| Title: Chapter 9
| 10 Jun 2015 2:32 pm
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| Reviewer: Kay (Anonymous)
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Thanks for the update! It was a nice surprise. It was a lengthy chapter and very appreciated since you won't be updating over summer.
A couple things though...make sure you check your grammar as a few words were misused and a few sentences didn't make sense. I had to re read the sentences a few times for clarification. Also, the speech of the boys is a bit distracting. As an educator who has been around small children I personally have not heard them speak like that. I will agree they speak in an adorable manner but they do not all speak in that much baby speak. It would have been refined if they were attending school. However, it is fan fiction and you may portray them and their speech anyway you like.
Again overall great update :)
Author's Response: Thanks for being a reader.
I go back and check and try to get the majority of the mistakes, but it's fanfic. If I really tried to make sure that every chapter was 100% corrected I would lose the will to even do the story. When it starts becoming too much work, I just stop.
As for the speech of the boys, funny you should mention that. I read your comment the day I went away to summer camp trying to figure out if I was indeed babying them. I worked with kids from 5-12 this summer and I met quite alot who still spoke like this. My 7 year olds notoriously had the most in the group, out of the 18 we had, 10 spoke just like I have my boys do. As I said before it's fanfic, I suppose I can try to change the way Draco and Neville somewhat, but Harry's is going to stay the way it is. Sorry, but it's my story.