Good - Severus is taking on his responsibilities with no quibbling. Just need Calen to be convinced that he won't be pushed out by Harry and they will have the makings of a family.
Had to laugh at Harry's reaction to the baby book. It shows how bad life at the Dursley's is that he is still obsessed with proving he's a Snape, even though the professor and Calen are not at all nice.
Nice that Harry now has friends. Its a shame he overheard Snape, although at least the man was trying to say the right things to help his son, which could be a good thing if Harry also turns out to be his.
Good scene setter. I like the banner too.
| Title: The Best Gift
| 11 Jan 2014 7:17 pm
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| Reviewer: C (Anonymous)
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I really liked this story. The characters were described well, the story was paced just right and the conclusion was nicely done. Keep writing and maybe in the future we could see more into the developing family as I think the characters have a lot more potential?
I love this story. Of course I cried the whole time.
I love this story. Of course I cried the whole time.
| Title: The Best Gift
| 10 Jan 2014 5:48 am
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| Reviewer: my_patronus_is_a_dinosaur (Anonymous)
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I loved this story - the angsty build up was wonderful - you did a fantastic job with each character's inner thoughts and emotions. Super awesome!
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| 10 Jan 2014 3:49 am
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| Title: The Best Gift
| 09 Jan 2014 3:36 pm
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