Oh, I like the way things went in this chapter!
I'm too muzzy on cold remedies to single out specific things that made it great, but I'm so very glad that I checked for updates and found this. :)
I do look forward to future chapters, especially the ones where Severus and Toby get to know one another as father and son.
Well Done!
I really liked it! Please update again soon!
Loved how you slightly adapted cannon to have Sirius meet Harry since Dumbledore didn't die in this version and like how Sirius gave Harry support to find out about Sev. Hope Sev finds out son. Harry pretty much has it figured out and soon will realize that Toby Is truly his brother in every aspect Can't wait for Harry to eventually tell Toby. Hope Sev wakes up in the next chapter and finally meets toby
Smiles!!!! Now everything is going to settle down for his family ; ). Very nice chappy!
| Title: Draco's Redemption
| 18 Mar 2012 5:19 pm
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| Reviewer: Vanime (Signed)
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Great chapter! I can't wait to see Snape's reaction to having not one but two sons! :)
Hugs and Love,
Vanime
Love the chapter, especially where Harry sets off to find Toby, accompanied by the Malfoys. Wonder what'll happen to Snape and Toby? Does Harry wonder about his real father now that Sirius has dropped this huge hint?
Nice chapter. Niggle: "aide" is a noun, referring to a person, not a verb as you've used it here. The verb is always "aid" without the e. Anyway, I liked the way you interwove canon with your AU.
Wow! Intense chapter. I think that the truth is all going to come out soon.
I am anxious to see it when it does.
'What if I am Snape's son?' Harry worried.
'Buy a lot of shampoo.' Sirius joked. 'Be who you want to be, Harry. No one can fault you for that...not me, and not Snape, though I wouldn't put it past him to try.' He rolled his eyes. 'I have to go now...the adventure is calling.'
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That is possibly my favorite line! Lol I love it! This chapter left me wanting to cry a bit. Harry has so much weight in his shoulders and it just isn't fair... And I feel like it is just going to get worse before it gets better. I loved this chapter, as I have loved all of them. This story is fantastic.
Also... Draco manned up there for a bit! Nice!
Author's Response: I'm glad you thought so, it's one of my favourite lines as well, though this whole chapter was generally a fave for me. You're right about Harry and it's not going to be "smooth sailing" just yet. There's still a lot to happen yet! Thanks for your comments and your review! :)
| Title: The Battles We Fight
| 06 Mar 2012 3:14 pm
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| Reviewer: Elena (Signed)
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Good Toby!! Looking forward to Severus' awakening!!!!! How many chapters do you intend to write before the end?
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