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Reviews For The Son Becomes the Father
Just when you think wow, there is know way the story can get better than it all ready is... it does! It is very well done and in character and it had many interesting moments. One thing I did not like was that when Harry made swear on Marauders honour, that was it. You gave know hint as to why Harry was so frantic over Toby, Harry didn't explain it at all. I mean, we all know Remus is smart but would he figure out that the young boy Harry was franticly looking for was secretly staying in the castle and almost no-one knows... just by Harry being extremely protective?? Anyway past the bad stuff and onto the good. The mystery of Mildred Merrengold is a mystery that is sure to infuriate many readers (including me). I hope we find out more information in the future. The Snape-family-thing moment was great and this time I have two favourite lines: 'Harry saw the warning signs of Legitimacy in the man's dark eyes ' i know that is not the whole sentence, but still... Harry knows what to look for, eh? My other favourite line is probably: 'So? You answer to “Snivellus”, or so I heard.' hahaha. Absolutely loved it! Just Classic. But ouch, that one was sure to hurt. Very well done though. So Neville knows now and Remus too. Who will be next to find out? I would like to see how Remus becomes a part of this story. I hope Neville can keep the secret although he is good at doing it when it is very important. I like that Hermione is so evolved with Toby now that Harry and her are friends once more. But Seriously.. Asking him to repeat the tooth story three times?!? That's what i call obsessing! I am hanging for the next chapter it is sure to be better than the last (as always) and I can't wait! I love reviewing your stories and I hope you love my reviews.. From your faithful reviewer BYE!!
Things are really starting to get rolling...I love it! Really enjoyed that chapter as well!
first, this is my third try to send a review. This security code don't like me. Anyway..I enjoy reading your story. It has an unusual plot. I never thought it would work, but it does. I have to take the time to read your other stories. Thank you for the fun while reading your story.
I am very happy that Toby was a very big part of this chapter, because in previous chapters he was not as envolved as he was just now. Toby is a really fantastical character and very well presented. My favourite line for this chapter was probably Snape : Did he really underestimate Harry this much? Classic. I also loved that when Harry tried to caste the Patronus the first time to get rid of theatrics however this was still caution and perhaps confusion behind those obsidian eyes. More letters from Severus Snape! I am very happy with that. I think he question that Snape asked Harry was very well-done, congrats! I can't wait to see if harry can answer it or not. Draco was on this one to, which is great! Harry was have been really thankful of Ginny and Luna when they arrived. To bad we couldn't have seen what happened next, I am sure it would have been good. I am curious about the argument Remus and Snape were in as you haven't mentioned it recently. I hope we find out what happened soon because I can't wait. Snape seemed pretty reluctant to share it with anyone either which in never a good sign. I love the spell you created 'ExpelliCorpus' couldn't have done it better myself.. Nah just kidding, I love it and what it is does. Snape must be feeling very frustrated, why does Potter have to be good at something?!? I can't wait for the Hogsmeade visit, it is sure to be great. Especially with Toby there, I hope more people find out about it in the future as it will make it is much more interesting. I also have a question, since most likely everyone or nearly everyone in the DA will find out about Toby, will it be started up again? They could still train in the Room of Requirement but Toby could just watch from the sidelines. I really love the DA so I hope you go through with this idea. I like Hermione again now, as Harry and her have made friends again. She seems to like Toby so much so it was sad that she wasn't around him whilst they were fighting, I am sure she would have been very sad about it. Overall this chapter was amazing and probably the best one yet. You have true talent in writing fanfiction. Always looking forward to the next chapter update! BYE!!! Author's Response: Some chapters will be like that, centering on Toby a lot or else barely at all. It depends on what is going on, really, although I try to put him in as much as possible.
Author's Response: Perhaps, although there is still the risky liklihood that someone may come across them. Whereas the Room of Requirement is designed for concealment.
I liked this chapter so much, especially when Madam Pince looked at them. It would definitely remind her a lot of Severus and Lily considering how she had saw them both together so often. I don't really like Hermione in this chapter and I don't think I have to explain why that is. She really should have a least mentioned something to them instead of letting Harry think all was lost. And all because of her obsession wit freeing house-elves from Slavery. Doesn't she understand that some want to do it? One of my favourite parts is when Harry actually bonds with Dobby. Harry should have known not to let Dobby choose his own clothes. I just love that line 'Perhaps Harry should have chosen the attire.' And I imagine the look on Harry's face would have been classic! You also made me very happy by the letter, I do very much enjoy reading Severus' letters. The are so very well worded, good job on that. I love the way you can do Snape so very well, you would swear it is from the book itself! On a funnier note, Dumbledore is up to his old tricky self again. Although I am curious how he got Phineas to help him... is it like like a rule that the portraits have to obey the Headmaster or something? Anyway I could go on however if I did I would run out f time to read and reveiw your next chapter! Thank you for the quick updates, BYE!! Author's Response: Thanks, and I'm pleased to hear it. Indeed. Yes, no one really likes Hermione in this chapter, although it won't last long. Haha, yeah, Harry should've known Dobby would do something like that. Oh well, too late now. Glad you like the letters. And wow, really? Well thank-you! And yes, all portraits of the previous headmasters/headmistresses do have to obey the current headmaster, it's part of their role in that office. Thanks for the review!
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