Snape is wrong you know, Harry is worth all the trouble.
I enjoyed watching you write. But I still can't fathom how you can just crank out a story like this.
Oh, and Luck has some ideas for you about the flooding! It's really good, though you might need to scale it up some for a big flood like this.
You are on fire with your updates. :)
Snape is so incredibly aggravating. I love him but sometimes I want to smack him. Hmm...I wonder why the school is flooding :P
Very good 2nd chapter. Hope Harry gets some food in him soon.
I still want to know what cause the school to flood. That be some weather :P.
I wouldn't mind seeing a chapter with the other students or maybe how the Slytherins reacted when Harry disappeared and what they are thinking right now. Maybe the other Grifindors.
I want Snape to see that Harry is mistreated during the summer and after spending time with him and seeing the real Harry not James's son that I hope in the end when if they all survive he takes Harry in.
| Title: A Snape Kind Of Night
| 18 Apr 2013 10:24 am
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| Reviewer: heartstar (Anonymous)
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maybe them find another student or animal on there way, or have harry use some secrect passagw ay snape dosen't know about toget them higher up. more please!
whole crap. Where did all the water come from and where did Harry go? I am so glad you have chapter 2 up already.
I loved the image of Harry falling into the rowboat and laughing. That definitely would be his response, I think. The dynamic between Snape and Harry is good as well. No wonder Harry is having such a tough time rowing though, having been starved all summer. The descriptions are great - it sure sounds like this flood is a bad one. But where is all the water coming from? And let us hope the giant squid doesn't come knocking! Oh, and couldn't they used aguamenti to get fresh water to drink, at least? Harry wouldn't know the charm yet, though, but Snape would. Although, he probably wasn't paying much attention to Harry's complaint.
Good thing they found shelter. Lets hope the water doesn't rise any, otherwise they'll be in a pretty bad state! Of course ... I suppose they could use bubblehead charms long enough to get out, but it would be a heck of a swim! Anyway, enough rambling ... great chapter!
| Title: Into The Night
| 18 Apr 2013 9:27 am
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| Reviewer: Karis (Anonymous)
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I really like this story so far! Hehe, classic Harry and his "saving people thing."
JA Worley, I've found your stories are always very well written. I'm looking forward to more of this one!
What a treat! I can't believe yet another person answered the challenge! Oh my, and what a good start too! Totally gripping, and now I'm asking myself what started it all! I liked how Harry saved Draco. It is definitely fitting of Draco's character and background that he can't swim. Besides, when would a posh pureblood have to learn anyway? I love your banner too, by the way. Just looking at it really set the scene for the story, and as I was reading I felt like I was there. I also really liked how Harry discovered the flood. Definitely worth a ten! I am super excited for more!
Author's Response: Awesome! I haven't decided what started the flood yet. Ch 2 is posted though! Thanks for the challenge!
You've done it again, JA. Great writing, great descriptions of the scene, the actions and emotions. A suspenseful start, intersected by bit of humour. I love it from top to bottom. I hope you keep up the humour, you've done a really great job here with it. Malfoy floating on a table, his disgruntled reaction at having to share it with a cat. Oh the imagery! LOL. A+
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