| Title: Retribution
| 28 Mar 2011 9:54 am
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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No I think it was perfect. more please
| Title: Telling Snape
| 28 Mar 2011 3:01 am
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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The story flows well, though moves a bit fast. It really needs some editing though as there are way too many mispelled words and improper use of words -- ie: noded I've sense -- since.
If you can find a beta it can only improve an already good story.
Wonderful, and quite just-as I see it.
Thanks for the update.
V.
Not to harsh at all, probably more fair then I would have been. I look forward to watching the three of them learn to bond.
Naw, just perfect for those wretches. I always thought that the Dursleys got off too lightly in the book. The only one that truly got a just punishment was Dudley with the Dementors, and it did switch him around. Kudos.
Good chapter. The punishment seemed appropriate to me. I've seen other writers give the Dursleys much worse than that. It's also appropriate that they made Dudley think his parents were killed in a car crash and his father was a drunk since that's what the Dursleys told Harry about James and Lily.
I'm glad Harry decided to give it a try.
I didn't think the punishment was too harsh, I liked that they had to tell everyone the true reason why they were moving.
With Dudley though, as much as I loathe his actions, I do feel he is a child whom should be taught the consequences of his poor choices in hopes that he might see how his previous ones were harmful to another, and therefore....deplorable....and maybe he might make better choices in the future. Therefore; I hope he'll be adopted by another family who could teach him the proper way of treating fellow humans. (Not as a part of this story....just in my imagination! LOL!)
Great Chapter! So now will Harry be Harry? Or will he want to take on Aubrey? This will be an interesting journey.....
I'm so glad that SEv is reunited with his sons. I can't wait to see how harry reacts to this news.
As for the Dursleys, they should either be thrown in jail for life or made to be slaves for some rich wizarding family just as they treated Harry for all those years.
Yes, and I can't wait to see Snape's reaction. It should be a classic one. I'm glad they figured everything out so that Harry won't have to go back to the Dursleys anytime soon. Great job!
Is Mathias one of Snape's sons? It sounds like it. I hope hazel does something to help Harry get out of there and that Severus realizes that Harry is his other son, switched at birth.
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