Yes! I love it! It was a difficult meeting but I'm glad that they got through it. Good job with Snape's character. McGonagall seemed to be a little emotional, but still within her limits of being in character. I would have liked to see more descriptions of her physically, it would have made it more real for me.
There are still some punctuation errors. When someone talks, commas are used to connect the dialogue to the person talking. For example: Severus cleared his throat, "I would be delighted." Or "I can't believe that could be possible," McGonagall said. Commas are used there instead of periods. It's a bit distracting to read and notice the punctuation, but the plot and development of the story is so good that I would keep reading even if it was always like that.
But great chapter! I love the development. I can't help but worry that Ginny is going to try something like suicide and the Weasleys won't be able or willing to take Harry in. I can't wait to find out. Thanks for all the updates!
Author's Response: You have just named my two great weaknesses as a writer :-).
Sadly, I find that I can't see when my commas are used incorrectly, until I come back to reread it sometime later--I try to clean it up when I see the errors and work with a beta when I can. Sorry for the distracting nature of it.
The other problem is somewhat harder to correct. I'm face blind, so my descriptions of characters are the way I actually remember people. I can tell you perhaps what she was wearing and how she looked like she was feeling, but I can't describe how people look because I don't remember them the way other people do. It's something I work on--trying to describe people physically. Unfortunately, it's sometimes like a color blind person trying to describe a flower.
Minerva's having a really hard time. I think she would have been a little less emotional, had this meeting been put off a for a bit.
Yeah, Ginny is a little worrying, isn't she?