I really liked the potions class and the comments about Goyle and Neville blowing up the castle. I also think it's a good idea to have Slytherin partner Gryffindor there, that way they won't attempt to ruin each other's potions. I liked the way Sev explained the potion to Hermione, it was well done.
So was the explanation about Severus' past and his parents. I had a feeling that Tobias was the cause of Eileen's death. Poor Severus, stuck with the corrupt Malfoys! I am glad that Lily forgave him and got help, although if Dumbledore was there, he could have stopped Sev's fall with that spell he used on Harry at the Quidditch match. Why didn't he just throw a Body Bind on Severus?
I'm glad the cousins know the truth now.
I noticed one mistake. Severus is speaking about Tobias and says,
You also began to drink—and when he was drunk he could be very mean and hurtful.
It should be "he" also began to drink.
Will Lily wake up next chapter?
so looks like lily is finilly wakeing up i'm glad that snape found out ealy harry is his son please update very soon this is really good story i'd love to see it commpleated
Wow, what a shocker chapter! I like the story even more now!
Great chapter! There were a few spelling errors, though. I take it that Lily will wake up soon. Will the cousins become friends? When will Harry tell Ron and Hermione? Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!
| Title: A Relative Matter
| 10 Jun 2011 5:22 am
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| Reviewer: Twilight1987 (Anonymous)
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A. W. E. S. O. M. E. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Update soon, I want to know what happens next :D
This was a good chapter. I liked how Draco and Harry insulted each other and then went to find the unicorn and the disgusting vampiric Voldemort.
Loved Severus' reaction to finding them and his Animagus form was a surprise.
His discipline of Harry was fair, though I do have a question about something else mentioned in the chapter. I'll PM you with it.
I liked how Lily is becoming more aware with each chapter. I hope she wakes up soon.
| Title: The Forbidden Duel
| 08 Jun 2011 10:49 pm
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| Reviewer: Shadow (Anonymous)
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| Title: The Forbidden Duel
| 08 Jun 2011 10:41 pm
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| Reviewer: Ragnhild (Anonymous)
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Good story. On a side note, corporal punishment is prohibited in British schools. "In state-run schools, and also in private schools where at least part of the funding came from government, corporal punishment was outlawed by Parliament with effect from 1987." (Source: Wikipedia) I assume that since the Ministry of Magic "intervene" at Hogwarts several times during the series, at least some of the funding for the school comes from the Ministry.
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