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Reviews For Among The Gemini Trees
The line of the story was pleasant in general, especially characters like Gan. His observations added an interesting flavor into the study. 10 year old duellers was good idea too. Interactions in this story seems to be one-sided though. Snape could be nasty and made an error of judgment. But Harry is not all-clean, and I think some of his assessments about Harry have a part of truth. He can be too reckless, and sometimes thinks his difficulties give him right to act against what he's been told and hopes to get away with it. False accusations against him are unfair, but I can see where assessments of Snape come from. And these thoughts does not make him despicable, as he is entitled to his opinions even if some disagree. These descriptions of angelic victim Harry and despicable monster Snape. It might be appear so now, but views of the latter about the former has a part of truth. Author's Response: You're allowed to be critical. Constructive criticism is always good. Keep in mind though, that like most Harry Potter stories, this is from Harry's perspective, and as a teenager he's not that introspective about how his own behavior in the past may have caused Snape's attitude towards him. To Harry, all he sees as a teenager is another adult being unfair to him. This is a common thread of thought for most teenagers. They often feel oppressed by their parents or guardians and unjustly punished. I never said that Snape wasn't right in some ways, but the story is mostly from Harry's perspective, so the reader is seeing through his eyes, feeling what he feels, thinking what he thinks. As Harry grows and matures it's his job to be more introspective. If I never started Harry out as somewhat in the wrong in the way he thinks, then he would end up being a flat character with no room to grow. Snape has already shown him to be a round character, as he grows and realizes he's been wrong in some ways and admits that to himself and others. He is still growing. So is Harry.
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I simply adored and melted at the moment that Harry reached out and touched Snape by the wrist, wanting him to stay with him in the infirmary. That was such a beautiful moment. I also loved that Snape offered to tutor - even in Occlumency. Good job, Sev! I hope that through it, he learn to be more patient. Good luck, you two! I look forward to more! This is an awesome story! :3
But I was wondering where his invisibility cloak is. I don't believe that he would leave it at the Dursley's. Anyway, bravo on a great job! Author's Response: He's sent his important things to Ron's house for the summer including his cloak and Hedwig. He really didn't have much anyway aside from his old school books and clothes. The only thing he's really brought with him are those things and his photo album, but I doubt I'll mention that in the story.
Okay, he'll never be giving out sugar quills and letting them play games in class, but it's definitely a start. Angst is fine, as long as Snape is starting to see the forest though the trees, or is it the trees through the forest; either way, he is starting to be more human and I like that finally someone is taking care of Harry's needs--even if it IS the evil bat of the dungeons! lol Great chapter--as usual, and I can't wait for the next one, which knowing you, won't be long! Yay! |
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