Very intriguing! And you caught me by surprise with the last paragraph, where it all was attributable to Dumbledore's manipulations.
He was darn fortunate that it did work out. Something like that could have led to far worse an outcome than it did. And I'm outraged that he didn't seem to care about the students that had been injured, nor how Minerva could have died had she landed the wrong way. I hate to think about what kind of damage a concussed witch or wizard could do if they lost control of their magic due to the damage done to the brain from an impact like that. Hmmm. That sounds like a plot dementor sneaking up on me. Hmmmm.
In any case, I do enjoy your stories and I love how you experiment with different writing styles and explore various interpretations of the characters. Well done! :)
Wow, this was different for you, but you did a great with it. :D Now will they connect without being forced?
I would normally avoid anything written in present tense too, but your story notes persuaded me to give it a go. I think it worked, especially on the dragon battle scene. I don't think I'd have stuck with anything longer though.
Bravo! I agree with you about the challenges of present tense. However, you have used the strengths of present tense (explaining motivation and emotion) wonderfully here. Again, Bravo!
I wonder if it's gone...whats happening lol
A review for a Snape then.. :p
I enjoyed reading this, there was good flow so I wasn't distracted till the end.
This sentence stands strong, ""I thought you weren't going to help me sir," he says quietly, eyes on the floor."
Looking forward!
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