. Harry's analogy of cancer being like his body's version of ol' Moldy Voldy and his minions was very creative, and fitting! Oh, Dumbledore's attitude towards Harry, and the leukemia, is rather disturbing...I know he doesn't know a lot about cancer, but still...I hope he pulls his head out of his posterier soon...Severus taking it upon himself to look at Harry's medical file to figure out what's wrong was...sweet, in a Snape-ish sort of way. And the way he keeps trying to justify what he's doing, how his perception of Harry is changing (but he's trying to deny that it is), is priceless. I especially like this line from this chapter: "Should he just wave the white flag of surrender concerning Harry now and get it over with?" When I read that, I found myself nodding emphatically and saying, "Yes, you might as well go ahead and give it up as a lost cause. We all know you're going soft...at least where Harry's concerned..." *snickers* I don't imagine he's appreciate that comment, but it's true! Random question that isn't even really relevant (I'm just curious): How did Severus get a prescription for Vicodin?! *grins* When I read what the pills were (loved the scene with him searching all over the place for them! Go cats!!), and could help but laugh, which is probably not the reaction you were looking for, but I've watched the TV show "House" too much to not find any reference to Vicodin in stories amusing. (If you don't know what "House" is, let me know, and I'll be glad to tell you all about it!) I was really thrown by Sev's mother, though...well, no, not his mother, but his family in general. It didn't confuse me that his mother has a different name (I like the name "Aurora," by the way), though I found it a tad odd that he called her by her name, instead of "Mother", but considering she's basically a hippie, it doesn't surprise me that it makes her feel old to be called "Mother". Making Tobias Snape and Eileen Prince Sev's aunt and uncle was a nice twist; I rather liked it! All in all, I rather like Aurora Prince. I hope we'll get to see more of her. But, I have a few questions...if you're planning on answering any of them later, then I'll be glad to wait for them to come into the story...Who is Sev's father, and will we get to meet him? Did Tobias have a brother who married Aurora? Or is there another reason why Aurora called Severus "Prince" (I like his middle names, by the way!), but he goes by "Snape"? I am right in assuming that Aurora and Eileen are sisters, aren't I? And speaking of sisters, will we get to meet (or at least find out more about) this mysterious sister that Snape has? It doesn't surprise me at all that Hermione has a Slytherin side, or that she and Ron would be so persistent in finding out what's wrong with Harry. They really do need to calm down, though...Threatening Severus Snape is more likely to get them banned from the dungeons than it is to get them in to see Harry. I like that Harry is seeking Severus for safety (he ran to the dungeons, and his room, but I think it's Snape that he's associating with safety, and he knows that, even if Sev isn't there at that exact moment, he'll always return there). With all that he's going through, and the fact that Snape is helping him so much, and is the only one who hasn't panicked (outwardly) even once, it makes sense that Harry's starting to feel the most safe around him. I really liked the shopping scene...I can see Harry not being comfortable with Snape paying for everything for him, and arguing a bit, but knowing that it was Snape's mother's idea (command, really) makes it a bit harder to argue... So, I was reading this chapter, and got to the part where Harry told Severus that Ron and Hermione know about his cancer, and Sev was shocked and furious, and I thought, "Wait...doesn't he already know that they know?" So, I went back and checked, and found that scene, and read through it, found no mention of leukemia or cancer, and thought, "Huh...guess I remembered wrong...I could have sworn they told Snape they knew about Harry having cancer...." Then I scrolled back up to the top of the chapter, and noticed the note you left about the chaper being revised, and thought, "Oh, good! I my memory's still intact! ...mostly..." I'm glad the continuity error has been fixed, but I'm also glad you left a note about the revision, otherwise I'd be left wondering if I'm loosing what's left of my mind! ;) I think you did a great job with all the emotions and everything. It's nice that Harry got to fly, especially after his near breakdown, but I would have liked to have a snippet from Harry's point of view...maybe you can have him remember back to it, at some point? If it'll fit into the story...Oh, one last thing: I love Flurry! You've got her feline antics down pat! I can only assume that you've owned at least one cat at some point...Though I do have a question...I seem to remember it mentioning somewhere in one of the chapters (I don't remember which one, or I'd go look it up), that Sev has had Flurry for several years, but she's referred to as a kitten...is that another continuity error, or is there a reason that hasn't been explained, yet? *whew* I think I'll try to review after every chapter from now on, so the reviews aren't quite so overwhelming (for you or me)! Thanks for the great story! I'm off to read the next chapter, now! (Oh, and I apologize if my review rambles a bit...that tends to happen when I write, which is why I don't write stories very often). Author's Response: Okay where to begin. LoL. Don't worry, I love long reviews with plenty of speculation. I'm happy to hear you like the way I've written Harry and Sev's relationship and that I took you by surprise. ;) Harry's analogy of cancer came from a light bulb turning on moment when I was revising that chapter. I must say I'm quite proud of it myself. I also love that you're picking out line and telling me which ones you love. It helps me know what you like. As for Sev's Vicodin prescription with his training I'm sure he has a few contacts in the medical field Muggle and wizarding that he was able to get the prescription from. Since I'm also a "House" watcher, I totally get when you'd be amused with Vicodin. Did you know there's a short story out there that's a crossover with Sev ending up as House's patient? It was very amusing. The mystery around Sev's family will have to wait a bit, but I promise you'll get your answers eventually. Good speculation, but we'll see how much of it is accurate later. Rest assured, we'll get to meet Snape's mysterious sister eventually also. Ron and Hermione really do need to calm down, but they're acting pretty much like typical teenagers. I'm glad you picked up on why Harry is feeling so safe around Severus, though I'm not sure Harry realizes it quite yet. The shopping scene was fun to right after I sorta figured out the British clothing sizes. Yes, it being Aurora's command did make it harder to argue and saved each of them some breath. You're not crazy! Yay! I totally thought I had written the end of chapter ten to be ambiguous. I have no idea what I was thinking. As for Harry's POV during flying, as a writer I hate writing like a paragraph or two in one person's POV before switching, but I might have Harry reference that flight later on. We'll see where Harry takes me. Flurry is one awesome cat, isn't she? Yes, I do own a cat, a very psychotic one named Roxie that turns pens, bottle caps, balled up paper, etc into toys on a regular basis only for them to be batted under a piece of furniture until Mom decides to rearrange and then it's like finding a treasure trove.
Thank you Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad it made sense for you.
Author's Response: Thanks! I always envisioned Flurry as Lily's cat to begin with. In a way it shows Sev's attachment to the past and Lily.
Author's Response: Flurry will stay Sev's even though she's taken a liking to Harry. As Severus said, he's grown quite attached to her. You've never heard of a cat jumping in the shower before? My cousin's cat did it like all the time. Now, my cat she refuses to even get her paws wet. Lots of fics are written around the time Sirius dies. It seems like a good place to start fics. I think it's because it's before the Horcruxes and all that stuff. Good night to you and thanks!
Can't wait for the next chappie. Author's Response: Thanks! I love Flurry, too. It was hard for Severus to tell Harry, but it opens the way for Sev to tell Harry more about Lily. Flurry was a good place to start.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like her. ;)
Author's Response: Thanks! That chapter was a test of sorts before writing Harry's breakdown so I'm glad you liked it. |
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