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Title: Chapter 4 31 May 2015 2:01 am
Reviewer: Guest (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Again, the details really make this! I've read stories in which Snape watches Harry at the Dursleys, but it's the execution that makes this stand out. I loved how Harry takes pride in his artfully arranged fruit tray, how he was able to sense Snape in the room and their ensuing back-and-forth. It's all very good, and I guess I'm only reviewing every chapter because there are so few chapters, and you uploaded them all on the same day (which makes it difficult to accrue many reviews).

    Author's Response: I once watched a friend quarter a pineapple for a fruit tray-- she'd seen a picture in a magazine-- and it made a truly stunning display at her party. I've never tried it myself, but I thought it would be fun to have Harry do it! It certainly sounds like something Petunia would use to impress people... There have been several times I could detect someone's presence by their smell, even when I couldn't see them, and I thought it would be interesting to see Harry dealing with an unseen presence, based on a faint whiff of the Potions dungeon ... which he wouldn't identify ad such, since he wouldn't expect to smell it in Petunia's kitchen! Thank you for your reviews on the first four chapters! They are certainly more detailed than most reviews that I usually get. If you ever got the urge to do the last two chapters, that would be much appreciated! Thanks again! 😊
Title: Chapter 3 31 May 2015 1:42 am
Reviewer: Guest (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Although a plot-light chapter, it was interesting to see Snape's thoughts on the matter. I always enjoy a good amount of Snape calling Harry spoiled, but it works logically in this story for him to realize that's not the case. I always thought the Dursleys had a guest room for marge as well as the room for dudleys extra toys that serves as Harry's usual room. As another aside, I find the little details make the story that much more realistic. Light mention of Snape's salmon soufflé or Harry's pride over a dinner well-made really make the story feel real, rather than simple A->B storytelling.

    Author's Response: I haven't reread PoA recently, so I can't recall if canon had a guest room for Marge, or if she went into Dudley's second bedroom (e.g. Harry's bedroom). But the film version of 4 Privet Drive did not have more than 3 bedrooms total; I freeze-framed the interior and exterior shots to match up windows, and the house simply wasn't big enough to have a fourth bedroom. For my plot purposes, I decided to go with 3 bedrooms in order to have a reason to put Harry back into the cupboard for the duration of Marge's stay. And yes, Snape needed time to reflect on all that he had learned from observing Harry's interaction with the Dursleys, revising some of his preconceived notions along the way. Now, what will he do with that information...
Title: Chapter 2 31 May 2015 1:29 am
Reviewer: Guest (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I think I appreciate this story most for its balance. It shows just the right amount of everything, from Snape's behavior, to the Dursleys' treatment of Harry, to Harry's own thoughts on his station with his relatives. There aren't those wild extremes one might find in other stories, in which everything is absolutely terrible and snape is either a heartless man or an immediately compassionate one. I do wonder about how a mattress can fit into a cupboard. I'd always thought those cupboards were much narrower than the average twin sized bed.

    Author's Response: Honestly, until I encountered Harry Potter, I'd never imagined anyone sleeping in a cupboard at all. But Coleridge referred to the willing suspension of disbelief, so I'll go with that... Thank you for your compliment about "balance"; it's nice when a story works out like that, since I think a number of mine did not quite achieve that kind of balance. Thanks for letting me know! 😊
Title: Chapter 1 31 May 2015 1:13 am
Reviewer: Guest (Anonymous) [Report This]
    What a well-written, delightful first chapter! I especially thought the relationship between Harry and Dudley was interesting. It has so much more depth this way than having all of them being utterly intolerable to poor Harry. I do find it odd that Marge is willing to hit another person right in front of her boyfriend, but I guess that just tells us a whole lot about her character. I'm off to read your other chapters!

    Author's Response: Many thanks for reading and reviewing! Yes, under the circumstances, Harry and Dudley can present a united front. As for Marge, she perceived Harry's comment as a gross insult, not just in a personal sense, but also as a smear against her character in front of Mr. Lawson, who might take Harry's comment seriously, that Marge was accustomed to staying at hotels with men. So defend her own honor, she hauls off against Harry right in front of Mr. Lawson.
Title: Chapter 6 31 May 2015 12:17 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    Good ending. I couldn't imagine what he had in the box and how he planned on ending the relationship. Harry and Dudley must have enjoyed that scene.

    Author's Response: An earlier draft had Harry suggesting Snape give her that "gift", when Snape was asking advice on how to break it off with her. I'd thought of foreshadowing that moment, then decided it would work better to have Marge unwrap the box and have the readers see what was in there when she did! And only Dudley could possibly have asked WHY Mr. Lawson would give her THAT!
Title: Chapter 5 31 May 2015 12:07 am
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    Snort. Pee on Marge's leg. Snape must have enjoyed that thought. I liked the description of the wards. It makes sense that the house has to feel like a home for the wards to work properly. Won't be easy for Harry though.

    Author's Response: I couldn't resist! Marge would totally deserve it if Snape ... er ... lifted his leg, as it were. And yes, I was looking for a slightly new angle regarding the blood wards. They may be attached to Petunia by Harry's mother's blood, but 4 Privet Drive is supposed to be his home, whether the Dursleys want him there or not. As long as Harry focuses on the house, instead of the people, it will continue to work for him.
Title: Chapter 4 30 May 2015 11:57 pm
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    Snape will be glad to get out of an evening with Marge after all the simpering. At least he knew who actually made the lunch.

    Author's Response:

    It speaks volumes that Snape would find it preferable to spend an evening in the company of Harry Potter than that of Marge Dursley! When Snape praises the lunch to Petunia, it's actually a sideways compliment to Harry, but Harry is too ticked off to quite assimilate that! Of course, Snape would never be so effusive to Harry himself-- praise might go to the Gryffindor's head...

     

     

     

Title: Chapter 3 30 May 2015 11:47 pm
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    It sounds like this has been an eye opener for Snape. And since he, as Marge's boyfriend, is a valued guest, Harry will likely be treated even worse as they try to keep him out of sight.

    Author's Response: Yes, Snape is definitely having to revise some of his previous assumptions about Harry after observing life at the Dursley household. Just one evening in their company and he already has a lot of information to collate. Wonder what he'll do with it...
Title: Chapter 6 30 May 2015 11:44 pm
Reviewer: Hesperis (Anonymous) [Report This]
    LoL :D Good story! :D

    Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed it! I loved writing it! 😊 Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Title: Chapter 2 30 May 2015 11:40 pm
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    That was such a funny chapter! At least Ripper got his exercise. I wonder if Snape will hex the little bugger before he leaves? I'm also wondering how much of Marge he will put up with? Dumbledore should owe him big-time after this.

    Author's Response: Ripper just begs to be used! So I used him shamelessly! I've had a couple of dogs pee on my leg, and one cat!, and it's so gross... I figured Ripper would pull out all the stops when it came to Snape, so I unleashed the critter and let him run absolutely WILD! This chapter was so fun to write! And (not to give anything away) Ripper isn't done yet... As for Marge, well, you'll get there! Ha!

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